67% Discounted

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I stubbed my cigarette,
Naked I walk.
On a broken trail,
In the noise of a monologue.
Truth is a product,
I bought 'it' on discount.
Applauding myself in soliloquy,
On the bargain so profound.
25% thrashed, for the world so corrupt,
15% more for shredding peer's trust.
10% lost in commercialization wave,
15% goes to how we behave.
2% is the surcharge,
For making life unbelievingly large.
Go, add your reasons for heavier rebate,
No one cares about truth, of late.
Wait! I found what's bothering me inside,
Killing me for buying the stale lot.
Wiser men stayed away,
What I grabbed, no one ever bought.

*Read the footnote here
Location: Hackensack, NJ, USA

Comments

  1. AnonymousMarch 10, 2013 at 12:56 PM

    A chilling look at consumerism and politics.

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  2. Surbhi BafnaMarch 10, 2013 at 1:12 PM

    Ahha!!! What an insighful post. Reading the title I thought it's some promotional post of some product.:P But whoaa! You have so precisely scribbled about the truth bought on discount. I'm first time here to thank you for reading me at Indivine. Thank-you :)
    Silly Smiles... Take you Miles :)

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  3. HemantMarch 10, 2013 at 1:16 PM

    What do I say here....I daily have debate on this 'The Truth' with my family and friends....I always tell them that Truth is not what is visible....it's an illussion...
    another nice way to describe truth..

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 11, 2013 at 1:16 PM

      Going by what is happening all around us, we can say that truth is nothing more than an illusion. Thanks for reading Hemant.

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  4. PrashanthMarch 10, 2013 at 1:17 PM

    Awesome Saru...:) The value of truth is lost. It sure scary, but hope that this commercialisation of truth stops.

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 11, 2013 at 1:25 PM

      I doubt that Prashanth, we are diving into it like never before.

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  5. odyzzMarch 10, 2013 at 1:18 PM

    Calculations all around..May it be anything..from emotions to relations ,from products to humans,from truth to fiction..Deep insightful poem indeed ..I second Surbhi..

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  6. The girl in the veilMarch 10, 2013 at 1:25 PM

    Stupendous!!!
    Bravo!! :)

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  7. ओंकारनाथ मिश्र March 10, 2013 at 1:46 PM

    "Truth is a product"...Deep words!

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  8. RiàMarch 10, 2013 at 1:53 PM

    Awesome!! So insightful and so true!

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  9. RickieMarch 10, 2013 at 2:54 PM

    Well, that is one explanation of what is happening with truth today, isn't it? Sad are the state of affairs. But, of course, who has the time to look at the mirror?
    If you don't mind my saying - shouldn't it be 'of late' rather than 'off late'?

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 11, 2013 at 2:11 PM

      Nobody, we are busy in the mindless pursuit. Thanks for pointing the error and I never mind. :)

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  10. ASMarch 10, 2013 at 5:27 PM

    amazing! i loved the concept...keep writing dear :)

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  11. Found In FolsomMarch 10, 2013 at 7:35 PM

    Truth!! always painful..

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  12. AnonymousMarch 11, 2013 at 12:12 AM

    Beautiful, powerful and I can feel the depth in those words.
    Hats off, Saru! Love reading your poems.

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  13. Rahul BhatiaMarch 11, 2013 at 2:14 AM

    Imagine the real worth when 67% is on discount. Nice one Saru:)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 11, 2013 at 2:18 PM

      Value of truth is always great but sadly, we fail to acknowledge it. Thanks for reading Sir.

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  14. AkankshaMarch 11, 2013 at 3:25 AM

    Good one Saru. So insightful and power packed words.

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  15. RachnaMarch 11, 2013 at 4:06 AM

    Profound! Well said.

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  16. raMarch 11, 2013 at 4:07 AM

    the real value of truth is lost forever .. what truth is present today is no truth but all fake!

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  17. Red HandedMarch 11, 2013 at 5:38 AM

    A little bit spooky...but reality isnt it.

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  18. Saurabh ChawlaMarch 11, 2013 at 6:45 AM

    simply poweful :) loved it Saru :)

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  19. The MukhtiarsMarch 11, 2013 at 8:59 AM

    awesome post

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  20. Dark KnightMarch 11, 2013 at 9:52 AM

    Excellent concept about politics and consumer advertising. I'd curious to know how you came up with the percentages... is that discounted too?! ;-)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 12, 2013 at 12:43 PM

      Pretty much, it's just a work of fiction so I went with my instincts. If you want, you can add yours to it. :)

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  21. प्रवीण पाण्डेयMarch 11, 2013 at 10:32 AM

    वाह, पढ़कर डूब सा गया..

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  22. Gayatri SoniMarch 11, 2013 at 11:11 AM

    It's a reality in this dark world.
    Very Interesting! Loved it! :)

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  23. Writefully YoursMarch 11, 2013 at 11:16 AM

    This is amazing! The topic, the language, the rhyme...just everything...brilliant!

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  24. Manjulika PramodMarch 11, 2013 at 11:59 PM

    I was just thinking what all could be the reasons to add for heavier rebate... so much malice around
    So well thought and put across...

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 12, 2013 at 12:48 PM

      True Manjulika, there is so much malice around that we could actually get a heavier rebate on truth. Thanks for reading.

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  25. UnknownMarch 12, 2013 at 7:41 AM

    harsh truth presented so beautifully in words ,, awesome poetry as always and a seriously grt footnote ,,indeed world is getting darker by the day :)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 12, 2013 at 12:50 PM

      It is...

      Thanks for reading and appreciating it. :)

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  26. Chetan MaheshwariMarch 12, 2013 at 10:20 AM

    this is unique, good topic selection liked the concept

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  27. AnuMarch 12, 2013 at 12:19 PM

    And truth my friend, is always bitter!
    The words you've chosen are so apt and brings out a great poetry!

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  28. UnknownMarch 12, 2013 at 12:47 PM

    Very Well written..

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  29. RachitMarch 12, 2013 at 3:57 PM

    Insightful and beautifully written! I love how well you transcribe your thoughts so well! And +1 for the picture. :)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 12, 2013 at 4:40 PM

      Thanks Rachit for a wonderful comment. I too love the picture :)

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  30. AnonymousMarch 13, 2013 at 2:39 AM

    The bargain of truth..... lovely.

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  31. magiceyeMarch 13, 2013 at 5:03 AM

    Love your thoughts and their presentation! Beautiful!!

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  32. The MukhtiarsMarch 13, 2013 at 7:19 AM

    hey i have added you on google followers, add my site too......... thanks

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  33. Akshay Kumar GMarch 13, 2013 at 7:58 AM

    Such a hard hitting truth presented in a realistic way, Saru. That 15% blame/credit on us should be much higher because I am a lot more cynical in that aspect. It is our mindset that make us not believe what other's say. Our conscience is responsible for not trusting one another. Again, we are the ones responsible for commercializing everything.

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 13, 2013 at 1:40 PM

      Yeah, cynicism is pretty high, I witness it on a daily basis. For almost everything we are responsible, we have stooped so low that we want end results at any cost.

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  34. UnknownMarch 13, 2013 at 9:49 AM

    Truth expressed in written words...gr8 one Saru. Only daring writers can do that... :)

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  35. BushraMarch 13, 2013 at 12:56 PM

    Great one on reality and truth Mrs.Saru ma'am...I am so lucky to be associated with such a talented poet like you ma'am:)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 13, 2013 at 1:41 PM

      Pleasure is all mine Bushra and we can leave Mrs and Ma'am. We are good without that :)

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  36. Ananth VitlaniMarch 13, 2013 at 1:37 PM

    I just can say, Beautiful...

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  37. subhorup dasguptaMarch 13, 2013 at 9:47 PM

    So true, and so unfortunate too. Very powerfully written, Saru.

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  38. sibiMarch 14, 2013 at 2:34 AM

    We all live in cage. Only truth shall set us free! But where is truth?

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 14, 2013 at 11:56 AM

      Truth is the most endangered thing. However, in our hearts we all know what is true and what is right.

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  39. Nandini DekaMarch 14, 2013 at 3:21 AM

    As a poem it is perfectly written...but lets fact it...the world was designed to be a mean place right from the begining. It runs on the 'survival of fittest' principle, so lies, deceit, jealously etc negativity has been around since time immemorial and will be there even after we perish...and thats the truth ...lol ( donno if i understand what i'm writing myself )

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 14, 2013 at 11:59 AM

      I understand you but somehow things are becoming dark day by day. Remember when we were teens, how the phrase, 'I Love You' was sacred. Now it is the most diluted one. Strange, isn't it!

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  40. Vishal RathodMarch 14, 2013 at 3:43 AM

    True and very intense thoughts

    Travel India

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  41. T F CarthickMarch 14, 2013 at 4:25 AM

    So true, Saru. Nicely expressed.

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  42. SumeethaMarch 14, 2013 at 4:27 AM

    Nice one Saru and very true!

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  43. sushmithaMarch 14, 2013 at 6:43 AM

    Very well expressed saru !! Deep notes on truth..

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  44. jahidMarch 14, 2013 at 6:48 AM

    Haha Nice one :) But why 67? why not the round figure 70? :)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 14, 2013 at 12:15 PM

      2/3rd of every statement is a lie, that's how I conceived the poem. You can add or subtract your own reasons though Jahid :)

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  45. Raveendran NikhilMarch 14, 2013 at 8:28 AM

    What I grabbed, no one ever bought.


    True:)
    never thought this way :)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 14, 2013 at 12:15 PM

      Yeah, we fell for it. Thanks for reading Nikhil :)

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  46. AnonymousMarch 14, 2013 at 2:53 PM

    Similar to Megadeth's "Peace sells, but who's buying?" I loved reading your 'truth sells, but who's buying?'
    I like it that the author regrets more that she bought something unwanted rather than having bought something unique.

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 15, 2013 at 10:58 AM

      Sadly, people buy anything if sold in the right manner. Truth has lost its meaning. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading. :)

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  47. Megha SarinMarch 14, 2013 at 3:22 PM

    Great! Love your perspective <3

    love
    http://www.meghasarin.com

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  48. Cloud NineMarch 14, 2013 at 3:55 PM

    Wonderful..truth is so hard to get these days...

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  49. Khoty MathurMarch 14, 2013 at 6:30 PM

    Awesome poem and attached note, Saru. Very impressed. As for truth, all we can do is try to speak it and live it. As for others, it is enough to recognise them for what they are as most people appreciate honesty and get put off lies.

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 15, 2013 at 11:04 AM

      Deep within we all know what is true and what's not. Sometimes, we don't have the courage to speak it. As you said, we should try. Thanks a lot for liking the poem, coming from you, it means a lot.

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  50. bemoneyawareMarch 14, 2013 at 7:20 PM

    A glass can be considered half-full or half-empty and both interpretations are right
    Truth no matter how much discounted will still be truth. In our hearts we all that finding truth is not like shades of grey but it's simple case of black and white.
    Beautiful poem!

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 15, 2013 at 11:07 AM

      I totally loved your perspective Kirti. Thanks for reading. :)

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  51. ArnieMarch 14, 2013 at 10:44 PM

    That's what I call modern contemporary poetry. My number crunching friends would be proud to read this. Valiant attempt Saru!

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  52. PanchaliMarch 15, 2013 at 12:23 AM

    Amazingly true....such a poignant poem, Saru.

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  53. Himadri SinghaMarch 15, 2013 at 12:34 AM

    A profound truth !

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  54. Sri ValliMarch 15, 2013 at 8:12 AM

    Very true poem on truth Saru! Beautifully written!

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  55. Sri ValliMarch 15, 2013 at 8:14 AM

    Just wanted to know...Why do you disable comments for Quote posts? Any particular reason?

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 15, 2013 at 11:23 AM

      I write couplets/quotes which I want everyone to read and I post it whenever I feel like but I don't have enough time to reply to two posts in a week. Hence, no comments. Also, it's more of fun to me. :) BTW, glad you asked. :)

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  56. BGTMarch 15, 2013 at 11:57 PM

    Trust was, is and will always be stranger than fiction Saru.. Very well written yaar.. :)

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 16, 2013 at 10:35 AM

      I think all good things are vanishing from this world. Thanks for reading and appreciating Binu. :)

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  57. UnknownMarch 16, 2013 at 1:39 AM

    what a piece! you amaze your readers with every post of yours..

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 16, 2013 at 10:36 AM

      Thanks Pratik for an encouraging comment. It means a lot to me. :)

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  58. joshi danielMarch 17, 2013 at 3:55 AM

    truth is not so good looking ;)

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  59. ArtiMarch 17, 2013 at 4:39 AM

    Very true, Saru! Your writing is always hard hitting and profound and this one is no different. Great going. :-)

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  60. Jyoti MishraMarch 17, 2013 at 2:26 PM

    Truth is a product,
    I bought 'it' on discount...
    loved this... sometimes I wonder how much of our lives is controlled by mere numbers

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    1. Saru SinghalMarch 17, 2013 at 5:15 PM

      I think a lot of things are controlled by numbers and we are in a rat race. We have to learn to see the deeper meaning of life. Thanks for reading Jyoti. :)

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  61. MithlashMarch 22, 2013 at 4:44 AM

    Profound thoughts expressed beautifully!

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  62. Richa SharmaMarch 24, 2013 at 11:09 AM

    loved the way you have presented relationships..so apt to our current lifestyle and the way we deal with others around and yes with ourselves too...

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