i was the first girl you loved

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i may sound like drizzle
but i'm monsoon rain
the passion seeped into your bones
the love running in your veins

i'm that old cassette
you can never throw away
i'm neat whiskey
you drink after a tiring day

you've fallen in love after me
but no woman can rock your world
i'm the storm you chased
i'm the photo you burned

what if we meet again
...on cold august dawn?
would you pour wet kisses?
would you play our favorite song?

it was many moons ago
i still remember how i felt
your body weight on me
and how miserable i was when you left

but i take pride
as no one can love you the way i did
i was your 3 am phone call
i'm the first 150 pages of your manuscript

it was half-hell, half-heaven
the time we spent
it was too powerful to be true
it had to end

i bet you think of me sometimes
my memories have not gathered dust
we both know it was true
i was the first girl you loved


Comments

  1. M S MahawarJuly 25, 2017 at 1:43 AM

    I can't express in words that what I felt throughout the poem while reading it.
    One of the best poems I have read on this blog!

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    1. Saru SinghalJuly 25, 2017 at 10:18 AM

      And I am super pleased to know that. Thank you so much for reading, MS!

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  2. RajlakshmiJuly 25, 2017 at 3:07 AM

    I loved how you wrote this... There's this fire in your words... And if years later the guy reads this... That fire is going to take him down. ��

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    1. Saru SinghalJuly 25, 2017 at 10:20 AM

      I will start by saying - Mujhe bhulna mushkil hi nahi namumkin hai. :P

      Silly me!

      Thanks for an amazing reaction on this poem. It means a lot, Raj! :)

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  3. Ila VarmaJuly 25, 2017 at 6:22 AM

    I know your Man has read...:P Well illustrated...love Saru.

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    1. Saru SinghalJuly 25, 2017 at 10:22 AM

      Hope he understands the myriad of emotions behind it. :)

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  4. docdivatravellerJuly 25, 2017 at 12:58 PM

    Such a beautiful poem!
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  5. Anita SinghJuly 25, 2017 at 1:49 PM

    Bahut khubsurti se sab baat kahi hai 👍👍

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  6. Allwyn ThanarajJuly 25, 2017 at 3:46 PM

    Good one.. Heavy.. but beautiful poem...

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  7. संजय भास्‍कर July 26, 2017 at 4:49 AM

    खूब शब्दों में ढाला अपने मनोभावों को ......बहुत ही सुंदर

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  8. UnknownJuly 26, 2017 at 5:18 AM

    Your words have painted a beautiful picture of those ethereal emotions.

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  9. Neha AgarwalJuly 26, 2017 at 10:53 PM

    You do magic with your words.. Beautiful!

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  10. Vishal BheerooJuly 29, 2017 at 12:07 AM

    Saru! It's pure bliss and speechless seeing you painting the vivid emotions.

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  11. dNambiarAugust 2, 2017 at 12:16 PM

    Ooh! Light but goes deep! :)

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  12. K.A. AcharyaAugust 5, 2017 at 4:08 AM

    It's simply amazing, Saru. Love the way you've painted the power of first love.

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  13. AnonymousAugust 5, 2017 at 12:33 PM

    Loved this poem....

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  14. AnonymousAugust 9, 2017 at 11:19 AM

    Love love love..
    I am love with ur poetry..

    ~Piyush

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  15. UnknownAugust 13, 2017 at 2:28 AM

    One of the best poems I have come across, I'm not a writer or a poet but words that take me somewhere else is what I appreciate and this one clearly did, thanks.

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    1. Saru SinghalSeptember 4, 2017 at 10:28 AM

      This is one of the best compliments I've ever received. Thanks so very much for that, Aakash.

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  16. Amrit SinhaAugust 13, 2017 at 11:38 AM

    You have special power with words, whether you write short two liners or long poems, they always have that magical effect.

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    1. Saru SinghalSeptember 4, 2017 at 10:31 AM

      Amrit, coming from you it's a huge compliment. Hope thank you would suffice.

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  17. Tarang SinhaOctober 2, 2017 at 8:37 AM

    What a lovely composition, Saru! 'I'm the first 150 pages of your manuscript' - I can relate to this. :)

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    1. Saru SinghalOctober 2, 2017 at 12:09 PM

      If I may ask, how do you relate to this line?

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    2. Tarang SinhaOctober 2, 2017 at 2:23 PM

      Because I know what it takes (and what you achieve) to complete the first 150 (+) pages of your manuscript. It's special. So, I connected with this line. :)

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  18. Aarushi GroverDecember 13, 2017 at 10:01 PM

    This is amazing. Loved it. :)

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  19. Abhishek DudejaDecember 14, 2017 at 3:29 AM

    Saru, this touches the very sensitive string of heart. Deserves not just to be most read poem of 2017 but also one of best poem written ever by anyone.

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  20. Rohit_blogger at http://floating-expressions.blogspot.in/January 22, 2020 at 12:11 AM

    So beautiful, reminds me of the first and only girl, I have and still continue to love..

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