I Am Not Alone
Last year blessed me,
He walked silently into my life.
It was Love,
That took me in its stride.
One evening we walked holding hands,
Then, I told him what I felt in heart.
He said we were one soul,
Who were living in parts.
To bring the parts together,
We fought with the world and tied the knot.
Being one soul,
Gave life a whole new spot.
Chirping birds, floating clouds,
Nature conspired for us.
Always swimming against the tide,
Life was in an adrenaline rush.
This year cursed me,
He walked silently out of my life.
It was Death,
That took him in its stride.
Yesterday his soul was saying,
Fearing memories will fade, he can’t move on.
He will stay and admire me,
Standing always by my side from dusk to dawn.
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this is nice but one question why is that majority of your poems are on sad side of emotion??
ReplyDeleteIt's your understanding about the philosophy of life that generates emotions.Your deep emotions are impressive and touching.
ReplyDeletePlease, find time to visit my blog.
He said we were one soul,
ReplyDeleteWho were living in parts.
loved these lines.. simply superb.. if u keep writing such awesome poems i'll run out of words synonymous to awesome, touching, excellent and brilliant to describe them.. :)
I hope I can write poems lik these one day.. :):):)
take care.. :)
That was one nice poem..... Simple lines, not hard to understand..but felt it!
ReplyDeleteWhow Saru thats a very heart touching poem... I'm Just Loving you Posts...
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wow..u write very well.
ReplyDeleteCongrats for the century followers
Hi Saru, :)
ReplyDeleteI love this poem, its very emotional. Just curious, this poem does it really comes from true experience?
Just Waow ..
ReplyDeleteamazing.... loved it!! :-)
ReplyDeletelife outward flow... unstoppable, unconquerable.
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touching
ReplyDeleteSigh.. to find the other part of a soul and then lose to Death, it is quite saddening..
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Beautiful..I liked this line- "Chirping birds, floating clouds,
ReplyDeleteNature conspired for us"
It's so touching...:-)
ReplyDeleteMade me skip my heart beat at "It was Death"
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful and touchy..
ReplyDeletepoignant
ReplyDeleteSimply super! excellent one.. thouching :) liked it..
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ReplyDeleteVery nice indeed!
ReplyDeleteTouching lines. Beautifully written. But the end hurts!
ReplyDelete"He said we were one soul,
ReplyDeleteWho were living in parts" This was magnetic :)
You pen down some of the most soulful poems Saru Di :)
such a wonderful blog. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDelete@Skywalker- I just pen down thoughts dear, I have only four sad poems. Please check love poems and hope you like those as well. Thanks.
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you really blend emotions well :) nice one :D
ReplyDeletea beautiful love story in such a few words :) :).. your ability to pen it down is wonderful ..luved reading it :) :)
ReplyDeleteawsum
ReplyDeletejust keep it up.....
very beautiful love story......
the whole love story some have it in parts some just one
ReplyDeleteyou write simply but beautiful expression
HI Saru...very beautiful. I can see you through your words. Keep writing..I am following you :)
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Aww...Beautiful! Ur words are so soulful:)
ReplyDeleteSaru , once again very beautiful touching words and thanks a ton for dropping by my blog and leaving your comments. I loved your idea of bursting wrapping bubbles to get ideas ...brought a smile to my face. I may not be able to reply to all your comments but i truly cherish them
ReplyDeleteA very good poem. I think all poems are representations of what you are feeling at the moment. Super impacting!
ReplyDeletewhile the reading this beautiful poem ,just i was part of your beautiful thoughts or i would like to give the word for it full heart of soul ,and lost para was very nice philosophy of the live . what i say for this beautiful creation and i am very admire of your beautiful brain , i am very thanks to you to provide as such beautiful poem .
ReplyDeleteFor a few days my internet was down, I remember thinking about your poetry one afternoon and I gotta say, I'm not disappointed
ReplyDeleteSoul stirring words, delve right deep into the heart! Beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteWow, You've written it so beautifully..
ReplyDeleteI hope it doesn't happen to anyone!
Very well written, Saru.. Keep it up!
wow......... express so beautifully ........... love is soul of life .......... !
ReplyDeleteSaru... it is indeed one of the very good post and emotions... but very scary and breath taking to think and feel the loss of loved one... !!!!
ReplyDeleteAwesome dude....! :)
ReplyDeleteSimple yet powerful!
ReplyDelete"He said we were one soul,
Who were living in parts."
Gr8 Post! :)
Very nice...heartfelt love :) nice poetry
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Beautiful poem. Deep and moving.
ReplyDeleteAwesome! Very nice write up! :)
ReplyDeletewell I dont really read poems much, but seeing this one I cant stop without reading the full. Very good creation. All the best for your blog
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Wow! That was good. The rythm was excellent, the imagery was good.
ReplyDelete"Chirruping birds, floating clouds..." Pretty good. I also liked the impact of
"It was love
That took me in its stride"
and then
"It was death
That took him in its stride"
Amazing you used the emotions created before and then changed the flow with that one line
Good work
He will stay and admire me,
ReplyDeleteStanding always by my side from dusk to dawn.
Loved these lines..
Keep writing Saru.. really enjoy reading your posts :-)
beautiful lines...Your play with words is amazing....heart touching...
ReplyDeleteकविता खरच खूप छान झाली आहे. तरीही rhyming words ची पेरणी केल्यास तिचं सौंदर्य अधिक खुलून दिसेल.
ReplyDeleteतुमची परवानगी न घेता तुमच्या कवितेचं स्वैर मराठी भाषांतर करून मी माझ्या ब्लॉगवर टाकलं आहे. पुन्हा असा करणार नाही. पण भाषांतर आवडलं तर नक्की कळवा.
Hi Saru ~ this poem is so beautifully happy and then so beautifully sad ~ I do hope it is not from a personal experience ... I really loved it & I'll definitely be back to read more! Thanks for sharing :-)
ReplyDeleteOh nice poem but seems you are sad , who left? Him?
ReplyDeleteVery well written Saru. The gift of good expression in few word is not bestowed on everyone, it is a poet's privilege. Nourish it and keep using it, that is what it is meant for:)
ReplyDeletei loved the concept... starts and ends with a simple but momentous not, i just think the ending line could have been better, explaining why love took it, saying maybe like "death was jealous, so it took it in its stride" i would have loved that...
ReplyDeletebut saying thta... u have this power, i dont know how but u have this power to say just simple lines and say so many things, i get ur emotion now, i get it... and i have to say wow... WOW... that was an amazing end... i love it... i really do... awesome effort ya really... :) :D
I loved the last lines though completely... its like ur signature which leaves with a thought for the reader's mind :)
take care and keep writing...........
Very nice written. keep it up plz..
ReplyDeleteyou are such a great writer ...
ReplyDeleteSuch beautiful words!
ReplyDelete@~*Lady Fiona*~- Thankfully, it's just an imagination. Thanks for liking it and I need your support!
ReplyDelete@Angel- No, I'm not sad. It's just a thought which I presented in the form of poem. Thanks for liking it!
@Satish Mutatkar- Thank you Sir and your words are very encouraging.
@Thousif Raza- Thanks Thousif, your thought about highlighting Death's arrival and cause is superb. Actually, I wanted to use same lines with some changes. I can use your thought in my next poem. I have say again that your comments make my day:)
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U made me cry!! such soulful words
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ReplyDeletethis was lovely and inspiring.
ReplyDeleteamazing poem .. words are rally touching ..
ReplyDeleteआभार
विजय
कृपया मेरी नयी कविता " फूल, चाय और बारिश " को पढकर अपनी बहुमूल्य राय दिजियेंगा . लिंक है : http://poemsofvijay.blogspot.com/2011/07/blog-post_22.html
wow...
ReplyDeleteamazingly executed... tremendous... :)
am also not alone... :) :(
ReplyDeleteone word-'beautiful',won't say more or i'll ruin it.
ReplyDeleteThis is something I can't say anything, just read and feel the emotions behind the words
ReplyDeletePure & Perfect :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent poem.
Warm toned it is, touching the heart directly. Awesome!
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ReplyDeleteI just loved it!
A tragic one but another masterpiece from you :)...
ReplyDelete@Saru Ma'am: Awesomely written...and thats what make me ur fan...u say so many things with few and simple words....and deep meaning..I have to learn a lot from you....
ReplyDeleteA gr88 poem :)
Great poem. Touching.Thanks
ReplyDeleteSad but a wonderful poem ... God be with you ┼
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ReplyDeletethat was anazing...
ReplyDeleteDespite the sadness in the poem, I like the way it ended.. With hope, faith and simply undying love... Beautiful!
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Cool Poem... thanks for sharing.. keep it up...
ReplyDeletesimple words depicting love.. beautiful...
ReplyDeletetouched! simply touched!
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ReplyDeleteLoved it... :)
ReplyDeletewell after reading this post, i feel like i should suggest one of my friends who also writes poetry, but is afraid to show her works.....
ReplyDeletea good one simple but touching...nywyz thanks for the passive advice..:-)
Does it have something to do with losing a loved one?
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. Heartfelt. Emotional. :)
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Beautiful poem. The pain and love communicated with admirable simplicity.
ReplyDeleteVery Touchy...loved it.
ReplyDeleteNice one...Its always lovely when someone walks into our life and its very hard when they walk out of our life...
ReplyDeletePainfully beautiful.
ReplyDeleteMay I say Saru that your this post is now of 99.
ReplyDeleteMeans about to complete a century.
I wish it to be 100. What do you say ?
Your reply would surely make it so.
Thank you Saru.
ReplyDeleteYou are so smart.
Never mind.
Now.with this comment your post is of 100.
Congratulations.
The comments - both quantitative and qualitative says it all!The comments - both quantitative and qualitative says it all!
ReplyDeletei believe in two mortals having the same soul. it hurts when i read the poem, again and again. it reminds me of myself.
ReplyDeleteand anyway, the poem was wonderful, i do a mistake if i don't say that it is also melancholic.
Epilogue...
ReplyDeleteIn vain we roared; in vain we tried
To rouse her into laughter,
Her pensive glances wandered wide
From orchestra to rafter -
"Tier upon Tier" she said, and sighed;
And silence followed after
.....Melencholetta
Very touching,i feel for you.It's good to ofload emotions through writing.In a way it grants catharsis. But then it also makes one morose &lengthens the suffering.Do you agree?
ReplyDeleteReally touching. Awesome composition. Keep writing poems like this :-)
ReplyDeletenice work...loved the read
ReplyDeleteIt's lovely, really! Rocks the emotion.
ReplyDeleteI cant comment on this post jus by typing words....
ReplyDeleteMy immediate reaction after reading this is SILENCE. Silence speaks more than words. :)
Really awesome! soulful!
ReplyDelete@Sameera- Thanks and means a lot coming from a writer like you...
ReplyDelete@Amar S.K- Thanks :)
@Remya- True dear, losing someone close to you is very painful...
@leoPaw- Thanks...
@Rakesh Kumar- Thank you Sir for your invaluable comment. These days to reduce the count of my own comments in a post, I club the earlier replies with the new. So, with your comment count will increase. I'll copy my previous reply and paste it along with new reply. Count still remains at 99 Sir :)
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very touching
ReplyDeleteBeautiful creation..your poem brings out many emotions at the same time :)
ReplyDeleteThis is BEAUTIFUL! The beginning sounded like MY story! :) But then it had a twist in it...very well written!
ReplyDeleteThe simplicity is overwhelming
ReplyDeleteSuperlike!!!!
ReplyDeletesimple and touching...
ReplyDeletesuch a beautiful poem.....
ReplyDeleteGot tears in my eyes...
Very well written! The words express the emotions beautifully!
ReplyDeleteI read it only today...stunning poem! Great one Saru...
ReplyDeleteFirst time here... Came across this very late... literally got carried away by the words. simple yet poignant. Got a lump in my throat.. Kudos!!!
ReplyDeleteThat was touching....Awesomely written :) Happy Blogging Saru :)
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Nice Write...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and appreciating...:)
Delete@Saru: Fantastic.. "He said we were one soul, Who were living in parts.." brilliant lines..
ReplyDeleteThank you Adam, means a lot coming from you...:)
DeleteHe said we are one soul living in parts-WOWW!:) What a line!! I just love the imagery you created in my mind though its sad in the end!
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting on my blog Saru! sweet of you to have taken the time out to do that! :)
i'm your new follower!! :)
Thanks dear for reading the poems and admiring...:)
DeleteAmazing but sad !!
ReplyDeletekeep writing
Thank you Rahul!
Deletepain beautifully expressed ,heartfelt
ReplyDeleteThanks Alka :)
Deletei guess this is the other side of being a poet.. Dreaming & then regressing!!
ReplyDeleteYeah...Being a poet you can dwell on any thought. With words, even regression looks amazing!
Deletebeautiful:) very well written!!
ReplyDeleteThank you dear...:)
Deletehurts to read it...this reader almost does not want the ending--want to hold on to the hope that the first few lines bring...will you write one where hope never ends?
ReplyDeleteI will try Bhavana...Thanks for bringing a positive spark in this poem...:)
Deleteas bhavana said..i just didnt want an ending....its just so tragically beautiful......I would appreciate and be eager to know your view on my poems to on my blog.
ReplyDeleteI just loved this one and thanks a lot for sharing your writing.....
I will try and thanks for reading. Will sure read your work.
DeleteThank you for reading my work...but I just cant get over this beautiful poem was reading it again now
DeleteThats so sweet of you...:)
DeleteSTILL GLUED MADAM....JUST SO IN AWE OF THIS POEM
DeleteAwww...again thats really sweet of you :)
Deleteseriously mahn!!! awesome work! :D m gonna learn a lot from u! :D :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Krishaal. I guess the better way to say is that we both will learn from each other...:)
DeleteReally emotional, liked it a lot!
ReplyDeleteThanks dear:)
DeleteBeautiful Poem. :) And some people have mentioned about the prominence of sadistic nature in your poems, I don't know about them but according to me, poems are better framed on negative emotions. Once again, Beautiful Poem. keep up the good work. I hope to write as good as you some day. :)
ReplyDeleteI agree, poems that dwell on negative emotions have so much to say. And, believe me if I can write, anyone can write. With so much understanding of life you can definitely write way better than me. Thank you so much for reading and your beautiful comment.
DeleteWelcome here :)
nice work ....
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Deleteaww...I wish they are only words...a person is so sad and you don't make it look all that bad..how sweet..
ReplyDeleteYou know this is the first poem which helped me in gaining audience. I feel so connected to it. I am glad after reading such a positive comment from you :)
DeleteVery touching poem and it invokes emotions while reading. Keep it up !! :) :)
ReplyDeleteThanks dear and welcome here...:)
DeleteBeautiful and yet sad... Nice work :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Neha.:)
DeleteIt's beautiful!!! Loved the way you described the arrival and departure of true love.
ReplyDeleteMiracles Happen!
Thanks dear. Love stays I guess, no matter what happens.
DeleteAwesome.. love it.. Love stays forever..
ReplyDeleteThanks Dipthi:)
DeleteQuite a poem, a sad ending though.
ReplyDeleteI agree but thankfully it's just an expression. Thanks for reading Shalu:)
DeleteSo sad and touching, conveyed powerfully....
ReplyDeleteThank you Sreeja :)
Deleteu conveyd ur feelings so well that i can feel ur(!) heartache...
ReplyDeletewell expressed poem saru ji.
anu
Thank you so much Anu :)
DeleteHeart touching!!!!
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Deleteheart touching...again awwsomEE
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Deletedepicting feelings unsaid before....
ReplyDeleteHope you liked it Gayatri...
DeleteNice poem. Liked it :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
Delete"Forever is a long time. But I wouldn't mind spending it by your side."
ReplyDeletepretty nice poem.. had d feel to it..
Thanks Pratik :)
DeleteNice poem :) I loved reading it..But felt so sad at the end..Visit my blog and read my poems too
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Deletehi saru...what i liked again in ur creation...its ends wid hope...ya hope not to give up...keep writing saru..lot more to here 4m u!!!
ReplyDeleteHope is something which keeps us alive in times of stress.Thanks for reading dear :)
DeleteWhat an expression !!!
ReplyDeleteI am lately becoming fan of your posts !!!
I wish I had been here earlier !!
Beautiful !!!
Happy Blogging !!!
Thanks Ankit, it's such a motivating comment :)
Deleteclean and simple...easy to understand...i am gonna read al your other posts:-)
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Deletevery creative........
ReplyDeleteVery touching poem! Very well written.
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Thank you Himani!
Deletegood one
ReplyDeleteA lend of being happy and sad at the same moment. Touching!
ReplyDeleteI meant blend sorry for the typo error :)
ReplyDeleteNo problems, we can read the tyops very efficiently Saurabh. Thanks for reading :)
DeleteGood one :)
ReplyDeleteDo i have words to tell you what i just read ? Lost in the feel of the poem. Keep writing even do over time i tell you. Dont eat, sleep just write Saru.
ReplyDeletethat is way to touching and emotional... could actually feel the emotions.. loved it
ReplyDeleteHi, i am new to blogging. Have to learn as to how to portray such ingrained emotions with such simplicity from your work. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteYour poem got a touch. Good One.
ReplyDeleteyeah ... am not alone...!!!
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