Barren Life

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I could be wrong,
As I’ve always been.
Treading the less traveled path,
I've some unanswered questions within.
Some black and white memories
Some wounded old dreams.
Feels like,
Dragging this body for centuries.
Tired of getting up after every crumple,
I laugh with my eyes bleeding,
Can I get some rest, some rest on your shoulder?
I could be alone,
As I’ve always been.

Comments

  1. ManaliSeptember 25, 2011 at 10:52 AM

    There are memories, grey memories too.
    As usual, a brilliant piece!

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  2. AnandSeptember 25, 2011 at 12:25 PM

    Its a darker side of life and only a reliable shoulder can console the soul... As always, you've captured the emotion perfectly. :)

    "Feels like,
    Dragging this body from centuries.
    Tired of getting up after every crumple,
    I laugh with my eyes bleeding" - loved these lines... its so moving..!

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  3. Subhrashis AdhikariSeptember 25, 2011 at 12:39 PM

    I know that's not Saru...but a lovely poem indeed... albeit a bit dark...we all need that shoulder, we all need that rest...

    Cheers!
    SUB
    KHOJ

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  4. TaniaSeptember 25, 2011 at 1:05 PM

    Wonderful written!
    Picture looks like the most perfect place to take a rest.., but we all need a shoulder sometimes.

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  5. Realms of fantasy...September 25, 2011 at 1:11 PM

    Emotions beautifully expressed...once again a lovely piece from u :)

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  6. Jidhu JoseSeptember 25, 2011 at 1:34 PM

    nice poem ....all need a shoulder always

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  7. Er.September 26, 2011 at 1:43 AM

    Grey way. Blank verse, is the one and only genre of poetry I specifically like. Though, come on, now, you are good at it, go for some bright, cheery, maybe? Pointless being sad, eh?

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  8. induravisinghjSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:15 AM

    Wonderful written, as always you write :)

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  9. RVSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:18 AM

    Nice one Saru

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  10. Sahana RaoSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:22 AM

    The hurt sometimes, is the baggage that becomes heavy, the heart requires someone who can listen out or who can even lend a shoulder to rest the head.

    The feeling of loneliness wonderfully worded. Good work Saru.

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  11. Red HandedSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:24 AM

    Laugh with my eyes bleeding.
    Great lines as always!

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  12. Stuti DhyaniSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:54 AM

    'as i have always been'...some things never change,maybe we don't want them to..

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  13. RahulSeptember 26, 2011 at 3:42 AM

    Saru- Beautifully penned! A partner is what one needs to share the burden as there is no dearth of people to share the joy!

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  14. VertuSeptember 26, 2011 at 3:43 AM

    hey saru! nice post sweety.


    BTW, passed along an award to you!

    http://vivaciousblog17.blogspot.com/2011/09/kreativ-blogger-tell-me-about-yourself.html

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  15. shashi purwarSeptember 26, 2011 at 3:57 AM

    bahut si sundar likha hai saru ,
    love this line .laugh with bleeding eyes ..... ,
    har shabd me gaharai hai ,
    lonely ness bhi najar aai hai ,
    yado ke rang, saru ki lekhni ke sang
    ye kavita dil mai uter aai hai ........ :)
    beautiful..........! lonelyness

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  16. UnknownSeptember 26, 2011 at 4:58 AM

    It feels like someone leaving but not really sure if they should be doing this. Good one.

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  17. smiling soulSeptember 26, 2011 at 6:04 AM

    Some black and white memories,
    Some wounded old dreams.
    Feels like,
    Dragging this body from centuries.

    this is touchy! soulful poem saru!

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  18. kalpak n.September 26, 2011 at 6:13 AM

    SPEECHLESS. YOU'RE TOO AWESOME, MADAM. :)

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  19. Nasnin NasserSeptember 26, 2011 at 7:04 AM

    Despair! Reminds me of "I fall upon the thorns of life ,I bleed!"....the dejected feeling mirrored by your words is all penetrating...
    "Dragging this body from centuries.
    Tired of getting up after every crumple,"...poignant!

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  20. Siddhartha JoshiSeptember 26, 2011 at 7:07 AM

    I read it thrice before I could make some meaning out of every line that I read (or so I think) :) Or maybe that's the nice part of the poem, we can all make our meanings and enjoy it :)

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  21. chitraSeptember 26, 2011 at 7:09 AM

    i must praise the inspiration behind saru's poems lol..
    :)
    i'm sure thr must be one.

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  22. KunalSeptember 26, 2011 at 7:56 AM

    A winner all the way again... Perfecto..as it has always been :)

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  23. MenacherySeptember 26, 2011 at 7:59 AM

    phew.... u r brilliant when it comes to poems.. love it as a whole, and some lines esp .... its beautiful .. :)

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  24. ARJUN MSSeptember 26, 2011 at 8:57 AM

    Beautiful ............

    "Some wounded old dreams" -liked this line very much.

    Cheers

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  25. joshi danielSeptember 26, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    deep and nice!

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  26. Sandeep SagarSeptember 26, 2011 at 10:01 AM

    always Beautiful :D Even in Poems!!

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  27. Writing BeeSeptember 26, 2011 at 10:16 AM

    Lovely Di! And loved the last two lines. Just amazing!!

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  28. Rakesh KumarSeptember 26, 2011 at 10:38 AM

    Can I get some rest, some rest on your shoulder?

    Wonderful presentation,Saru.

    Your poetry touches the heart,

    making me speechless.

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  29. An Apel a DaySeptember 26, 2011 at 10:38 AM

    I usually have memories that are in black and white with splashes of color here and there.

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  30. MithlashSeptember 26, 2011 at 11:05 AM

    Dragging this body from centuries.
    Tired of getting up after every crumple........These line speak volume...writing with such a depth,I should say marvelous!

    I need a favour...kindly review my first poem..n dont hesitate to critize me badly..It surely will help a new born baby.:)

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  31. AnonymousSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:00 PM

    "Some wounded old dreams.
    Feels like,
    Dragging this body from centuries."

    wow! Super saru :)

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  32. swatiSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:17 PM

    Another brilliant creation from you Saru. Keep writing.. love your poems :-)

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  33. SameeraSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:25 PM

    Very nice. It is hard to compliment such poems. Words cannot do much justice to the appreciation the reader wants to convey.

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  34. Deepak DoddamaniSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:35 PM

    Gloomy stuff yet well written

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  35. Spiritual SherpaSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:38 PM

    life is one extended karma repayment plan:) most of us have been here...years ago under the same sun...felt the same breeze and even had the same faces with different names and circumstances around us...who knows what tomorrow will bring :) another nice piece :) with a dash of solace towards the end :)

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  36. ZebaSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:41 PM

    Wow. WOW. I don't think I'll ever be able to appreciate these words truly. That's how beautiful they are.

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  37. Akshay Kumar GSeptember 26, 2011 at 1:33 PM

    Very Beautiful and soulful yet simple :)

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  38. MyKitchen Flavors-BonAppetit!.September 26, 2011 at 1:43 PM

    Thanks for sharing WORDS depicting Emotional feelings of Luv and being luvd.Thanks for sharing it Saru!.

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  39. VaisakhiSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:03 PM

    every line was like better than the previous one...n all stitched togethr made it just beautiful...dark sad...but the end was like hope all over again....loved it...:)

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  40. NehaSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:39 PM

    Lovely write up Saru....

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  41. VinodSeptember 26, 2011 at 5:17 PM

    Tha Saath tera jabtak, ye aasmaan bhi na jhuka paya hamein.. Chhuta jo saath tera, jamin ne hi daba liya!!

    Saru.. my above lines echoes your message (in a different way) that support is wonderful element in the life, be it active or passive, and is needed by everyone!! I would rather add that even in golden times, one need someone to share!!

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  42. --September 26, 2011 at 5:51 PM

    Wonderful as always, Saru :-) Favorite line: I laugh with my eyes bleeding ~ beautiful and something we can all identify with at some point in our lives. I think darker poetry can hold such beauty ~ ♥

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  43. Pooja AbhaySeptember 26, 2011 at 9:16 PM

    When I read your poems, I wish I could go back to writing poems. But, errr, am bad at it :p Once again, soulful and wonderfully written 'words'. You have one more follower to your long list of followers:) Keep penning down such wonderful poems..

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  44. Blasphemous AestheteSeptember 26, 2011 at 10:15 PM

    Find another lonely soul, and be lonely no more :)
    It is all up to us that we need to carry life as a coarse luggage, or a wonder ride.
    Beautiful post.


    Cheers,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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  45. BGTSeptember 27, 2011 at 12:19 AM

    Wonderful !!! Smiling through pain truly defines life.. :)

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  46. Atanu ChatterjeeSeptember 27, 2011 at 12:34 AM

    Birds eye view!
    A passionate fervour..

    As 'Sachin' made a century but India lost the match:) best wishes..

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  47. magiceyeSeptember 27, 2011 at 12:34 AM

    beautifully expressed....

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  48. ArtiSeptember 27, 2011 at 3:34 AM

    Wonderful choice of heart warming words... :)

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  49. Hariharan ValadySeptember 27, 2011 at 4:39 AM

    Why this sudden gloom? But, as usual, very well written.

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  50. Sourabh K RaoSeptember 27, 2011 at 7:46 AM

    awwwww...

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  51. Neeraj KumarSeptember 27, 2011 at 8:46 AM

    I laugh with my eyes bleeding,
    : what a great line. A great post Saru.

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  52. UnknownSeptember 27, 2011 at 9:17 AM

    a very different one from u...but it was simply deep and beautiful.

    gr8 stuff

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  53. TeamgsquareSeptember 27, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    Everyone needs shoulder to rest .

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  54. In seach for peaceSeptember 27, 2011 at 10:59 AM

    Very nice! a soul touching poem...

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  55. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 11:28 AM

    look in to the yellow sky....
    wait for the raindrop to dry,
    a new dawn oh! so serene
    wait for the rain to wash the pain of yestereen!

    Wrote the same for another poem i just read...it also fits here perfectly...Seams to be a day of Introspective Poetry...Loved the composition.
    sunil

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  56. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 12:13 PM

    This was hardcore Saru! Everytime I read you, I think this is your best. Now I feel, the best is yet to come perhaps for you dig deeper by each one of your poems!

    God Bless girl....

    Love,
    Chintan

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  57. AnonymousSeptember 27, 2011 at 12:36 PM

    @Saru~~ Another touching verse...
    Way to go girl.... :)

    Love,
    Indie :)

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  58. What a life!September 28, 2011 at 1:46 AM

    Hi Saru... you seemed to have dug into the depths of a tortured soul who is attempting to reach out.

    Your words have captured a truth of life. However social an animal we may be, fact is we arrive alone, we leave alone. In between, we contact, connect, exchange. Brilliant.

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  59. UpasanaSeptember 28, 2011 at 1:55 AM

    Whatever you write be it positive or a little dark like this one, it always turns out so beautiful.You touch upon every emotion in a very detailed manner.Loved it.

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  60. Vikram Waman KarveSeptember 28, 2011 at 2:55 AM

    I loved the poem, but the title confused me...!!!

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  61. PoetmammaSeptember 28, 2011 at 6:19 AM

    Discovered this blog through womensweb magazine. Interesting - enjoyed many poems. I try to write some myself at my blog too.

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  62. AamiSeptember 28, 2011 at 7:53 AM

    Very touching words...

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  63. HarshaSeptember 28, 2011 at 9:03 AM

    Grim feeling, beautifully expressed. Loved it Saru! :)

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  64. AnonymousSeptember 28, 2011 at 9:15 AM

    beautifully expressed

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  65. AnonymousSeptember 28, 2011 at 9:21 AM

    this poem is a melancholic beauty

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  66. RajSeptember 28, 2011 at 9:51 AM

    Deeply touching (as usual :)). Very well written Saru!

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  67. Deepa GopalSeptember 28, 2011 at 9:58 AM

    O wow, movingly written...so well captured, Saru dear.

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  68. RahulSeptember 28, 2011 at 10:11 AM

    Beautiful...

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  69. AngelSeptember 28, 2011 at 12:11 PM

    GRRRRR ..what a beautiful poem ,can't resist reading it thrice !love this lines--I've some unanswered questions within.
    Some black and white memories,
    Some wounded old dreams.

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  70. Jyoti AroraSeptember 28, 2011 at 2:29 PM

    Really beautiful poem. Very expressive and haunting.

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  71. NasirSeptember 28, 2011 at 3:34 PM

    Wonderful !! :)

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  72. Swarna PemmarajuSeptember 28, 2011 at 4:40 PM

    Excellent Saru!! I just loved it!!

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  73. Kiran @ KiranTarun.comSeptember 29, 2011 at 12:02 PM

    Beautifully expressed :)

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  74. Abhinav rastogiSeptember 29, 2011 at 3:47 PM

    speechless !! nicely written !!!
    ~[A][B]~
    http://rastogiabhinav.blogspot.com

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  75. KPSeptember 30, 2011 at 3:05 PM

    Ohh.. that was wonderful.. the path to realization.. a bit dark and sad.. ! suits my taste.. :) loved it

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  76. Saru SinghalSeptember 30, 2011 at 3:44 PM

    @Manali- Thanks a lot Manali:)

    @Anand- Thank you so much Anand, we all need a support in our grey days...

    @SUB- Thanks Subhrasis:)

    @Spiderdama- Thanks dear for complimenting it.

    @Realms of fantasy...- Thank you :)

    @Jidhu Jose- Thanks Jidhu!

    @Arjit Srivastava- Sure and thanks for liking it...

    @induravisinghj- Thank you Indu!

    @Venkateswaran Ramachandran- Thanks RV:)

    @Spicy Sweet- Thanks a lot Sahana:)

    @Red Handed- Thank you!!!

    @A grain of sand- May be, life is very difficult and God gives you reasons to live like that...

    @Rahul- Right Sir and thank you!

    @vertu- Thanks a ton Vertika for the award, will place it on my blog. :) :) :)

    @shashi purwar- Thank you so much Shashi for a wonderful and beautiful comment :)

    @Aasiyah- Thank you!

    @sowmya- Thanks Sowmya...

    @kalpak n.- Thank you :)

    @Nasnin Nasser- I hope you liked it:)

    @Siddhartha Joshi- Yeah, I think that's the beauty of these poems...Thanks Siddhartha...

    @chitra- There is surely one Chitra...:)

    @Kunal- Thanks Kunal!

    @Menachery- Thanks for such a wonderful comment.

    @ARJUN MS- Thanks Arjun:)

    @joshi daniel- Thank you...

    @Sandeep sagar- Thanks Sandeep for a sweet comment :)

    @The life-a-holic- Thank you Deepthi!

    @Rakesh Kumar- Thank you so much Sir...

    @alissa4illustration- True Alissa...

    @Mithlash- Thank you Mithlash:)

    @--- Bagya ---- Thanks!

    @Ashwini- Thanks for the compliment.

    @swati- Thank you Swati!

    @Sameera- Thanks a lot Sam:)

    @deepbaazigar- Thanks...

    @India's no.1 blog- Thank you so much!

    @Zeba- Thank you Zeba.

    @AKSHAY KUMAR G- Thanks Akshay!

    @MyKitchen Flavors-BonAppetit!.- Thank you Christy...

    @vaisakhi- Thanks Vaisakhi:)

    @Neha- Thank you!

    @Vinod- Thank you Sir for such a nice comment...

    @Lady*♥*Fiona- Thank you Dear...Waiting for your post, it's been really long...

    @Pooja Sridhar- Thank you Pooja for the comment and following me...

    @Blasphemous Aesthete- Thanks Anshul!

    @Binu Thomas- Thanks...

    @Being_AC- Thank you!

    @magiceye- Thank you Deepak Sir:)

    @Arti- Thank you Arti...

    @Hariharan Valady- Just wanted to post this poem Sir, wrote it years back. Thanks for liking it!

    @Sourabh K Rao-:)

    @Neeraj Kumar- Thanks Neeraj.

    @Rohit Sareen- Thanks Rohit:)

    @Team G Square- True!

    @In seach for peace- Thank you!

    @sunilscove- Thanks Sunil, loved your recent poem...:)

    @Chintan- Thanks Chintan...Your comment made my day! :)

    @Indiana Amrita- Thanks Indie :) :) :)

    @Rajendra Swarnkar : राजेन्द्र स्वर्णकार- Thanks for the wishes Sir...

    @Anish- Anish, you wrote something so true and it fed me with some new ideas. Thanks for such a beautiful comment!

    @Upasana- Thank you so much Upasana...:)

    @VIKRAM KARVE- Thanks Sir and the title reflects what such a person would think of life when he is all alone with all the problems...

    @Poet Mamma- You're amazing, your introduction speaks how beautiful you write. And, thanks for the comment!

    @Remya- Thanks Remya:)

    @Harsha- Thanks Harsha :) :) :)

    @some unspoken words- Thank you!

    @blackandwhiteheart- Thanks and welcome here!!!

    @Raj- Thanks Raj:)

    @deepazartz- Thanks Deepa...

    @Rahul Bhandare- Thank you Rahul.

    @Angel- Thanks Angel for such a lovely comment!

    @Jyoti Arora- Coming from a writer, it's a big compliment:)

    @Nasir- Thanks!!!

    @Swarna- Thanks Dear:)

    @Kiran @ KiranTarun.com- Thanks Kiran...:)

    @abhinav- Thanks Abhinav and welcome here...

    @KP- Thanks a lot dear...

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  77. SprigBlossomsOctober 1, 2011 at 9:15 PM

    "I could be alone, As I've always been" - is the line that struck out to me for its poignancy. Great job, Saru!

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  78. the other side of meOctober 3, 2011 at 5:07 AM

    wow niceeeeeeeeeeeeee

    I laugh with my eyes bleeding,
    Can I get some rest, some rest on your shoulder?

    I wish I could write like that :)

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  79. AngelOctober 4, 2011 at 9:20 AM

    AS always your lines are touching ...

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  80. swatiOctober 5, 2011 at 4:44 AM

    nice one again.. :)

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  81. Jeena R. PapaadiOctober 12, 2011 at 11:37 PM

    Very nice.

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  82. Positive ThinkingDecember 8, 2011 at 2:40 PM

    Nice one

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  83. Saru SinghalDecember 8, 2011 at 11:30 PM

    @SprigBlossoms- Thank you Ananya:)

    @the other side of me- Thanks for the compliment Dear :)

    @Angel- Thank you Angel!

    @swati- Thanks :)

    @Jean- Thank you!

    @Rajendra Raikwar- Thanks!

    @Positive Thinking- Thank you:)

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