Tantalizing Hug

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I'm a prisoner of my own longings, he is unconcerned,
He compliments 'her' beauty; inside, I'm burnt.
When ashes of envy run deep in my blood,
He whispers usual melodies with a tantalizing hug.


Comments

  1. MiSeptember 30, 2011 at 10:40 AM

    What was that!! Wow..
    I must say...such a negative feeling put forth such beautifully... U are getting better with each day Saru..
    My Doggy Barks in joy again : WOW WOW WOW WOW!!! :)
    keep it up!!<3

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  2. MyKitchen Flavors-BonAppetit!.September 30, 2011 at 10:57 AM

    In my WORDS,Ur poem is Yumm and sounds practically sweet.A big Hugggg for U.Thanks for sharing.

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  3. Writing BeeSeptember 30, 2011 at 11:18 AM

    Love the poem, love the words. I truly wonder how you bring in such wonderful feelings in so little words!

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  4. Spiritual SherpaSeptember 30, 2011 at 11:19 AM

    This one is unusually deep...and brings out one of the oldest emotions known to mankind :)...another great one from your pen :)

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  5. Realms of fantasy...September 30, 2011 at 11:33 AM

    Awsome....bringing out so strong emotions with so little words... your blog is just so aptly titled.. :):)

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  6. Jidhu JoseSeptember 30, 2011 at 11:51 AM

    lovely

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  7. RiàSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:08 PM

    Wow nicely done! I really admire ppl who can write such beautiful posts. I m too bad with poems.

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  8. RVSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    As usual, Awesome words used to describe your thoughts.
    Seriously admire your thoughts...
    I don't think they have any boundaries.... Do they?? :)

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  9. AnandSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:27 PM

    Oh Saru... This is so deeeep... These are just 4 lines but convey very deep human emotions... Loved the beginning line so much... Hats off!!! :)

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  10. UnknownSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:30 PM

    very sweet!

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  11. AnonymousSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:54 PM

    So damn deep and touching just in 4 lines! Kudos to you :)

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  12. SameeraSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:55 PM

    Wow..the beauty of a short poem! Very well written!!

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  13. FirstTimeMotherSeptember 30, 2011 at 12:56 PM

    Depicting a small but a strong part of relationship between 2 people :)

    "He compliments" - "I'm burnt" --> ends with " a tantalizing hug"

    Like it !!

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  14. TaniaSeptember 30, 2011 at 1:16 PM

    So short but so beautiful. Made me think how simple men are..:-)
    Keep up your good work!

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  15. RahulSeptember 30, 2011 at 1:19 PM

    Loved the second line...

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  16. Pakistani TeenagerSeptember 30, 2011 at 1:26 PM

    W.O.W
    What a great piece.....i loved it!
    Breathtaking!

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  17. HemantSeptember 30, 2011 at 1:36 PM

    Awesome....depicting the true emotions of human being....Jealousy and Love...
    Splendid!!!!

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  18. VaisakhiSeptember 30, 2011 at 2:34 PM

    love is always accompanied by doubts and jealousy it seems...:)...nice work...

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  19. KPSeptember 30, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    What a nice contemporary verse.. and it hurts..
    Your words have always rejoiced me.. like morning coffee..

    This seem to be a different approach, and what can I say I liked it too.. keep writing dear!

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  20. Rahul BhatiaSeptember 30, 2011 at 7:09 PM

    Saru- Very well written in such measured choice of words!!

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  21. Preeti PradaSeptember 30, 2011 at 8:47 PM

    I luved it !!..A simple hug...can do wonders!..

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  22. --September 30, 2011 at 10:01 PM

    "When ashes of envy run deep in my blood" ~ GORGEOUS! You have a gift of saying so much with so few lines ~ love it! :)

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  23. An Apel a DaySeptember 30, 2011 at 10:28 PM

    I actually like hugs more then kisses.

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  24. UnknownSeptember 30, 2011 at 10:35 PM

    Ouch.

    But that was a nice poem.
    Quaint and spot-on. <3

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  25. Atanu ChatterjeeSeptember 30, 2011 at 11:55 PM

    No doubt!- surrounds a strong imagination,
    'She' burnt(doubt!); 'He's in agreement!.:)

    Surely! emphasizes Ur quality rhythm & words.

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  26. VertuOctober 1, 2011 at 12:30 AM

    Short and sweet.

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  27. RVOctober 1, 2011 at 12:58 AM

    Completely agree with you Saru... :)

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  28. Nasnin NasserOctober 1, 2011 at 1:35 AM

    Your poetry explore the myriad faces of love and its complexities! The lines run deep in my heart...lovely:-)

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  29. ShaifaliOctober 1, 2011 at 2:26 AM

    Dear Saru..

    Jealousy ...I never read anything beautiful than your poem on this emotion.

    :-)

    Wishes,
    Shaifali

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  30. HarshaOctober 1, 2011 at 2:30 AM

    Saru, what was that! I mean, this is a kinda negative feeling, a little complex, but expressed so beautifully. And in such a few words. :) Wonderful, wonderful, and wonderful!

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  31. SuKupedia ™ :) :)October 1, 2011 at 2:52 AM

    i totally agree with Shaifali.. never read something so beautiful on a negative emotion...very beautiful Saru :) :)

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  32. BGTOctober 1, 2011 at 4:47 AM

    Ohh.. So, is it a love triangle?? Or, am I missing out on something??

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  33. magiceyeOctober 1, 2011 at 5:08 AM

    beautifully woven

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  34. AnandOctober 1, 2011 at 6:16 AM

    When my heart likes it, my brain can't stop being generous!! And of course this would be the case only for the most deserving ones :)

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  35. sriramnivasOctober 1, 2011 at 9:08 AM

    Men are always known for their flattering chants and only a smart woman won't fall prey to it

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  36. TeamgsquareOctober 1, 2011 at 10:30 AM

    Smart words

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  37. AnonymousOctober 1, 2011 at 10:31 AM

    Love - so complicated! A deep poem. Well written!

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  38. AnonymousOctober 1, 2011 at 11:23 AM

    :) only you can do this in just four lines, and so beautifully :)

    cheers
    Chintu Singh

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  39. Stuti DhyaniOctober 1, 2011 at 11:36 AM

    yet again!!!

    ***whistles***...you have brought met to do it! :D

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  40. Quirky WritesOctober 1, 2011 at 11:46 AM

    that was amazing.....no doubt..!! love it... :-)

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  41. NehaOctober 1, 2011 at 12:39 PM

    Lovely words dear..

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  42. Subhrashis AdhikariOctober 1, 2011 at 1:06 PM

    awesome as ever...where do u get these lines from? you are too good Saru :)

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  43. UnknownOctober 1, 2011 at 11:22 PM

    :) I got seven awards for you.

    http://aasiyahrising.blogspot.com/2011/10/seven-whoa.html

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  44. MithlashOctober 2, 2011 at 1:33 AM

    Superb ma'am!

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  45. MenacheryOctober 2, 2011 at 10:36 AM

    awww... i so love reading your poems... you are simply superbbb ... :)

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  46. AnonymousOctober 2, 2011 at 10:44 AM

    very nice...

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  47. रचना दीक्षितOctober 2, 2011 at 1:41 PM

    Beautiful thought. Best wishes for navratri festival.

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  48. Mr.JovitaOctober 2, 2011 at 3:16 PM

    cant stp reading those 4 lines!

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  49. joshi danielOctober 3, 2011 at 6:32 AM

    beautiful!

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  50. ArtiOctober 3, 2011 at 6:49 AM

    Wonderful choice of words, Saru! :)

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  51. AnonymousOctober 3, 2011 at 7:23 AM

    Every Line you make...
    Every Word you spake...
    Every Feel you shake...

    I'm forced to read you...
    Awesome Saru... **Hugs**

    Love,
    Indie :)

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  52. Deepak DoddamaniOctober 3, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    Research team has to be send to you now, to study how can someone think such lines? :p ....fidaa !!

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  53. swatiOctober 3, 2011 at 12:47 PM

    bringing forth something so aptly in just 4 lines is a commendable job!! kudos to you!! u write beautifully.. :)

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  54. AakritiOctober 3, 2011 at 1:41 PM

    Its heart touching!
    very lovely post! :)

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  55. ZebaOctober 3, 2011 at 2:03 PM

    Oh my my. This one I felt. This jealously. Sigh. Strange ugly little thing. I love the way you have phrased it. :-)

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  56. केवल रामOctober 3, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    Lovely....!

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  57. Saru SinghalOctober 3, 2011 at 3:04 PM

    @Mi- Thanks Mi and come back soon, my LQ (Laughter Quotient ) is on all time low...:)

    @MyKitchen Flavors-BonAppetit!.- Thanks Christy for such a sweet comment:)

    @The life-a-holic- Thank you Deepthi...:)

    @India's no.1 blog- Thanks a ton dear...

    @Realms of fantasy...- Thanks for such a beautiful comment dear.

    @Jidhu Jose- :)

    @☆ Rià ღ- Thanks Ria, even I'm learning...

    @Venkateswaran Ramachandran- Thoughts come from heart and heart has no boundaries RV...I hope you'll agree...

    @Anand- Thanks Anand, you're always so generous with your comments:)

    @Rohit Sareen- Thank you!

    @--- Bagya --- - Thanks a ton:)

    @Sameera- Thanks Sam...

    @Reicha Ahluwalia- You did a wonderful analysis of the poem...Hats off to you...:)

    @Spiderdama- Thank you so much!

    @Rahul Bhandare- Thank you Rahul.

    @Rosette Princess- Thanks a lot dear:)

    @Hemant- Thank you Hemant:)

    @vaisakhi- Thanks:)

    @KP- Thanks a lot for a lovely comment!

    @Rahul Bhatia- Thank you Sir:)

    @The Perfect ...One- Right, it does magic...

    @Lady*♥*Fiona- Thank you dear...:) :) :)

    @alissa4illustration- Hugs are more warming and meaningful...

    @Aasiyah- Thanks Aasiyah.

    @Being_AC - Thank you so much Sir.

    @vertu- Thank you!

    @Venkateswaran Ramachandran- :) :) :)

    @Nasnin Nasser- Thank you so much for saying such nice words...

    @Shaifali- Thank you Shaifali:)

    @Harsha- Thank you Harsha...

    @SuKupedia :) :)- Sunita, I just read your post, delicious food is still in mind while replying to comments...:)

    @Binu Thomas- It's not a love triangle, he is admiring other female and she is jealous...:)

    @magiceye- Thank you Sir.

    @Anand- Delighted to read the comment Anand. BTW...Moving on...:):) I would say, Thank you. See your posts are always on my mind...

    @sriramnivas- Love is a tricky thing, I guess...

    @Team G Square- Thank you.

    @ladyfi- Thank you Dear and welcome here...:)

    @Chintan Gupta- Thank you PKTalli...

    @A grain of sand- Thank you Stuti XOXOX

    @Sneha Sunny- Thanks Sneha!

    @Neha- Thank you!

    @SUB- Glad to read your comment, Thanks :) :) :)

    @Aasiyah- Thanks Aasiyah for such a sweet geature, will place you permanently on my blog. I'm touched :) Thank you:)

    @Mithlash- Thanks Dear!

    @Menachery- Thank you so much:)

    @Krishna- Thanks...

    @रचना दीक्षित- Thank you and welcome here!

    @Mr.Jovita- Thanks a ton dear!

    @joshi daniel- Thank you Daniel...

    @Arti- Thank you Arti...:)

    @Indiana Amrita- The comment is so beautiful...:) XOXOXOXOXO

    @deepbaazigar- Deepak, when I read your rhymes for the first time, I was awed...And, you know better than me how to write beautiful lines.

    @swati- Thank you so much Swati:)

    @Aakriti- Thanks Aakriti!

    @Zeba- Thanks a ton Zeba...

    @केवल राम :- Thank you Ram:)

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  58. AgnijaOctober 3, 2011 at 9:19 PM

    Like this one very much.

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  59. Sunita SriramOctober 4, 2011 at 5:46 AM

    Relationship sooooo very complex and writing about it - is there a superlative degree for complex? ? Emotions running high....

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  60. smiling soulOctober 4, 2011 at 8:20 AM

    4 lines speaks a lot! :) very nice as usual!

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  61. AnonymousOctober 4, 2011 at 11:13 AM

    Jealousy was never so beautiful... you do have a way with the words. Really touching post :)

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  62. Kunwar KusumeshOctober 4, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    oh,it normally happens in love.

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  63. Kiran @ KiranTarun.comOctober 4, 2011 at 2:35 PM

    Painful emotions, yet worded so beautifully. Bravo Saru :)

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  64. Vikram Waman KarveOctober 5, 2011 at 1:09 AM

    Superb

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  65. A FineappleOctober 5, 2011 at 3:10 AM

    check this out..
    http://hollaarpitha.blogspot.com/2011/10/another-award-and-another-tag.html

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  66. प्रेम सरोवरOctober 5, 2011 at 5:59 AM

    Your expression is so nice that it has the immense power to tantilise the feeling of any sensitive man..Very Good composition.Please visit my post.. Thanks.

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  67. bemoneyawareOctober 5, 2011 at 7:42 AM

    Beautiful..Aren't we all prisoners of our own longings !!

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  68. swatiOctober 5, 2011 at 9:30 AM

    Beautiful Saru :-)

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  69. N.S.KirtiOctober 6, 2011 at 2:42 AM

    awesome as ever Saru ji!!!
    the pain is reflected beautifully :)
    love your words!!

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  70. Nitin JainOctober 6, 2011 at 4:08 PM

    Oxymoronish feelings !! Kudos Saru

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  71. Priyanka KamathOctober 7, 2011 at 7:21 AM

    This is such a heart breakingly beautiful verse:) It hit somewhere soft..

    This is very, very nice:)

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  72. Deepika VasudevaOctober 7, 2011 at 8:35 AM

    amazing :)
    tantalizing words..

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  73. The PoetOctober 8, 2011 at 7:27 AM

    Hello.
    A little jealousy in love is good..we are imperfect humans afterall. We must not le it consume us though, for it can & will damage any relationship.

    Very nicely done!

    Thanks for sharing & for following my blog. I always try to return the kindness & am following you too.

    Enjoy the weekend!

    Yesterday With You

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  74. Rakesh KumarOctober 9, 2011 at 2:22 AM

    How beautifully you express your emotions Saru.
    It straight way touches the heart.
    Thanks for the nice presentation.

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  75. Sunil PadiyarOctober 13, 2011 at 7:59 AM

    Very nice... Beautiful feelings and beautifully penned down... Cheers!! :)

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  76. AnonymousOctober 21, 2011 at 4:51 PM

    Sweet Love... :)

    http://loveisaspiritualforce.blogspot.com/

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  77. Saru SinghalDecember 4, 2011 at 1:57 AM

    @Agnija- Thank you so much!

    @specs buffy- Hope you liked it...:)

    @sowmya- Thanks Sowmya :)

    @klutzdiaries- Thank you dear and welcome here...

    @Kunwar Kusumesh- It does...:)

    @Kiran @ KiranTarun.com- Thanks Kiran!

    @VIKRAM KARVE- Thank you Sir...

    @Arpitha Holla- Thank you Arpitha. You made my day!!!

    @प्रेम सरोवर- Thank you Sir, I'll surely do...

    @bemoneyaware- We are...:)

    @swati- Thank you Swati...

    @N.S.Kirti- Thank you so much!

    @Nitin Jain- I searched for the meaning of the word, thanks for teaching me a nice word and for the comment

    @Priyanka Kamath- Thanks a ton Priyanka and welcome here:)

    @Deepika- Thank you so much Deepika and welcome here!

    @Andy- Thank you so much for your lovely comment!

    @Rakesh Kumar- Thank you so much Sir:)

    @Sunil Padiyar- Thank you Sunil...:)

    @J'D- Indeed Jay:)

    @Rajendra Raikwar- Thanks!

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  78. AnonymousSeptember 15, 2013 at 11:21 AM

    Very intense!

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