Love Compartment

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Two casual friends at a train station,
Bidding goodbye to their kids working far away.
Girl's father was worried about her,
So he asked the boy to accompany her all the way.
Boy hated it as he felt bounded,
He had to be agile.
He could have slept or smoked,
Now his journey was to protect a fragile.
Girl didn't like it either,
She could have managed on her own.
Boy was unnecessary trouble,
Her wish of quite a journey was gone.
Both were thinking it's for once,
They had to bear this pain.
But every trip for next three years,
They met again and again.
It became a vacation ritual,
Which neither of them liked.
Falling like pieces of a puzzle,
Life was then a confusing ride.
They don't know when 'love' happened,
Can't even recall going down the memory lane.
Not in a coffee shop, not in a park,
They met on a train.

* Based on a true story. Thanks to Rekha Gangadharan for sharing her parents' story with us.
Appeal for Irfan

Comments

  1. RajNovember 17, 2011 at 4:06 PM

    Such a sweet story. And beautifully written as usual. :)

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  2. Rahul BhatiaNovember 17, 2011 at 6:06 PM

    Saru, so good to see you back with yet another lyrical love tale!It makes it even more passionate being a true life incident..

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  3. डॉ. मोनिका शर्मा November 17, 2011 at 7:12 PM

    So Sweet.... Lovely story...

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  4. TeamgsquareNovember 17, 2011 at 8:54 PM

    Love just happens .

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  5. An Apel a DayNovember 17, 2011 at 9:41 PM

    It's crazy how we hate something that we grow so fond of. It was that way with my husband and I. He was head over heals for me. I just thought he was annoying. Then I opened myself to be friends with him. Then it was I that was begging for him to go out with me.

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  6. BGTNovember 17, 2011 at 10:08 PM

    Awesome love story Saru :) And very well written :)

    Bloggers Park

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  7. UnknownNovember 17, 2011 at 10:59 PM

    finally there is a real train romance story :)

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  8. Stuti DhyaniNovember 17, 2011 at 11:12 PM

    Awesome! :D :)

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  9. AnonymousNovember 17, 2011 at 11:29 PM

    nice love story...

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  10. Thousif RazaNovember 18, 2011 at 1:11 AM

    that was so sweet and beautiful... and cool.. and cute... ok i am gonna get all mushy... :P

    it was very nice :)

    <3'd it

    Take care and keep writing...........

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  11. --November 18, 2011 at 1:26 AM

    Such a sweet story and even more heartwarming knowing that it was inspired from a real life situation! :)

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  12. TaniaNovember 18, 2011 at 2:56 AM

    How sweet! Beautiful love story:-)

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  13. HumanNovember 18, 2011 at 3:09 AM

    Awesome story with a good message.

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  14. KunalNovember 18, 2011 at 4:23 AM

    When a touch of reality is added to the beautiful words...it takes the creation to dizzying heights....and that is where this simple and touching poem belongs!

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  15. magiceyeNovember 18, 2011 at 4:26 AM

    sweet tale!

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  16. Chapters From My LifeNovember 18, 2011 at 6:07 AM

    All is well that ends in love... ;) lovely poem

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  17. Atanu ChatterjeeNovember 18, 2011 at 7:30 AM

    Saru, very eloquently written,
    taken away words to comment:)

    Well-done!

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  18. சேகர்November 18, 2011 at 7:47 AM

    அருமையான பதிவு மட்டுமல்லாது, உரைநடையும் அழகு.

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  19. Writing BeeNovember 18, 2011 at 8:03 AM

    Loved the love in the love poem :P!!!

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  20. MenacheryNovember 18, 2011 at 8:11 AM

    wow reallyy.. how nice.. hmmmm ..i thought *happy endings* were rumours :P... beautiful poem Saru, i lov ethe way you write..

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  21. Pakistani TeenagerNovember 18, 2011 at 9:33 AM

    awwwww this is so cute ^_^ I simply adore it <3

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  22. Nasnin NasserNovember 18, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    How exquisitely you weave stories in this minimal way. It's crispy and cute! Enjoyed it dear:) Regards:)

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  23. Akshay Kumar GNovember 18, 2011 at 11:58 AM

    Very cute story. Beautiful as always :)

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  24. Sunil DeepakNovember 18, 2011 at 12:32 PM

    The story is nice but the juxtaposition of "kids" and "working" sounds strange - obviously they are kids only for their parents :)

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  25. SprigBlossomsNovember 18, 2011 at 1:14 PM

    Beautiful, Saru :) You made an inspiring life-story thoroughly memorable!

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  26. AnonymousNovember 18, 2011 at 1:21 PM

    It sounds like Suku's story too, a little though :) The train bit....Write for Suku too, no? :D

    And many congratulations for settling the house <3

    Please link this post on your blog Saru, or if you can please copy the text and link it to Irfan's blog?
    Appeal for Irfan

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  27. sriramnivasNovember 19, 2011 at 4:44 AM

    'Love emerges like a lightening and cools your heart like the summer rain; No matter even if it happens in the middle of the Sahara desert or a train journey or a ship journey, that's the way love grows and mesmerizes. Nice poem and I'm really feeling happy for this romantic train couple!!!
    From: www.sriramnivas.com

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  28. HemantNovember 19, 2011 at 8:48 AM

    Beautiful story woven into a poem.....u have a gr88 talent of playing with words :)

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  29. UnknownNovember 19, 2011 at 9:05 AM

    love is strange na. . . liked it. . . :)

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  30. RahulNovember 19, 2011 at 9:09 AM

    as usual.....I just have to dial 'saru' for awesomenes...:-)

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  31. Dibakar SarkarNovember 19, 2011 at 11:49 PM

    Absolutely brilliant... Both joy and tears for you!

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  32. Writefully YoursNovember 20, 2011 at 2:13 AM

    brilliant...and the fact that u wrote it based on a true story, makes it even better...!

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  33. Spiritual SherpaNovember 20, 2011 at 10:27 AM

    Great one yaar...life is so full of serendipity...or so it seems :) but actually whats meant to be...will only be :)

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  34. UnknownNovember 20, 2011 at 12:05 PM

    nice and offbeat

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  35. MyKitchen Flavors-BonAppetit!.November 20, 2011 at 12:19 PM

    Nicely done Love story(poem).Luv it

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  36. LeoPawNovember 20, 2011 at 12:47 PM

    Nice love story.

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  37. RajeshNovember 20, 2011 at 1:22 PM

    Perfect.

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  38. DJNovember 20, 2011 at 2:05 PM

    Thats really a sweet one and very honest writing......! :)

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  39. UnknownNovember 20, 2011 at 3:48 PM

    For they were destined to be together :)
    A beautiful cute story! :)

    Love, ~Moonlight~ :)

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  40. NishaNovember 20, 2011 at 11:01 PM

    Jab they met in train! Love happens... nicely written

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  41. Sujatha SathyaNovember 20, 2011 at 11:23 PM

    the inspiration behind your lovely poem is equally lovely :)

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  42. ArtiNovember 20, 2011 at 11:43 PM

    A cute little poetic love story! Brilliantly written :)

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  43. S.V.Sai babaNovember 21, 2011 at 12:19 AM

    Really wonderful post.Thanks for sharing such nice story

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  44. HarshaNovember 21, 2011 at 1:33 AM

    Aw! A feel good story Saru :) Penned beautifully. :)

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  45. Mr.JovitaNovember 21, 2011 at 1:53 AM

    i was just gona scream BOLLYWOOD! Wen i read the last line.. true story??? how cute!!:D

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  46. joshi danielNovember 21, 2011 at 2:31 AM

    lovely!

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  47. MalinyNovember 21, 2011 at 3:49 AM

    beautiful !

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  48. smNovember 21, 2011 at 4:27 AM

    i thought its story of hindi movie and in last you gave ZOR KA zatka its true story.
    thats great
    it happens.

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  49. AchyuthNovember 21, 2011 at 5:14 AM

    All you need is love, as the beatles sang :)
    Very well written, loved it :D


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  50. GowthamNovember 21, 2011 at 6:10 AM

    Every true love story is different and this adds to the list! Nice.

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  51. GeetSNovember 21, 2011 at 8:08 AM

    sweet :)

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  52. HarishNovember 21, 2011 at 8:19 AM

    Any love story that's true, is a bliss :)

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  53. Ankita November 21, 2011 at 9:28 AM

    wow!

    thats so lovely and so very well written :)

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  54. Aakash @ Love poemsNovember 21, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    Beautiful ... Very well jotted down :-)

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  55. Zach GeorgeNovember 21, 2011 at 9:06 PM

    Lovely! Something of this sort actually happened to my friend :) I will def. show this to her.

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  56. CharuNovember 21, 2011 at 10:38 PM

    This is so well expressed Saru. You are a great writer. We all know about such stories, but for them to make an impression and stay in our mind...that is what you do as a poet. Thanks!

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  57. The PoetNovember 21, 2011 at 10:50 PM

    Hello.
    This is such a lovely story.
    The power & magic of love...it has a way of creeping up on you when you least expect it.
    Well done!
    Thanks for sharing & visiting. I appreciate the comment.

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  58. AnonymousNovember 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM

    What a great story! And so well written.

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  59. Vikram Waman KarveNovember 22, 2011 at 12:04 AM

    Lovely

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  60. SeenaNovember 22, 2011 at 12:12 AM

    Hi there,
    What a lovely poem. Takes us through the train ride! And how exciting that it is inspired by a true story. Long live Romance!

    Beautiful Writing!
    Seena

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  61. Dr Himanshu RajputNovember 22, 2011 at 12:20 AM

    lovely....

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  62. Sunil PadiyarNovember 22, 2011 at 1:28 AM

    It makes me wonder - most often people who hate each other at the begining fall in love at the end... cute story expressed in beautiful 'words' :) as always... ..

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  63. GowardhanNovember 22, 2011 at 1:49 AM

    nice one saru.

    we never know really when it happens

    love comes like a full moon
    love comes like a mansoon

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  64. bemoneyawareNovember 22, 2011 at 2:00 AM

    Wow..what a love story..reminded me of "Jab we met" ..often love happens so different from how it is portrayed in movies...

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  65. anatreekNovember 22, 2011 at 2:27 AM

    Wow..such a nice poem..

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  66. raNovember 22, 2011 at 3:42 AM

    very fast paced...loved it!!!

    regards
    rahul

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  67. Jyoti MishraNovember 22, 2011 at 5:52 AM

    wow this lovely train-love train was so good..
    it was like a melody

    Lovely write up saru !!

    Beauteous :)

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  68. रजनीश तिवारीNovember 22, 2011 at 8:51 AM

    beautifully written ...a real love story

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  69. Anupama K. MazumderNovember 22, 2011 at 10:53 AM

    Very nice. Perfectly portrayed emotions.

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  70. Ruhani ChawliaNovember 22, 2011 at 11:15 AM

    very sweet poem :-)

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  71. AnandNovember 22, 2011 at 11:52 AM

    whatte lovely way of expressing a real life incident... liked it very much :)

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  72. AbhishekNovember 22, 2011 at 12:14 PM

    What a way to narrate a story .
    I am impressed : )

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  73. cNovember 22, 2011 at 3:39 PM

    Hi Saru,An Inspirational Blog award is waiting for U at my space. Come and grab it Dear.

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  74. Christy GeraldNovember 22, 2011 at 3:40 PM

    Hi Saru,An Inspirational Blog award is waiting for U at my space. Come and grab it Dear.

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  75. Kiran @ KiranTarun.comNovember 22, 2011 at 4:40 PM

    Love has so many definitions, layers, emotions and relationships. Beautifully conveyed :)

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  76. Rekha GNovember 22, 2011 at 11:12 PM

    very sweet poem Saru:) and the title is awsome:)

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  77. Rohit GhoshNovember 23, 2011 at 5:38 AM

    After a long time read something directly from the heart.

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  78. AjayNovember 23, 2011 at 6:21 AM

    really for the very first time, i enjoyed myself reading someone's blog !

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  79. RiàNovember 23, 2011 at 6:31 AM

    Lovely!!

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  80. joel fernandesNovember 23, 2011 at 12:55 PM

    really cute saru, could easily be the back script of a bolly movie :P

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  81. AshwiniNovember 23, 2011 at 3:15 PM

    So sweeeeeeeeeet :)

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  82. gmNovember 23, 2011 at 8:19 PM

    nice piece of art ...loved it matched the structure of the poem with simplicity of truth of life.:)

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  83. Saru SinghalNovember 23, 2011 at 10:33 PM

    @Everyone- Thanks for your wonderful comments...

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  84. AnimeshNovember 24, 2011 at 4:34 AM

    The stories itself is so poetic and your words have put more life to it.
    I have seen most of the successful love stories start on such notes.
    Story in pieces

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  85. Amit CharlesNovember 24, 2011 at 5:55 AM

    Could make out it was a slice from reality.

    Nice.

    keep it goin;)

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  86. AnonymousNovember 24, 2011 at 11:18 AM

    wow that's really lovely............. :)a unique love story....
    saikatmbka(campbuzzz.blogspot.com)

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  87. Chetan MaheshwariNovember 29, 2011 at 7:46 AM

    cute.....do you know why i read your posts, it just relaxes me...so simply written, with such a soft flow...

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  88. AnonymousNovember 29, 2011 at 8:19 AM

    This is such a common scenario. But soemthing like this turning into a togetherness for life is awesome! :)
    very beautifully put!! Loved it!! :)

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  89. swatiNovember 30, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    It reminded me of another love story which started with train journey.. very soulful.. as always loved the way you described this love story in simple words :-) Keep writing Saru...

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  90. JayanthNovember 30, 2011 at 12:58 PM

    Thought such things happen on the 70mm screen :) nice!

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  91. umashankarDecember 6, 2011 at 9:04 PM

    I am glad you revived the ballad.

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  92. Saru SinghalDecember 7, 2011 at 12:49 PM

    @Everyone- Thanks for your comments and feedback!

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  93. Jen..The Butterfly EffectMarch 18, 2012 at 8:04 AM

    Wow!So cute ! I always fantasized meeting "the one" on a train! :D lol!

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  94. UnknownApril 22, 2012 at 6:03 AM

    How immensely romantic! Loved it.

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  95. TheColorsofMySoulMay 22, 2012 at 1:21 PM

    Really a beautiful story.I like the flow of words.Very Well written

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  96. UnknownSeptember 13, 2012 at 2:56 PM

    nice and off-beat..
    did remind me of an age-old English classic where the whole movie shows a man and a woman getting to see each other at a station only.. nothing much in d story, but those times.. this was a classic.. couldn't remember the name though.. your poem is perfectly apt as d title.. although pardon me if I felt that it did lack the retro feel a little bit..

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  97. Saurabh ChawlaJanuary 23, 2013 at 11:54 AM

    sweet post! loved the rhythm part most :)

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  98. Neo ImaginationsMarch 23, 2013 at 6:40 AM

    Saru, You are worth a read everyday and i do find you everyday only to explore some more writer in you. Amazing an amalgamation of poetry with a story narrative.

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