Lost Abode

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I liked everything to be perfect;
Until one day I found.
Some poems don’t rhyme,
Some words don’t weigh,    
And some smiles always fade.
Unlike some happy faces,
These lips are now closed.
Drowned in the flood of tears,
They lost their abode.
Can I curse him?
For leaving me in the lurch.
Without even saying a word,
Abandoned me in this never-ending search.
A plateau of concrete,
Has his name with 'dates.'
Symphonies created by his memory,
Play low-key on my fate.
Each morning I bathe myself,
Then walk bare-feet, muddling my toes.
Inching towards my place of solace,
I decorate his name with a rose.

*Based on a story of a war widow.

Comments

  1. Spiritual SherpaDecember 4, 2011 at 1:14 AM

    There is always an emptiness in their eyes...an eternal search for an answer to that one question you have rightly brought out...

    "For leaving me in the lurch.
    Without even saying a word..."
    One of your finest works till date...

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  2. ManaliDecember 4, 2011 at 1:30 AM

    Brilliant.

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  3. Rakesh KumarDecember 4, 2011 at 1:32 AM

    Nice presentataion,Saru.
    Emotions touching the heart.

    You have forgotten my blog ?

    You promised,and so I am awaiting your nice words.

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  4. --December 4, 2011 at 1:38 AM

    So glad I saw this before logging off. I agree with India on this one ~ one of your finest and most beautiful, to date!

    I really felt it with my ♥ I used to feel this often when I visited here and I'm so happy to be experiencing the *beauty of Saru* in every word again. The image is gorgeous and PERFECT for the ending line ... needless to say, I absolutely LOVE this post from the title right down to the inspiration! Great job :)

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  5. kalpak n.December 4, 2011 at 1:46 AM

    brilliant brilliant brilliant one saru. Im not a fan of blank verses, except wen written by u :-)

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  6. kalpak n.December 4, 2011 at 1:48 AM

    acha saru...u'd aske guest post na...will u publish one of my poemz? It aint funny haan. Lemme know ok. Mail me on kalpak24@yahoo.co.in

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  7. SuKupedia ™ :) :)December 4, 2011 at 2:02 AM

    Can I curse him?
    For leaving me in the lurch.
    Without even saying a word,
    Abandoned me in this never ending search..... what a beautiful portrayal of emotion.. so simple so real.. loved it Saru :) :)

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  8. UnknownDecember 4, 2011 at 2:06 AM

    Keep them coming.

    Sorrow can be expressed in a few lines, but can hurt you forever.

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  9. ASDecember 4, 2011 at 2:14 AM

    touching...

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  10. AnonymousDecember 4, 2011 at 2:15 AM

    Very touching! Love the way you have written it :)

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  11. Pakistani TeenagerDecember 4, 2011 at 2:17 AM

    Excellent!
    Its so touchy i loved it

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  12. Cloud NineDecember 4, 2011 at 2:25 AM

    Soulful and touching...Very raw emotion exhibited beautifully:)

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  13. HemantDecember 4, 2011 at 3:03 AM

    Saru di!!!! you put all your hearts and feeling in poems...and i can not pick one or two lines which seems to be the best... infect each line carries the soul in itself....beautifully crafted with heart and soul of its own...

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  14. Rahul BhatiaDecember 4, 2011 at 3:16 AM

    An adorable poem with great depth. I find resonance of my past! Great work Saru!

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  15. SameeraDecember 4, 2011 at 3:37 AM

    Beautiful...... It reminded me of a poem by a friend. He has written the same thing, but his words are of the bereaved. http://yetanotherbard.blogspot.com/2011/08/under.html

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  16. Mishilicious MishiDecember 4, 2011 at 3:40 AM

    saru this was so beautiful that I want to include it in my next piece...with your name of course..can i?

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  17. AamiDecember 4, 2011 at 4:06 AM

    So touching.... Salutes to all those who became widows, for the country!

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  18. TaniaDecember 4, 2011 at 5:02 AM

    Very beautiful and touching poem. Love that last line. I think it is one of your best.

    Hope you have a nice Sunday:-)
    Regards from Norway

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  19. Akshay Kumar GDecember 4, 2011 at 5:33 AM

    So beautiful and touching. Another masterpiece Saru :)

    Some smiles always fade but your magic with words never will! :)

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  20. Atanu ChatterjeeDecember 4, 2011 at 5:51 AM

    In principle, cant be 'Reaction' of thought on "Lost Abode"..
    But your this post brings out new possibilities, like some others..:)
    Hope for peace.

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  21. Pooja AbhayDecember 4, 2011 at 6:28 AM

    So much pain beautifully portrayed...Soulful.

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  22. RahulDecember 4, 2011 at 6:45 AM

    what can i say??another brilliant gem....

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  23. MenacheryDecember 4, 2011 at 7:07 AM

    omg saru , this was beautiful .... how do you come up with one awesome poem after another ??? (seriously)

    "And smiles ..... curse him? "
    awww that was beautiful saru ...

    "each morning .... name with a rose" ...

    For me these were th emost beutiful part of the poem, i kept reading em again and again ....loved it saru ... :)

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  24. AnonymousDecember 4, 2011 at 7:15 AM

    A lovely and touching poem.

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  25. BGTDecember 4, 2011 at 7:18 AM

    Another one from your blogging stable!! Too good!! :)

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  26. Writing BeeDecember 4, 2011 at 8:56 AM

    I have always felt sad for those war widows.. It is just a tough time to pass...

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  27. Chetan MaheshwariDecember 4, 2011 at 9:02 AM

    'I decorate his name with a rose'

    liked the ending very much...too good

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  28. Nasnin NasserDecember 4, 2011 at 10:12 AM

    wow...that was so achingly beautiful Saru! I specially adored the beginning! So heart wrenching! Each line was a drop of tear;)

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  29. RachitDecember 4, 2011 at 11:21 AM

    it pinches deep in the heart :(

    Weakest LINK

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  30. Subhrashis AdhikariDecember 4, 2011 at 12:01 PM

    WoW!....it hits somewhere in the heart!

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  31. SoumyaDecember 4, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    WOW!! This just tugs the heart!

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  32. The PoetDecember 4, 2011 at 6:22 PM

    hello.
    This is poignant & oh so bittersweet.
    You expressed it beautifully & your image is awesome!
    Thanks for sharing & visiting. I appreciate your comments.

    I'm really, really sorry you weren't able to attend the Party. So many of the attendees can't wait for the next one. When/if I do decide to host another one, I shall make sure you get a personal invitation. I promise I won't forget you (smile). Thanks for showing an interest.

    My latest:
    Our Candlelight Of Love

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  33. डॉ. मोनिका शर्मा December 4, 2011 at 7:00 PM

    Oh ..Touchy Words

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  34. BhaktacharyyaDecember 4, 2011 at 9:15 PM

    The hollowness that conquers our mind is undoubtedly the purest existence of the Almighty.and such honest words are the most innocent prayer to Him.

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  35. AdamDecember 4, 2011 at 9:20 PM

    beautiful and yet, painfully moving at the same time.. His grave being her "place of solace" is a fitting end to the poem.. Well done :)

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  36. UnknownDecember 4, 2011 at 11:15 PM

    Touching indeed! Great work Saru :-)

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  37. Syed Ali HamidDecember 5, 2011 at 12:27 AM

    The last four lines are beautiful; good poem.

    Am in a hurry; will read more later.

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  38. Sandeep SagarDecember 5, 2011 at 2:05 AM

    She is holding the door open for him :

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  39. UnknownDecember 5, 2011 at 4:05 AM

    very soulful!

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  40. joshi danielDecember 5, 2011 at 5:03 AM

    touching!

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  41. Shesha ChaturvediDecember 5, 2011 at 8:53 AM

    very pure and very deep. For some love is all about living in it, no matter what!

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  42. :-DeeDecember 5, 2011 at 9:06 AM

    awww.. that was touching... and heart stirring. Well written!

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  43. Writefully YoursDecember 5, 2011 at 9:37 AM

    very touching!

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  44. AnonymousDecember 5, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    So beautifully written!

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  45. KunalDecember 5, 2011 at 11:29 AM

    This is absolutely heartrending Saru....

    And A very happy birthday to you.. :)

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  46. sriramnivasDecember 5, 2011 at 11:53 AM

    Every war has got its own story to say & dire negative effects over mankind; the words neatly capture the emotions and immerse the readers in a song of sorrow. Nicely written indeed!!!
    From: www.sriramnivas.com

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  47. Sahana RaoDecember 5, 2011 at 12:04 PM

    Wonderful poetry. Loved those lines!

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  48. RajDecember 5, 2011 at 2:13 PM

    Absolutely touching. :) Wonderfully penned.

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  49. AnonymousDecember 5, 2011 at 7:46 PM

    This one's a masterpiece too Saru...Indeed very sad poem :(

    //Each morning I bathe myself,
    Then walk bare-feet, muddling my toes.//

    Touched my heart....

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  50. UnknownDecember 5, 2011 at 11:46 PM

    "Some poems don’t rhyme,
    Some words don’t weigh..."

    What else can I say other than wonder about the poem and the song it sings!!!

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  51. TeamgsquareDecember 6, 2011 at 5:55 AM

    Very creative .

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  52. alka narulaDecember 6, 2011 at 5:56 AM

    very meaningful....love it...

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  53. A guilty conscienceDecember 6, 2011 at 6:42 AM

    its one great poem i must say.....i felt like its from some professional poet ...the use of unusual lyrics were good(words don't rhym and they don't weight)...loved it

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  54. LeoPawDecember 6, 2011 at 8:52 AM

    very touchy.. you can't curse them for they left for a better cause.
    Love those lines and the emotions it conveys.

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  55. Be_withmeDecember 6, 2011 at 10:25 AM

    Soul touching

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  56. RajeshDecember 6, 2011 at 10:54 AM

    Interesting.

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  57. AakritiDecember 6, 2011 at 12:08 PM

    SUCH A LOVELY POEM!!!!! :)

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  58. ZebaDecember 6, 2011 at 1:58 PM

    Wow. Lovely.

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  59. umashankarDecember 6, 2011 at 9:42 PM

    You truly have it in you.

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  60. KittyDecember 6, 2011 at 10:41 PM

    Just Brilliant !
    your words always touches the heart.

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  61. magiceyeDecember 6, 2011 at 10:51 PM

    beautifully expressed

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  62. ArtiDecember 6, 2011 at 11:23 PM

    Heartwarming and touching.. the words echo in the depths of the soul...

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  63. SwapnaDecember 6, 2011 at 11:35 PM

    Saru your words really made me cry. I could feel the pain of the protagonist. You have a very rare talent.

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  64. Sujatha SathyaDecember 6, 2011 at 11:39 PM

    touches our heart - this poem esp knowing that this is the voice of many a war widow

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  65. JitadityaDecember 7, 2011 at 1:42 AM

    very heartfelt words that plunge into sadness!!...

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  66. Ruhani ChawliaDecember 7, 2011 at 2:10 AM

    Beautiful!!! :'-)

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  67. Deepa GopalDecember 7, 2011 at 3:16 AM

    Loved each line, Saru. Based on a war widow, that really got me! Keep up ur brilliant work, Dear:)

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  68. AnonymousDecember 7, 2011 at 4:36 AM

    Great lines. They contain the essence of life. Life is a combination of both joys and sorrows. Perhaps, the sorrows outweigh the joys and yet they also contain a different kind of joy!

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  69. Mr.JovitaDecember 7, 2011 at 4:59 AM

    'Has his name with 'dates.''

    WOW!
    n
    :(

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  70. HarshaDecember 7, 2011 at 5:50 AM

    Very heart touching Saru.:)

    "Each morning I bathe myself,
    Then walk bare-feet, muddling my toes.
    Inching towards my place of solace,
    I decorate his name with a rose..."

    I Loved this so much!

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  71. GowardhanDecember 7, 2011 at 6:50 AM

    so touching one saru.

    I am inspired, i will soon start writing poetry in english

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  72. UnknownDecember 7, 2011 at 8:42 AM

    touched the heart. :(

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  73. Jyoti MishraDecember 7, 2011 at 8:52 AM

    that was so intense n just loved the way u started it.

    One of the best of yours !!

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  74. An Apel a DayDecember 7, 2011 at 9:11 AM

    I think we're all looking for that place of solace. Very touching in deed!

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  75. UnknownDecember 7, 2011 at 10:45 AM

    Wow Saru that was so beautiful...

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  76. IrfanDecember 7, 2011 at 11:21 AM

    Very touching One...!!!

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  77. UnknownDecember 7, 2011 at 12:19 PM

    wow ...grt elegy of a war widow , they really r symbols of strength ..very well written...

    after this serious poetry plz take out time and read my funny poetry plz... :)
    http://campbuzzz.blogspot.com/2011/11/exam.html

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  78. Stuti DhyaniDecember 7, 2011 at 12:36 PM

    Touching...heart rending..hopelessly inconsolable

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  79. MithlashDecember 7, 2011 at 12:38 PM

    Saru the one
    Reading her poem is fun
    Sometime this, sometime that
    Writing in Hindi or writing in english
    Both seems like fun
    Sometime it give me shock
    Only thing i want that Saru rock... Keep writing:)

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  80. UnknownDecember 7, 2011 at 1:25 PM

    You made me cry Saru....

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  81. Manreet Sodhi SomeshwarDecember 7, 2011 at 10:35 PM

    Lovely!

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  82. Vasumathi SridharanDecember 8, 2011 at 12:42 AM

    Very elegant piece of writing !

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  83. Ruchi JainDecember 8, 2011 at 1:08 AM

    Heart Touching poem. wowwwwwwwwww.

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  84. Vishal KatariaDecember 8, 2011 at 1:55 AM

    Heart wrenching indeed... But on a writer's note, the 1st 2 lines set the tone for the whole poem. Lovely...

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  85. Red HandedDecember 8, 2011 at 2:13 AM

    Like they say.....some stories have a bitter ending...and something NO ENDING
    loved how you wrote this...
    Beautiful...

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  86. VaisakhiDecember 8, 2011 at 2:42 AM

    brilliant work....very soulful....and a perfect blend of feelings....loved it...touchin write...:)

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  87. Megha SarinDecember 8, 2011 at 4:29 AM

    WOW! Great and beautiful poem. It is very expressive and powerful.

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  88. Prime AqueDecember 8, 2011 at 4:47 AM

    This is a very lovely poem my friend, I feel the sadness... you have the power, poetic!

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  89. Prime AqueDecember 8, 2011 at 4:48 AM

    These day I do enjoy my search for wonderful blog like yours, and this is one of the best poetry blog I landed! :) Thank you! :)

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  90. N.S.KirtiDecember 8, 2011 at 5:27 AM

    did i ever mention what a genius you are?? this was.... AWESOME... seriously AWESOME...

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  91. AnonymousDecember 8, 2011 at 6:01 AM

    Aww..such a lovely poem, it depicts sadness with such clarity that you are able to connect with your readers through the feelings hidden in the poem itself.
    Great :)

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  92. RahulDecember 8, 2011 at 6:55 AM

    Really beautiful words..

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  93. shashi purwarDecember 8, 2011 at 12:07 PM

    awasome ......wonderfull ..........:):) nicely written

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  94. Life QuotesDecember 8, 2011 at 2:15 PM

    It was great, well written

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  95. Positive ThinkingDecember 8, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    Such a lovely poem, Hats off for your work

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  96. Mohd EhteshamDecember 8, 2011 at 3:40 PM

    Absolutely marvellous..! The ending lines seemed to be in complete synchronization with what went through my very mind.. :)

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  97. RamakrishnanDecember 8, 2011 at 10:45 PM

    A war widows pitiable plight - powerfully penned poem ! Beautiful !

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  98. Chapters From My LifeDecember 8, 2011 at 11:42 PM

    Very touching poem..

    I have an award for you on my blog, kindly check it out.

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  99. Saru SinghalDecember 8, 2011 at 11:58 PM

    @India's no.1 blog- Thanks and means a lot coming from you.:)

    @Manali- Thanks a lot:)

    @Rakesh Kumar- Thank you Sir!

    @~*Princesa Fiona*~- Thanks you dear and I treaure your comments:)

    @kalpak n.- Now, the world will see a great poet courtesy me...:) Thanks for your comment and guest post...

    @SuKupedia :) :)- Thank you so much Sunita:)

    @Kumar Bibek- Yeah true:)

    @AS- Thanks:)

    @--- Bagya --- - Thank you Bagya...

    @Rosette Princess- Thanks dear!

    @Cloud Nine- Thanks a lot!

    @Hemant- Thanks for a lovely comment dear:)

    @Rahul Bhatia- Thanks Sir, means a lot...

    @Sameera- I read the poem, it was marvellous. Thanks :)

    @Mishi- Sure, no need to ask Mishi:) Go Ahead:)

    @Remya- Thanks :)

    @Ashwini- True...And, thanks:)

    @Spiderdama- Thanks Tania...

    @AKSHAY KUMAR G- Awww, thank you so much Akshay:)

    @Being_AC- Thanks Sir and hope for peace:)

    @Pooja Sridhar- Thanks!

    @Rahul- Thank you Rahul!

    @Menachery- You made my day with your comment. Thanks for appreciating the poem:)

    @munchow- Thanks!

    @Binu Thomas- Thanks Binu:)

    @Writing Bee- Yeah, it is indeed...

    @Chetan- Thank you :)

    @Nasnin Nasser- Thanks Nasnin...:)

    @Rachit- Sure, it does...

    @SUB- Thanks and where are you?

    @Soumya- Thanks :)

    @Andy- Thank you for your comment and invite...:)

    @डॉ॰ मोनिका शर्मा- Thanks!

    @Bhakt Acharyya- Thanks Bhakt:)

    @Adam- Thanks Adam and welcome here:)

    @Chandra81- Thanks Nikhil:)

    @Syed Ali Hamid- Thank you Sir and please take your own time:)

    @Sandeep Sagar- Profound!

    @Rohit Sareen- Thanks Rohit:)

    @joshi daniel- Thank you!

    @Shesha Chaturvedi- Thank you!

    @:-Dee- Thanks dear...

    @prateek mathur- Thanks!

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    @Kunal- Thanks for the comment and bday wishes:)

    @sriramnivas- Thank you so much Ram!

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    @TheBluntBlogger- Thank you Chintan...Those are my favorite too...:)

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    @swapna- I'm so sorry for that but I truly relish your comment:)

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    @Ruhani Chawlia- Thanks!

    @deepazartz- Thank you so much for the encouragement:)

    @matheikal- True Sir, sorrows and joys have their own essence. Its how we take it...

    @Mr. Jovita- Thanks!

    @Harsha- Thanks a ton Harsha...:)

    @Readitt- WOW, sure and I am waiting to read it:)

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    @alissa4illustration- True Alissa, we are always in search of it...

    @Vikram- Thank you Vikram...

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    @mbka- It was a refresher, thanks for sharing:)

    @A grain of sand- Just read your post and I'm STILL...Thanks for your comment Stuti:)

    @Mithlash- Awww, you made my day. I read it so many times:) Thanks!!!

    @Animesh Ganguly- Sorry Animesh:(

    @Manreet Sodhi Someshwar- Thanks a lot:)

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    @Ruchi Jain- Thank you!

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    @Prime Aqua- Thank you for such an inspiring comment. You are welcome here:)

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    @Farila- Thank you so much, very excited and thrilled:)

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  100. SagittarianDecember 9, 2011 at 12:19 AM

    Great piece, very inspiring and so lovely written..:) My first time here, and really enjoy your site..:) Thanks for this post!:)

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  101. Richa SharmaDecember 9, 2011 at 1:06 AM

    Brilliant poem lady..you present so beautfully that it reaches even the deepest corner of heart

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  102. AnonymousDecember 9, 2011 at 1:30 AM

    a proud but a very painful living it is for those people. :(

    you put it so beautifully, the poem touched the insides of heart, that simple, gentle touch capable of making a few people breakdown into tears.

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  103. VarshuDecember 9, 2011 at 3:09 AM

    Awesome post!! True pain revealed !

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  104. Satish MutatkarDecember 9, 2011 at 6:05 AM

    Always a joy to read Saru....wonderfully expressive post:)

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  105. PhilO♥December 9, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    Amazingly put :)
    It's always sad when a person leaves their loved ones behind and goes for a war.
    A very brave family, I must say!

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  106. CharuDecember 9, 2011 at 11:31 AM

    Beuatiful Saru, this poem is so beautiful. Each line carries its weight and meaning.

    Such sad things are the reason that wars wound the conscience of humanity :( Reminds me of Tagore's words : "They hated and killed and men praised them.
    But God in shame hastens to hide its memory under the green grass."

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  107. Kajal MajhiDecember 9, 2011 at 11:44 AM

    so touchy :(

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  108. ♪♪Happy Go Lucky♪♪December 9, 2011 at 1:25 PM

    That was so beautifully written :)
    *Speechless*

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  109. AnonymousDecember 10, 2011 at 3:43 AM

    beautiful lines...

    also thanks for leaving comment on my post..

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  110. Anu LalDecember 10, 2011 at 7:20 AM

    Beautiful...

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  111. Meetu KDecember 10, 2011 at 9:47 AM

    No words to describe my emotions at the moments.
    Beautifully written , very touching....

    A plateau of concrete,
    Has his name with 'dates.'

    Nothing can be more painful than to c ur loved 1 this way

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  112. raDecember 10, 2011 at 11:01 AM

    wooooow....

    the flow was so good .. fast read and deep...

    rahul

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  113. ManasaDecember 10, 2011 at 12:56 PM

    It pierces the core directly tearing away each layer of heart!!

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  114. Christy GeraldDecember 10, 2011 at 4:36 PM

    Emotionally expressed and impressive.Very touching.

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  115. UnknownDecember 12, 2011 at 4:25 AM

    so soulful.
    life is tragedy.. :(

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  116. VertuDecember 13, 2011 at 3:20 AM

    last four lines are very touchy...:(

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  117. SprigBlossomsDecember 13, 2011 at 7:42 PM

    Very touching, Saru....you capture so many vistas of life so vividly :)

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  118. swatiDecember 14, 2011 at 12:47 AM

    Very touching Saru... Salute to all our hero who sacrificed their lives for us!!!

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  119. Sunil PadiyarDecember 15, 2011 at 11:45 PM

    You have made me fell short of words yet again... Saru jee - the words you have expressed, cannot be more closer to the real feelings...

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  120. AnandDecember 17, 2011 at 8:17 AM

    I don't know what to comment Saru.. You've captured the moment so beautifully in every line of this poem. I felt that sadness in reading every word. You're truly versatile... :)

    Cheers,
    Anand.

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  121. Saru SinghalDecember 19, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    @Sagittarian- Thank you so much and welcome here:)

    @Richa Sharma- Thanks Richa:)

    @blackandwhiteheart- Thanks a lot dear...

    @Varshu- Thanks :)

    @Satish Mutatkar- Thank you Sir!

    @♫♪♥PhilO♥♪♫- Yeah, a brave family. Thanks for your comment!

    @Charu- Thank you so much for that quote Charu. It's so profound!

    @KAJAL- Thanks!

    @♪♪Happy Go Lucky♪♪- Thank you!

    @Krishna- Thanks!

    @ANULAL- Thanks!

    @Meetu K- Thanks a ton dear and welcome here!

    @rahul aggarwal- Thank you Rahul!

    @Manasa- Ah, Thanks dear...

    @Christy Gerald- Thank you so much dear:)

    @Mehak- Thanks!

    @vertu- Thanks Vertika:)

    @SpringBlossoms- Thanks Ananya:)

    @swati- Salute to them who sacrifice their lives for us!

    @Sunil Padiyar- Thank Sunil. I was all tears when I heard that lady narrate the story in the subway...

    @Anand- Thank you Anand, you just made my day!!!

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  122. snehaMay 3, 2012 at 10:33 AM

    its like you speak my mind!! :)

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    1. Saru SinghalMay 3, 2012 at 1:00 PM

      Hope you like the way I expressed. Thanks for reading!

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  123. AnonymousMay 3, 2013 at 11:38 AM

    This is a lovely piece Saru!!Found it touching and moving!

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  124. Trademark LawyerDecember 2, 2015 at 1:24 PM

    Fantastically articulate poem, I very much enjoyed reading it, thank you

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