My Aphrodite
Don't do it,
Don't even try,
Seasons yearned for it,
What autumn just complied.
Don't you tuck,
Fallen hair behind...
Till the spring blows a whistle.
Till the summer harsh up a little.
Or else, you may allow
My fingers to tuck them in.
To be close to those perfect lips...
To feel the velvet of your skin...
To sing a song into your ear,
And light up the evening a bit.
Then, let the body do the talking
If only, you permit...
Stepping close I wonder,
Beauty so sublime.
Speaking only with her eyes,
She pauses time.
*Aphrodite is the greek goddess of love and beauty.
So exquisite! Just like Aphrodite....the goddess of love and beauty! Heart stirring beauty in these lines:)
ReplyDeleteI was the first one to comment! Yae....!!!!
ReplyDeleteSaru, *bends on her knees, with a bouquet of 100 roses* MARRY ME :D
ReplyDeleteThat's the best compliment I could give to the author :P, chalo bhaag chalein :D
Saru lovely lines...and the pic is too good.. kiska hai :P :P
ReplyDeletewow! for the poem but more so for your aphrodite...you captured her essence beautifully. no wonder she is asking u to marry her.
ReplyDeleteyeh mens log kyun hamare liye aise wale poems nai likhte! :((
really beautiful tribute/dedication
this must have been one of your most difficult poems or maybe the most easy. i don't know!
thats just awwww :-)
ReplyDeleteWoah..great yaar Saru..
ReplyDeleteArrey waah! Kya baat hain..Chintan tum toh famous ho gayee :)
Awesome saru .. Chintan is lucky one and dont deny her offer :) ... Every line is awesomeness
ReplyDeleteU have woven a delightful charm here...Chintan is so lucky to have these lovely words attributed to her pic :)) hats off..
ReplyDeleteWOW! Speechless. :)
ReplyDeleteExcellent .......!
ReplyDeleteNo words to explain your beautiful poetry....:)
ReplyDeleteSensual this was....and you chose the perfect picture for this~~
ReplyDeletethere is a guy i used to hear on tv...n he'd go...'shimply shuperb! dat ish great piece of work derr'
ReplyDeleteaphrodite's beauty- beautifully composed... :)
ReplyDeleteWonderfully written! One of my favourites so far.
ReplyDeletewow.. i sure would like to meet the aphrodite :)
ReplyDeleteBikram's
Amazing. beautifully described Aphrodite. :) <3
ReplyDeleteWOW! I am tripping on this <3
ReplyDeleteHello Saru.
ReplyDeleteBeauty all around.
Lovely tribute to your Aphrodite. Beautiful photo too.
Thanks for sharing & visiting. Always nice to hear from you.
Take Me Under Your Special Wings
Unbelievable just WOW...:):)
ReplyDeleteSaru, you created a perfect Aphrodite and no aphrodisiacs needed to fall in love with her after your description of the mesmerizing beauty!The image is equally haunting!
ReplyDeleteFinally she plays a muse in your work..! :)
ReplyDeleteDone beyond all excellence..!
A flawless piece of work to go with a flawless photo...Saru..you never fail to amaze us...
ReplyDeleteFantastic words...one of your best.. :-)
so lovely poem Saru! :) I love it! :)Very inspiring! :)
ReplyDeletewonderful...
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written. :) And a very nice picture to go with it too. :)
ReplyDeletewoow that is beautiful ..
ReplyDeletedouble woow for the picture :P
rahul
Oh..i love this , so romantic dear !
ReplyDeleteWhen I saw the pic, I knew it was Chintan's!! And nice poem to go with it too!! :)
ReplyDeletenice one
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words for a Beautiful face!!! lovely!!!
ReplyDeleteAgain a 'greety' poem from your launch station..:)
ReplyDeleteReal use of spatical & linguistic intelligence.
Saru! its 'Lyre'-in Greek understanding, BOL
Whoaaa......niccceee !
ReplyDeleteThe poet and the muse,each more enchanting than the other!
ReplyDeleteJus one word... AESTHETIC...!
ReplyDeletevery passionate.. soulful even... i loved this one... :)
ReplyDeleteTake care and keep writing......
Beautifully written!mesmerizing and enchanting.The words are so craftily choosen...No doubt,you have an impressive vocabulary!
ReplyDeletespeaking only wid her eyes,
ReplyDeleteshe pauses time..
im lost...
ur words, put me in a different world.. :)
really smooth.. :)
Marvellous!
ReplyDelete:) Soulful... Beautiful lines!
ReplyDeleteStepping close I wonder,
Beauty so sublime.
Speaking only with her eyes,
She pauses time...
Speechless! :) Sharing it with everyone I know..
beautiful both the pic and poem
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words, but I could not take my eyes away from the picture of Chintan, hehe:-)
ReplyDeleteEloquent and wonderful! If you were a man seeking to please Aphrodite, I wonder if she could have denied such a pleasant proposal?
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
Awwww! Every line is lovely and soulful :) I read it over and over again. You expressed it so elegantly Saru. :):)
ReplyDeleteSaru, this is awesomeness personified....
ReplyDeleteI'm transported back to my English Hons days, I swear.... :)
Just loved the lines -
Seasons yearned for it,
What autumn just complied.
Don't you tuck,
Fallen hair behind...
PS. Short of words here... and Yeah, Chintan - Lucky Damsel! :D
Love,
Indie :)
god. This reminds me of my highschool sweetheart. splendidly caught your thoughts in words.
ReplyDeleteHow beautiful...I was wondering why this title - Aphrodite? And when I went through till the end, now I know it was the best title. :)
ReplyDeleteLovely poetry...:)
Wow!..What a compliment! Chintan must be pleased :)
ReplyDeleteI like the words and the picture both!
ReplyDeleteYou wrote this? How amazing that is to me. I have a hard time putting words together in a sentence and LOOK AT YOU!!
ReplyDeleteA *lovely* Aphrodite in words and photo :) I especially liked the last verse!
ReplyDeleteHaah, you flattered everyone with your soul stirring words... No wonder Chintan is asking you to marry :)
ReplyDeleteI just can't pick one line as my favorite... Every word and every line in this poem is making me awww!!!
A BIG thanks for writing such admiring poems every time! :)
Cheers,
Anand.
super.. it feels well..
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful poem.. I think all girls would love to be appreciated this way!
ReplyDeleteChintan, Super Kismat gurl, tumhari :D
Keep it up up and uppp.. Saru.. Hugs!
Wow!! Thats a lovely poem. And chintan u r truly lucky. :)
ReplyDeleteCool words .....
ReplyDelete"To be close to those perfect lips...
ReplyDeleteTo feel the velvet of your skin...
To sing a song into your ear,
And light up the evening a bit." lovely imagery:) n pleased to see Chintan's photograph:) beautiful dedication:))
Lovely lines.Sounds Sweet!.Delish poem Dear!.Luv it!
ReplyDeletebeautifully penned!
ReplyDeleteSensuous and beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThat line "If only, you permit..." -- totally LOVED it! It was super effective!
Beautiful....
ReplyDeleteOr else, you may allow
ReplyDeleteMy fingers to tuck them in.
To be close to those perfect lips...
To feel the velvet of your skin...
To sing a song into your ear,
And light up the evening a bit.
Then, let the body do the talking
If only, you permit.
BEAUTIFUL LINES...Sensuous and amazingly penned
Beautifully written Saru..
ReplyDeleteI am falling short of adjectives for this one.
ReplyDeleteAwesome work as always. :)
YOU ARE DOMINATING THE INDIVINE POETRY BLOCK! and your position is unquestionable and well-cemented after this post!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poetry for the pretty picture.
ReplyDeletewonderful crafted poem... loved it :)
ReplyDeleteWeakest LINK
NOW you just make me say WOW...and HOW!!!!:-D
ReplyDeleteYou never cease to surprise me with your blogging and poetry skills whenever I come here. Great work! Lucky Chintan there..;)
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful woman in picture,......
ReplyDeleteArey ise kahin toh dekha hai....
O yeh to apni Chintan hai :)...
That was my reaction ...hahaha
Sorry Saru, I read your lines bit late this time :P...
wow ....so sensual loved ur poetry as always :)
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beautiful photo and lines... with extended eee and uuuu :)
ReplyDeleteYour poem is so breathtakingly beautiful - simple sensual sensuous sensational superb shining soul stirring spellbinding ! Shabash Saru !
ReplyDeleteNice lines.Came through Cloud nine
ReplyDeleteNot connected to this post, but just a line to thank you for helping me (through your poetry posts) find courage to put out my poems to a larger readership.
ReplyDeletebeautiful is the word
ReplyDeletewow!! each word of yours dwells so nicely into the soul..
ReplyDeleteAmazing piece :)
ReplyDeleteSoulful! I love this Saru! As always you got me in here! Very romantic, the romance is moving like a wind in the atmosphere! And congrats again for the 2nd editor's choice award :)
ReplyDeleteBrilliant lines Saru.. Very well written. Chintan you have the charm in you as ever.
ReplyDeleteyaa, a beautiful tribute by you to Goddess.....:))
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poetry.......
ReplyDeleteSaru ...lovely lines
ReplyDeleteWow..Saru! Just breathtakingly romantic:)))
ReplyDelete@Nasnin Nasser- Thanks Nasnin for your ever beautiful words:)
ReplyDelete@Chintan Gupta- I told you how nervous I was...Thank God and you that you liked it...And, do you think I can say no to your offer. Just have to think about Saurabh and Alok:)
@SuKupedia ™ :) :)- Pata nahin Suku, google se le hai;)
@Sujatha Sathya- Seriously, men should write poems for us. And it was very difficult to write it...First, Chintan is hard to impress and Second, simple poems are tougher...
@BlogAdmin- Thanks :)
@Pooja Sridhar- Pooja, yaar aisa nahin hai...Chintan ke wajah se mein famous ho gaye hoon...Poem suit kar rahe hai na, Chintan ko?
@Nimesh- Never, it's a golden opportunity that I will never miss...Thanks for liking it!
@India's no.1 blog- We are lucky too, remember we have a lovely poem on our friendship...And, thanks...Your comments are a constant source of encouragement...
@Akshay Kumar G- Thank you Akshay:)
@केवल राम :- Thank You!
@Prashanth- Thank you so much!
@Red Handed- Actually, I love this picture so much that I wrote lines for it...:)
@Rohit Sareen- Thank you Rohit:) :) :)
@r_Phoenix- Thank you.
@ladyfi- Thanks a lot!
@Bikramjit Singh Mann- You should Bikram :) And, thank you!
@Vertu- Thanks!!!
@Megha Sarin- :):):)
@Andy- Thanks a ton Andy:)
@swati- Thanks a lot dear...
@Rahul Bhatia- Thank you Sir...
@Mohd Ehtesham- Thank you Ehte...
@Kunal- Even I think it's good...Since the muse was totally rocking, the outcome should be great...:) Thanks for your comment, Kunal...
@Sagittarian- Thank you!
@Neha- :)
@Raj- Thank you Raj:)
@rahul aggarwal- Yeah, double wow for Chintan...Thank you Rahul:)
@Angel- Thanks Angel!
@Binu Thomas- Thanks!!!
@Krishna- Thanks...
@Jenny- Thank you Jenny:)
@Being_AC- Thanks you Sir for your kind words:)
@Madhusha- Thanks!
@sharmila- Thank you but I like the muse more...She is a beautiful and lovely person...:)
@Jasper- Thanks a ton dear:)
@Thousif Raza- Thanks Thousif...:)
@Rohit Singh- Thanks Rohit for such a lovely comment. Believe me, my vocabulary is very limited...
@Dreaming Wanderer- Thank you dear and welcome here:)
@Mithlash- Thank you:) :) :)
@Sunil Padiyar- Thank you for your support, Sunil...Your comments lift my spirits...:)
@Jidhu Jose- Thanks!
@Spiderdama- Me too, she is looking like a French Diva...:)
@Blasphemous Aesthete- She has accepted it...:) Thanks for liking it Anshul:)
@Harsha- Thank you Harsha...:)
@Indiana Amrita- Best compliment I received on this post. When I started writing this month and a half back, I wanted it to have that old word charm. Glad to know that you acknowledged it...
@Ketan Patil- Really...thrilled to know that:)
ReplyDelete@ANSHUL GAUTAM- Thank you...
@Ana_treek- Thankfully, she is...And, thank you for liking it:)
@alissa apel- Thanks!
@My Journey With Candida- Nothing much dear, I just write few words here and there...:)
@~*Princesa Fiona*~ - I knew you would like the last verse...Such a lovely relations we make on blogosphere that we know about each others tastes as well...:)
@Anand- Thank you Anand...But seriously, pick a line...
@சேகர்- Thanks Sekar:)
@Mi- Thank you so much Mi...:) XOXOXO
@☆ Rià ღ - Thanks!!!
@Team G Square- Thanks!
@TD23- Thank you dear...:)
@Christy Gerald- Thanks Christy!
@magiceye- Thank you Sir.
@Kavita- Thank you Kavita...:)
@Burhan- Thanks!
@NUKTAA- Thank you so much dear and welcome here!
@Ruchi Jain- Thanks!
@vinay- Thanks a lot Vinay:)
@AdiSin- Is it so? Thank you for your encouraging comment dear...I will check Indiblogger to have a good feel...:)
@Kusum- Thanks Kusum...
@Rachit- Thanks Rachit...Chintan is a perfect muse and all credit goes to her...:)
@Rahul- Perfect play of words, Rahul...:) Cool comment:) :) :) It's nothing, write few words and make it rhyme...:) Done!!!
@Farila- Thanks a ton Farila:)
@deepbaazigar- I am happy to know that someone has great taste like I have...She looks stunning in this shot!
@saikat mbka ghosh- Thanks :)
@kedar- Thank you, with an extended uuuuu:)
@R.Ramakrishnan- This is such a sweet comment...Thanks!
@KParthasarathi- Thanks and welcome here:)
@Ashwini- Thanks Ash:) :) :)
@Subhorup Dasgupta- Glad to know that...Wish you larger and larger readership...:)
@vinisha- Thanks!!!
@swati- Thanks Swati!
@♫♪♥PhilO♥♪♫- Thank you:)
@Prime Aque- Thanks dear:)
@ಅಶ್ವಿನಿ/ Ashwini- Chintan is charm personified...:) Thanks for the comment:)
@Irfanuddin- Thanks!
@avanti singh- Thanks:)
@seema- Thanks Seema:)
@Cloud Nine- Thanks a ton:)
Oh its so exquisite!
ReplyDelete:) :) :) :)
Beautiful. The words, the essence, the music. And of course, the beauty. :)
ReplyDeleteWOW ! I'm speechless ! :)
ReplyDeleteTo feel the velvet of your skin
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem
exquisite and erotic...
ReplyDeleteSuperb lines!! Beautiful!!
ReplyDeleteLovely poem. Aphrodite suits it perfectly. :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...
ReplyDeleteThere is simplicity in the making of this poem and authenticity in the beauty of Aphrodite . Nice work!!!
ReplyDeletelovely!
ReplyDeleteThe lines are as beautiful as the beauty you speak of with such delicacy and tenderness that is also so sensuous:-)
ReplyDeleteI'm kind of a tubelight when it comes to understanding poems (knowing what the poet really means). But I can always identify a great line. "Till the spring blows a whistle" - fantastic.
ReplyDeleteYou deserve the huge number of comments you have got here, so I wanted to add on to it.
Unfortunately I don't know Hindi, so I'm skipping your latest one, sorry about that.
Lovely Saru! Profound and short.
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering what was circling your thoughts when you were writing this! :)
Awesome love poem! "Don't you tuck,
ReplyDeleteFallen hair behind.." Heart touching!
i LOVE LOVE LOVE IT
ReplyDelete@Jill of all Trades- Thanks a lot:)
ReplyDelete@Deboshree- Thank you so much...
@Kitty- Thanks Kitty!
@sm- Thanks:)
@Rupertt Wind- Thank you!
@Ramakant Pradhan- Thanks a lot!
@akriti91- Thanks a lot for your comment:)
@ANULAL- :) :) :)
@sriramnivas- Thanks for your lovely comment:)
@joshi daniel- Thanks:)
@Suruchi- Thanks a lot Suruchi...:)
@Joshi Mukard- We are all tubelights out of our own field. But you have a great eye for anything. Be it photos or words. Great pick from the poem and thanks for your comment :)
@Rachit- I love Chintan's photo and I saw it atleast 500 times before writing this poem. So, all credit goes to the shot...:)
@Abhyudaya Shrivastava- Thanks a lot!
@Mr. Jovita- Thanks!!!
Very lovely.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sheldon:)
DeleteI'm reading it again. Love love this!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, welcome back :)
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