Without You
Today was a beautiful day,
I thought so.
It passed by smoothly,
Without anything special though.
I had a smile, I had a laugh,
I wish I could have that from my heart.
My happiness faded, hugging all dry,
And my hopes could only cry.
I had these thoughts,
Every morning, every night.
But one thing I missed to realize.
Without your words,
Without your smile,
How could I have lived my life?
*This is an unedited poem I wrote in my teens.
Wonderful and so lovely poem Saru..:) I love every lines,editing is not needed because I know and I can feel it, it's coming from your heart when you wrote this love poem..:) Words from heart doesn't need to edit at all.:) Love it! :)
ReplyDeleteEven I think so that when words come from heart, they sound better and honest. Thanks for liking the poem dear.:)
DeleteWonderful! You forgot to mention the name of that special one! Enough to impress anyone:)
ReplyDeleteI would definately gift this poem to my gf whenever I'll find her by writing my name under it. Hope you won't mind...Overall beautiful line...loved it....keep rocking:):)
There was no special someone. And you can give it to your girl and take all the credit. I won't mind it at all. Thanks for such a nice comment.
DeleteA very pure form of emotion,
ReplyDeleteGood Saru, find it relevant even today.:)
It's defines pollination & formation of a poet..
Old work shows your growth as a writer. You have rightly said so. Thanks for reading Sir.
DeleteHey I liked the title of the poem also:)
ReplyDeleteThank you :) :) :)
DeleteLovely! Your poem made me miss "Him" even more than i normally do!
ReplyDeleteWonderful as now you can write another lovely piece. :)
DeleteUnedited??? Incredible! You have an amazing way with WORDS:)
ReplyDeleteYeah, unedited. Thanks for the compliment, means a lot coming from you.
Delete"Without your words,
ReplyDeleteWithout your smile,
How could I have lived my life!"
Wow! Anyone would melt by reading those lines. Loved it Saru. Raw emotions of your teens is quite evident. :):)
Really, I will use it on Alok then...:) You know I love those days when emotions were raw and unadulterated. We always believed in happy ever after, which is a state of utopia...
DeleteThanks for reading the poem Akshay...:)
Lovely poem!:)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
Delete"Without your words,
ReplyDeleteWithout your smile,
How could I have lived my life!"
Beautiful......................!
Thank you so much Saravana and a very happy birthday to you :) :) :)
DeleteLovely. Beautifully expressed the longing!
ReplyDeleteThank you Shaifali...Actually, the poem talks about someone's importance in our lives which we miss to realize ordinarily.
DeleteSaru, at least share the secret of when you wrote your first one! Hope not in the cradle as even this one has that rare spark of brilliance:)
ReplyDeleteSir, as far as I remember it is 'When You Came' and I wrote it shortly after my 14th birthday.
DeleteThank you such an inspiring comment Sir...:)
Saru, it is so good to see you conquering heights and my best wishes for your future writing endeavors too:)
DeleteThank you so much Sir for your wishes...:)
Deletein your teens !!!! hmmmmm...nodding at what Rahulji wrote
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
Deletejust superb , words written in teens ........
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton Dhiraj :)
DeleteYour teens peep back from the words!
ReplyDeleteIf you say so...:) I think I am on a journey on discovering myself ever since...:)
DeleteThank you for reading.
Masterpiece...
ReplyDeleteThank you Nitin...:)
DeleteYou are just gifted. :) That was a wonderful poem and the fact that you have written it in your teens is testimony to your genius. The fact that the words rhyme so gently and with ease and the way you weave layers of emotions is just brilliant. :)
ReplyDeleteRaj, you have written the essence of the poem and that too so brilliantly. Speaking you genius, I guess I know someone who is a writer par excellence.
DeleteThank you for reading...:)
Lovely! Yeah, so the magic with words was the same back then as it is now! Actually, I loved the start! :D
ReplyDeleteEven I love the start. You know I generally the like start of my poems. Gosh! I am narcissist.
DeleteThanks for reading and a lovely comment.
"I had a smile, I had a laugh." wish you get more of those!
ReplyDeleterighto!
Delete@strophicus- Thank you and welcome here. I wish everyone has lots of smiles in their lives.
Delete@Rohit Singh Jain- :)
Hello! You have an award awaiting on my blog :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Jenny...:)
Deletetouching truth!
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
DeleteLovely piece of poetry!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Rohit.
Deleteokay! so you are a prodigy! :D
ReplyDeleteDon't know that but nothing in comparison to someone who can click, write, sing and play instruments...:)
DeleteLoved it. Though I might not feel the same for any particular person, I guess I can appreciate the idea put forth :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
You will Mishraji, wait for sometime. You will fall in love and will declare it on your blog.:)
DeleteHaha :) Amen Saru :) Time is all I have :)
Delete:) You wrote in your teens!! that's awesome... as well as the poem!!
ReplyDeleteSo cute..
Delete@Madhuresh and @magiceye- Thank you:)
DeleteTouchy...without you life is nothing...........
ReplyDeleteSeriously, btw looks like we are talking in 'Hum Tum' style...:)
DeleteAwww! That's so cute and soulful. I'm all smiling reading this over and over again :):) You wrote it as a teen? It has the same magic of your present day poems, Saru. :)
ReplyDeleteEven I smile, no I laugh. My brother and my husband laugh on my poems. More than meaning, they search for comedy in it.
DeleteThanks for a lovely comment Harsha...:)
sweet :)
ReplyDeleted heart was quite innocent then..
it cud luv in an instant n b broken in tat very moment.. sigh!
Thank you dear...Such is love...Sigh!!!
Deletetrue :)
DeleteBeautiful words!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you!!!
Delete:-) Superb...
ReplyDelete:) Thanks :)
DeleteWho was the guy, for whom you penned down such beautiful words :-))
ReplyDeleteWhen I read it, didnot occur to me, that this was from your teens.
Wonderful!
No one...:) Thank you saying it's wonderful. :)
Deleteno one? really? :P
DeleteNot really...:P But except for 'On A May Day' and 'My Aphrodite' I have never written a poem for someone.
Deletebeautiful sis :)
ReplyDeletetake care
niya
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Thank you :)
DeleteAaaaw so sweet. Vry nice saru:-):-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ankitha...:)
DeleteToday is a beautiful day. Made more so by this poem! :-)
ReplyDeleteAwww...So sweet of you...Thank you for reading Kunal...:)
DeleteSo beautifully written!
ReplyDeletePlease do use one of my photos if you'd like to. Perhaps you could just link back to me?
Thank you for reading or for the permission to use your photos. I always link the source if it's not from Google.
DeleteEven in your teens day..u had been able to come out with such a beautiful piece....Saru Di...u r d master of the art of writing poems...
ReplyDeleteThank you Hemant. I wish I can master the art, I am just learning...:)
Deleteyou were romantic when you were young Saru :-)
ReplyDeletelovely poem !
and from your other poems...you seem to be romantic now as well :D
ReplyDeleteI don't have even a single bone of romance in me. I am too practical for that...:)
DeleteThank you for reading Rahul...:)
hmmm a lovely poem
ReplyDeletebut i have had some experiences in life now that a beautiful day can be beautiful if we want to ...
Bikram's
Yeah, it's just a state of mind. Thank you for reading Bikram...:)
DeleteKind a romantic.........It's great that you tried your hand in poems when you were a teen!!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading Ram:)
DeleteWonderful.
ReplyDeleteLoved it. :)
Thank you Vinay:)
Delete"I had a smile, I had a laugh,
ReplyDeleteI wish I could have that from my heart."
Most touching lines....Reflects the lack of a happiness in real sense... Uneasiness..
Liked the poetry..
Do visit my new blog- http://manjuzkitchen.blogspot.in/
Thanks for digging into the lines and will surely visit the blog. :)
Deletesome one was this good right from her teens! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sawan for such a lovely comment!!!
DeleteI love going back and re-reading stuff that I had written ages back... Always fill me with a sweet nostalgia :)
ReplyDeleteSo true...Kinda flipping the pages of your own life...:)
DeleteBeautiful poem you've written in teens...:)
ReplyDeleteThanks dear:)
DeleteI luv this poem-Magical words;-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Elli...:)
DeleteWow! What lines?!... ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteI think I have been here before but long ago..once more being here ..reminds how I miss to poetry
ReplyDeleteOnce you start writing poems, it becomes a part of you and when you leave it you miss it...
DeleteThank you for stopping by...
wow, wow...."Without your words,
ReplyDeleteWithout your smile,
How could I have lived my life!" divine lines
Thank you dear...:)
DeleteYou had depth even then, like wine your writing gets better with age. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Meera for saying such a beautiful line...Such a comment makes my day...:)
DeleteWithout anything special though.
ReplyDeleteI had a smile, I had a laugh,
I wish I could have that from my heart.....wow
Without your words,
Without your smile,
How could I have lived my life!.......awasome touches my heart , lovely expression .
Thank you Shashi :) :) :)
DeleteThe pic and the words perfectly compliment each other...:) Truly beautiful...:)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Prashanth..:)
DeleteAn epiphany. The realization of the absence of someone special. A special poem, with a touch of melancholy. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThank you Anu. It's truly epiphany as you said. I realized it after reading your comment. :)
DeleteI am not a fan of poems and such but I enjoyed reading this. You're gifted not only now but since you were teen. Keep it up and keep writing!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ram. Glad to know that you enjoyed it..:)
Deleteaww.. Saru.. so beautiful.. with your permission can i print it out and pack it along with my hubby's things during his travels? Obviously with your name on it?
ReplyDeleteSure, it would be an honor. :) Thank you for reading Kajal and for writing a lovely comment...:)
DeleteYou were in love since teen age? hahaha...good poem
ReplyDeleteYou are good writer right from your childhood...Amazing,Saru
:) :) :)
DeleteThank you Deepak:)
It found its right place after so many years of confinement :D
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
Yeah, feels so good too...:)
DeleteThis is such a simple and true from-the-heart poem of a teen :) Liked it!
ReplyDeleteThank you dear...:)
DeleteVery nice...wish I could write like this! No...Not possible :(
ReplyDeleteYou are talented in art dear. Writing a poem is not that difficult, anyone can do it...:)
DeleteSome old poetry coming up lately? :) Good one!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sam...:)
DeleteBottled up emotions that hit the papers in our teens :)
ReplyDeleteLovely read.
Thanks a lot!!!
Deletebeautiful poem
ReplyDeletewaiting for next one
So, you love playing with words since your teen days huh! A beautiful poem indeed Saru! :)
ReplyDeleteYeah, at times I feel old habits die hard. My habit of penning things is flourishing these days. Thanks for reading Binu.
DeleteSaru... this is so naive and beautiful.. You are a born poet :)
ReplyDeleteAwww...thank you Mi...I wish I can capitalize on it...
DeleteWithout your words,
ReplyDeleteWithout your smile,
How could I have lived my life!.....such beautiful lines....:) grt post as usual
Thank you Saikat!
DeleteLove ur Choice of Words to emote the innate feelings.. Great Post!
ReplyDeleteThank you Vineet :)
Deletehey Saru..thats so beautiful..
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton Bhargav...
DeleteAnother lovely piece..I am running out of comments...:)
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
DeleteAmazingly written, keep writing :)
ReplyDeleteWow.. That's lovely Saru.. The flow in which your words flow is just amazing. And have you written this in your teen age? Its just unbelievably awesome. The last 3 lines are just breath takingly beautiful:) Love
ReplyDeleteSince you have mentioned, I always believe poems must have some flow, a gentle shift from one line to another. Glad you think this one has it. Thanks Sonia...:)
DeleteAnd this is how you wrote in your teens-no wonder your words now are so well polished...they had such a great beginning :-)
ReplyDeleteYour comment just made my day...Thanks Suruchi!
DeleteHi
ReplyDeleteI am not much into poetry but loved it ....:)
Thanks Jaishree...:)
DeleteLovely poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteTrue, there's always someone, someone other than me, who lends meaning to my life. And that someone is usually a constant (not variable_\
ReplyDeleteIt's better when that someone is constant. Relationships are very tricky these days. :)
DeleteThis is so sensational. your emotions have flown so naturally. Indeed a masterpiece Saru.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mak for a lovely comment!
DeleteLoved it! Without u....:)
ReplyDeleteAnd coincidently I was listening to the song without you while reading the poem...it kind of made me grin ear to ear.
:D
Oh, which one? Thanks for liking the poem Madhusha...:)
DeleteSaru - uff I love it !! It's like you just read my heart out to me .. I've had busy 2 weeks and didn't get a chance to visit you blog but I am glad I got this to read this
ReplyDeleteThats so sweet of you Sangeeta. Thanks for liking and relating to the poem.
DeleteLovely.. something I could have written in my young days too:-)
ReplyDeleteBless U!
Good to know that. I just miss those carefree days...:) Thanks for reading Tania:)
Delete"Without your words,
ReplyDeleteWithout your smile,
How could I have lived my life!"
The last three lines say it all... Good one Saru! As someone mentioned, I am running out of comments... Glad to see that you've kept the fire going and never stopped writing...
Looking forward to more.......
Thank you Nisha. I think readers of this blog have kept the fire alive in me. I owe every piece of writing to them...:)
Deleteback than also u were hell of a player with words :P
ReplyDeletethose raw n pure emotions r brilliantly expressed..
fabulous Saru !!!
I wish I can time travel and jot down more with such raw emotions. Thank you for appreciating the poem...:)
Deletenice words..the pure emotions of teenage showing thru evey sentence!!
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Thank you dear:)
Deletelovely poem :) :)
ReplyDeleteThanks:)
DeleteSimple and touching lines :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteIts amazing to see that you could express your emotions so beautifully even in your teens! :)
ReplyDeleteWe can feel a freshness n purity in this poem.
Kitty, I miss the purity now. We are so full of life in those days. Thank you for reading!
DeleteBeautiful lines Saru, your creativity started flowing from your teens and that is evident in these lines
ReplyDeleteThank you Arnab. I look back and feel that those were good old days:)
Deletetalent in poetry at it's best.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir. I hope I can capitalize on it...:)
Deletesimple yet had all the flavors of life.
ReplyDeleteWeakest LINK
Thank you Rachit!
DeleteLoved the ending.. Without your words, without your smiles, how could I have lived my life.. Says it all..
ReplyDeleteThank you Rajesh :)
Deletejust so beautiful just so true...its apt for every true love
ReplyDeleteWithout your words,
Without your smile,
How could I have lived my life!
Thank you dear...:)
DeleteVery touching...
ReplyDeleteThanks Ashwini and welcome here...:)
DeleteBeautiful one, Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Deepa!
DeleteBeautiful Ms Saru.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Angel...:)
Deletewithout ur words and smile,, that are superb lines...its so nice to read ur poem ..everytime best poems..
ReplyDeleteThanks a ton Ruchi...:)
DeleteBeautiful lines!
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Thanks and welcome here Rachna...:)
DeleteWonderful lines, evokes nostalgia.. beautiful creations of the past... Well Done Saru, you rock girl! :)
ReplyDeleteAwww, thats so sweet of you to say...Thank you:)
DeleteThe youthfulness is live in this poem, although I must say you could edit it to create a simple piece of art. Cheers to poetry!!! :-D
ReplyDeleteI like the rawness here. I edit my work nowadays but these poems are so pure. Thanks for reading Anoop...:)
Deletenice lines saru!gr8 to read after a gap! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks and welcome back!
DeleteLOVEly poem
ReplyDeleteLove it!!
ReplyDeleteYeah, that special someone is the most important part of life whether we say or not. Thanks for reading Ash...:)
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