Marooned, I Am...
Amidst the layers of smile,
I hide my pain,
He pats the surface,
Thinking all is well.
The sore look in my eyes,
Never bothers him a bit,
My eyes not only speak,
They scream, they yell.
It rained last summer,
His skin felt so,
Lying on his shoulder,
When all my tears fell.
Sinking in the non-existent,
I don't know how,
If ever I have to write,
How the word 'life' would spell.
Lovely n loved it....
ReplyDeleteThanks Mithlash :)
DeleteOne of your very beautiful ones and my fav from your creations :)
ReplyDeleteIt has surpassed what you have written till now in terms of simplicity and yet being so powerful to express pain. I just loved it. I am going to save it in the diary which I read often and consist of my collection of beautiful poems.
I loved it, Saru.
You just made my day Shaifali. Thanks a ton!!!
DeleteYou are too good dear :)
ReplyDeleteWonderfully expressed.
Thanks Deepa :)
DeleteTop to bottom, simply superb....Loved each line...keep it up Saru n keep rocking....
ReplyDeleteCheers!!!
Thank you once again Mithlash...:)
DeleteBeautiful piece of writing!:)
ReplyDeleteThank you!!!
DeleteBrilliant.
ReplyDeleteThanks!!!
Delete""The sore look in my eyes,
ReplyDeleteNever bothers him a bit,""""""" i have actually felt & lived these lines and know how it feels
Not happy to read your comment Sujatha...:(
Deletewow! superb... :) thank you for the words... :)
ReplyDeleteThank you dear!
DeleteI don't know what else to say which I haven't already said Saru. You amaze me every time with your words. :)
ReplyDeleteThats so sweet of you Akshay but try and find faults in my poems. I will be more than happy to receive criticism from you...:)
DeleteDazed with lovely words;-)
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
DeleteBeautiful and profound as always. I could actually sense many many feelings in each of these lines. You're just so good at it, Saru. This is innate and this is beautiful. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Rachit. It feels great to have a reader like you.
DeleteEyes speak a language of their own and can never betray the true feeling!. In simplicity of your words lies the beauty, Saru:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir. Your words are a source of encouragement.:)
DeleteEyes can scream loud and they can spill love. Well captured emotions!
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Indeed Rachna. Thank you so much for reading!
DeleteBeautiful lines..Loved it..:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you:)
DeleteBeautiful, your words made me speechless . . .
ReplyDeleteAshwini Dey
Thank you Ashwini...:)
DeleteBrilliant and very soulful Saru <3 Every line depicts intense emotions. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for reading Harsha. :)
Deletepoignant and beautiful
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir.
DeleteElegantly expressed the pain...flow of emotions
ReplyDeleteThank you Simran :)
DeleteSaru, I think its a boy girl thing.. From a guy's perspective, honestly, its difficult to read a girl's emotions :D
ReplyDeleteWe trust in "Words". And yes, it is the name of your blog :)
And that is where guys fail...Just kidding. Thank you for having trust in Words...:)
DeleteSo painfully beautiful words...
ReplyDeleteThanks Ria !!!
Deleteeyes, the index of our emotions ...
ReplyDeleteliked the line" they rained in summer "... a lovely creation..
Thank you Sunita...:)
Deleteits deep..its painfull and expressive.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading Chitra :)
DeleteAmidst the layers of smile,
ReplyDeleteI hide my pain,
He pats the surface,
Thinking all is well.
The sore look in my eyes,.............just loved these line touches my heart ........really pain full ///////pain speak so much with out words ........
It sure does and we need to read the emotions of our loved ones many a times to understand it a bit more. Thanks for reading and for your comment Shashi...:)
Deletehidden pain! well expressed saru! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sowmya :)
DeleteVery deep emotions. And its easy to relate to. Nice work.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jyothi and welcome here :)
DeleteThe eyes scream and yell, but on the surface it seems so calm. Pain, and how we tend to hide it.
ReplyDeleteLovely lines :)
Thats beautifully expressed Juhi. Thanks for a lovely comment!
DeleteNothing else makes life more hellish than a lover blind with eyes wide open.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and very emotional poem anyways :-)
Thank you dear and welcome here :)
DeleteWonderful piece from you again Saru.:) You're such a great one with sharing emotions.:) Love yah!:)
ReplyDeleteThank you for admiring my style of writing. I owe my poems to all the lovely readers like you :) :) :)
DeleteIf ever I have to write,How the word 'life' would spell...such a profound statement.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kitty but when it comes to expressing emotions in few words, you rock at it!!!
DeleteFantastic. Left me unsettled.
ReplyDeleteSorry to know that and hope you are better now...:)
Deletelovely poem
ReplyDeleteThanks Chiraj!
Deletejeet gaye aap phir se.. ye likhne ke baad. :-)
ReplyDeleteBut still I wish I can write like you...You are too good with words :)
Deletewords your blog name and words poems, so beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ruchi!
DeleteBrilliantly written - something most of us can relate to.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much dear :)
Deletevery well penned...
ReplyDeleteThanks and welcome here :)
DeleteI read it many times. I don't know why, it appears to be beyond my skills to reach to the depth of this wonderful work. All I can make out is, its full of emotions.
ReplyDeleteFirst, many thanks for reading it. And second, I hope I can write something which is simple in thoughts. Sorry to disappoint you by making it complex.
Deletenicely expressed with such soulful lines the lamentation
ReplyDeleteThank Saikat!
DeleteEmotions flow
ReplyDeletewhen you read her,
You fall into her words;
I don't know how!
If ever I have to write,
How the word 'tear' should be
WOW...Beautiful to the core. :)
Deletepainful yet emotional ......liked it so much
ReplyDeleteMy eyes not only speak,
They scream, they yell.
keep smiling :)
Thank you for reading dear...:) :) :)
Delete"The Absolute"...Saru!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir!!!
Deleteso very beautiful lines indu !
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
DeleteNice & Lively!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Vineet!!!
DeleteI could relate to this in a lot of ways.
ReplyDeleteSigh, I wish he would feel the real her.
Beautifully written!!!
I wish too Jenny but at times I feel it's very difficult what a lady hides in her...
DeleteHi, came back to your blog after some time. This is well written but I can see that there are some areas of improvement.
ReplyDeleteI wish you can specify. Thanks for reading Abhra!!!
DeleteLike always well connected,
ReplyDeleteLess words, more impact of Words..
More the feels, less potent the comment.:)
Inform! as effective preparation. Good wishes.
Thanks for a ever meaningful comment Sir.:)
DeleteLife - a series of problems? Or a series of solutions!
ReplyDeleteI would love to choose the latter Sir. :)
DeleteVery Well written
ReplyDeleteThanks!!!
Delete"Lying on his shoulder,
ReplyDeleteWhen all my tears fell.
Sinking in the non-existent,
I don't know how"
These four lines touched me the most. Good job.
Thank you Ajesh :) :) :)
Deletethat is sad and made me sad too
ReplyDeletewhy life does this to us I dont know
I beleive that
Life plays Jokes on us SO- ha ha ha ha ..
Bikram's
Yeah, it's better to laugh at it and with it. Atleast the pain would subside. Thanks for reading Bikram!
DeleteThats Fabulously written, Good job! Loved reading it
ReplyDeleteThanks Rupertt!!!
Deletebeautiful--the eyes may scream,but the one who should hear,does not care--it is a tragedy--the levels of sensitivity vary.
ReplyDeleteYeah, we feel at different levels and with variegated sensitivities. Thanks for reading Indu :)
DeleteBeautiful...
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This one is a keepsake. :)Your poems are filled with several layers of emotion that touch different readers in different ways. I read it several times and every time it touched me differently. Such is the power of your words.
ReplyDeleteCan I ever thank you enough for writing such lovely comments? I think never...It's always a humbling experience to read what you have to say for my words...:)
DeleteFew lines with deep meanings = Saru di
ReplyDeleteBeautifully crafted :)
Awwww....One of the best comments ever. I will cherish it forever...
DeleteThanks a million!!!
always a pleasure reading your lines :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Daniel :) :) :)
DeleteIt is kind of awful how much I relate to this sometimes.
ReplyDeleteThe last few lines were really, really hauntingly beautiful.
I am not happy to know that Antara. I wish you relate to more of happy feelings. Thanks a ton for reading dear...:)
Deletebeautifully written! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteVery beautiful and soulful, eyes are the voice of the soul... how wonderfully expressed.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Arti!
Delete'how the word life would spell' ...these lines are just magic Saru. Wonderful poem dear.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mak :) :) :)
DeleteYou are just too good. Beautifully written Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Namrata. :) :) :)
DeleteI don't know how,
ReplyDeleteIf ever I have to write,
How the word 'life' would spell...
Loved these lines - very deep and profound!
Thank ME and welcome here :)
DeleteBeautiful writing and use of words; you are a gifted writer.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much dear :)
DeleteTruly good writing
ReplyDeleteThanks !!!
DeleteI can just say wow. Those are some emotionally charged lines. Very soulful indeed.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot!
DeleteSaru, this Poem was so beautiful , and inspiring ...
ReplyDeleteloved it from th every start, i usually get hooked to v\certain lines, however, with your poem , i loved each and every word, especially the way it began ..."Amidst the layer of Smile.."
Thanks dear. I am glad you like the poem. Even I love the start of this one. :)
DeleteMelancholy but beautiful !
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
Deleteone can empathise while reading your words.......i have no words .....damn good...
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Chetan!
DeleteI am so touched with your creation... lovely ...
ReplyDeleteThanks Madhaw!!!
Deletevery touchy...could feel the lines..!
ReplyDeletenew to your space..
interesting space you have here..
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do stop by mine sometime
Tasty Appetite
Thanks for reading and following. Will love to read your space...:)
Deletegave me goosebumps..dunno y :(
ReplyDeleteYou know at times I read something and I have nothing to say. Your comment gave me that kinda feeling...
Deleteஹ ஹ...காதல் வழியை இது எற்றிடுமே...ஏதும் புரியவில்லை, எழுதும் தெரியவில்லை...Ha ha dear friend, once again such a wonderful lovable lines from your pen....
ReplyDeleteI translated it to English and this is what I got,
Delete"Ha Ha ... I do not understand anything ... erritume way, do not write ..."
Sekar, please comment in English next time, Google translate is unreliable it seems...:)
Wow.. Loved it Saru.. The inner meaning, the pain & the emotions are greatly conveyed. Hiding the pain with smiles is so difficult but our loved ones will somehow read them! Wonderfully written :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Anand and welcome back. There are very few readers like you who can feel the written words and understand the inherent meaning of it. Good to see you back :)
DeleteA masterpiece....ur poems strike a chord.
ReplyDeleteThank you Alka :) :) :)
DeleteExactly as written above, your poems strike a chord!
ReplyDeleteThank you dear, means a lot coming from you :)
Deletebeautiful poem
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DeleteThanks a lot Ash for reading and for your comment.:)
ReplyDeleteThank you!!!
ReplyDeleteEmotion ebbs and flows. Nice work!!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Ram :)
DeleteBrilliantly expressed full of emotions like always! Keep up the good work Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Shesha.:)
DeleteYes.. Indifference hurts.... Well expressed...
ReplyDeleteIt surely does and thanks for reading.
DeleteBeautiful poem Saru...Silence is the strongest language!
ReplyDeleteIt is if one can understand. Thanks for liking the poem.:)
DeleteThis is beautiful. Extremely so.
ReplyDeleteThanks dear :)
Deletewow...so much said in so less...
ReplyDeletei hope for whosoever this is written is doing good and comes out of it as early as possible...
regards
rahul
Even I wish happiness for all. Thank God, this was a work of fiction. And thanks a ton for reading Rahul...:)
Deletevery intriguing...great work :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Prateek :)
Deleteclarification and correction on behalf of Mr. Sekar
ReplyDeleteI think he tried to translate the last 3 lines of your poem in TAMIL
"I don't know how,
If ever I have to write,
How the word 'life' would spell..."
BUT I'm sad to say that he has translated with more spelling mistakes in the language-TAMIL
CONCLUSION:
HE TRIED TO SAY THAT THOSE LINES ARE TOUCHING HIS HEART
Nice presentation;keep it up
Thanks a ton for writing this comment. :)
DeleteJust one word -- mesmerizing :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Kiran and welcome back!
DeleteLoved it, but I wish there were more lines..didn't like it to end..:)
ReplyDeleteSometimes, I feel I should write long poems but I fail. Somehow, I feel comfortable in writing less words...Thanks for reading the poems and gracing this blog :)
Delete<3 did nt want to stop reading, wanted it 2 just go on and on..
ReplyDeleteEven I feel a kind of connection with this poem and I want to read the pain of the protagonist. Thanks for reading Dipthi:)
DeleteLovee it <3
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
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