तुम बिन
चिराग लेके मैंने ढूँढा, चौखट चौबारा!
निगोड़ी रात में फिर अपने हाथ पे लिखा नाम तुम्हारा!!
जब तुम जाते हो, कुछ रोज के लिए बाहर,
तुम्हारे पीछे पीछे ये मन भी हो जाता है बंजारा!
अकेली रातो में फिर, अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा!!
सुध बुध खो कर, बैठती हूँ उस कोने में,
चाय की प्याली के संग, तुम्हारी यादें बनती है मेरा सहारा!
तनहा रातो में फिर, अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती
हूँ तुम्हारा!!
चिराग लेके ढूँढती हूँ, चौखट चौबारा!
निगोड़ी रात में फिर,अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती
हूँ तुम्हारा!!
~सरू सिंघल~
very impressive...
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot!
Deleteतुम्हारी यादें बनती है मेरा सहारा !
ReplyDeleteतनहा रातो में फिर,
अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
चिराग लेके ढूँढती हूँ,
चौखट चौबारा !
Beautiful....
Thank you Indu :)
Deleteवियोग ने कितनी ही गोपियाँ, राधायें और मीरा को जन्म दिया होगा, जिन्होंने प्रीतम कि याद में कुछ ऐसा ही कहा होगा!
ReplyDeleteउत्तम!
Glad you liked it Anshul :)
Deletewow! deep and romantic :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much:)
DeleteVery beautiful and impressive...
ReplyDeleteThanks Ashish...
Deleteजब तुम जाते हो,
ReplyDeleteकुछ रोज के लिए बाहर,
तुम्हारे पीछे पीछे,
ये मन भी हो जाता है बंजारा !
अकेली रातो में फिर,
अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
vry impressive
Thanks, these are my favorite lines from this poem. :)
DeleteHighly romantic :) and the feelings expressed are awesome .
ReplyDeleteThanks Rekha:) :) :)
Deleteबहुत सुन्दर .. rhythmic and lyrical...
ReplyDeleteThanks Madhuresh:)
DeleteBeautiful!
ReplyDeleteNeed an English version :). I know Hindi, but it's been a decade I read something. :) Got the gist of it though.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and I will post something in English next Monday.
DeleteBeautiful!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sir!!!
DeleteA lovely poetic verse of separation and passions, Saru:) Keep going!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Sir:)
DeleteWow, such beauty woven so simply Saru...
ReplyDeleteNo mess, nothing extra-just the right amount of words to express the right amount of pining :-)
Suruchi, my mother-in-law said I should write little longer poems than this. What do you think? BTW,Thanks for a lovely comment:)
Deletelovely...
ReplyDeleteनिगोड़ी रात में फिर,
ReplyDeleteअपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
Awesome!! :)
Thanks Simran:)
Deleteसुध बुध खो कर,
ReplyDeleteबैठती हूँ उस कोने में,
चाय की प्याली के संग,
सुन्दर भावमय कोमल सी रोमांटिक अभिव्यक्ति.
इस 'चाय की प्याली' की भी महिमा है निराली.
A cup of tea can do wonders, for sure and thank you so much for reading Sir.
Deletebahut hi shandar
ReplyDeleteromantic poem
सुध बुध खो कर,
बैठती हूँ उस कोने में,
चाय की प्याली के संग,
तुम्हारी यादें बनती है मेरा सहारा !
तनहा रातो में फिर,
अपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
Thank you Chirag:)
DeleteWaah ... What a lovely coincidence ki आज की हमारी और आपकी कवितायो के शीर्षक एक हैं। भाव पूर्ण कविता है, बहुत सुंदर।
ReplyDeleteIt was a beautiful co-incidence and glad you liked it:)
DeleteHow sweet:) This is the story of every girl in love :) Needless to say that its beautiful :).. *love*
ReplyDeleteThats so nice of you Sonia...
DeleteXOXOXO
beautiful again!
ReplyDeletemadhur aur sureeley ye bol aapke,
hmm.. kya kahe..? bass mann ko chuu gaye :)
:) Thanks for such a beautiful comment. :) :) :)
Deleteati sundar post
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ma'am:)
DeleteA cute hindi poem,, hath pe likhti hu naam tumhara,, so sweet..
ReplyDeleteThanks Ruchi!
Deletepangs of separation.. n the twinges of melancholy is reflecting in each line..
ReplyDeletesoulfully written Saru..
Loved it :)
Thanks Jyoti :) :) :)
Delete"Jab bhi saans leta hoon, mahek tumhari pass rehti hai..
ReplyDeleteNigahen aksar puchti hai,..wo kaun hai jo,. Hamesha mujhme basi rehti hai…
very nice...
Beautiful couplet and thanks for reading Bhargav:)
Deletebeautiful words Saru. Nice to read Hindi after a long time.
ReplyDeleteBut you know, sometimes it feel like a curse to be so madly in love with someone. Living alone then becomes tough isn't it. And then focurse there the fear of one being taken for granted?
Yes of course, as you said later, too much dependence is too bad. Sorry, your comment went into spam.:(
Deletebeautiful poem ..:)
ReplyDeleteThanks Anjali:)
DeleteMost enjoyable piece of writing..
ReplyDeleteby the hand and at the Hand.
A handful Congratulation!
for your Book Publication.
Thank you so much for your wishes Sir and for reading :)
DeleteBeautiful, listless refrain!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
Deleteजिंदा तस्वीर है यहाँ ,आँखों से नहीं ज़रा दिल से देखें
ReplyDeleteशब्दों का ताना- बाना तो कोई तुमसे सीखे :))
Thanks Sharmila and welcome here:)
DeleteTender & loving as usual--you express these sentiments so nicely.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ma'am and I was so happy to read your poems. :)
Deletebeautiful as always:)
ReplyDeleteThank you Rekha:)
DeleteViyog shrangaar ka behad sundar chitran:)
ReplyDeleteIt's so beautifully done, Saru!
Thank you so much Sir. Glad you liked it:)
DeleteVery nicely written. saadgi se piroye shabd bahut sundar lage.
ReplyDeleteGood Luck.
Thank you so much!
Deletevery well written... loved it
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteDidn't understand much of Hindi! So I google gives me the option of translation into english! Lovely use of words!
ReplyDeleteThanks Danny, I will be posting something in English this Monday. Hope you will read and enjoy it:)
DeleteLooking forward to it!!
Delete:) :) :)
DeleteYou have to write a comment on love posts. These kind of remarks are not acceptable. :)
ReplyDeletebeautiful read it the second time ..wr ws d 1st time , FB ???
ReplyDeleteDon't know Alka, this is for the first time I shared it. Thanks for reading dear!
DeleteSaru, this is so lovely, such a romantic read!
ReplyDeleteDo stop by my blog sometime! :) http://e-pinion.blogspot.in
Sure and thanks for reading!
DeletePoetic brilliance Saru! You captured the emotions perfectly. By the way, hows the book release going? And where's my free copy? :P
ReplyDeleteRelease was good and this is not my book Binu. I am just a part of it. For my individual book, I will give you and ask for a review. Thanks for reading and for a lovely comment!
DeleteSaru, I had posted a comment, and now I dont know where it went :-(
ReplyDeleteThe poem is brilliant as always, and hindi poems(although i take some time to read and understand are always a master piece).
On a different note, too much of dependance of a person can be so fatal. Your life just revolving around one person.
You comment went into spams. I found few more along with yours there, thank you for that. Even I don't believe in being dependent on someone to that extent, the other person starts taking you for granted. Love should be more of a balanced emotion.
DeleteThanks for reading and helping me trace few other comments.
beautifully Put my dear...
ReplyDeleteThank you...
Deletebirhaa....................
ReplyDeleteSigh!
DeleteKya baath hai..khoob....
ReplyDeletenice
ReplyDelete:)
Deletevirah vyatha ka sateek chitrankan...
ReplyDeletebahut khoob!
Thank you so much!
DeleteU tube par Ashok ji dwara aapke aur Rakesh ji se huyee blogging par sarthak vaarta sunkar bahut achha laga....
ReplyDeleteIt was an honor meeting them and thanks for watching :)
Deleteतनहा रातो में फिर,
ReplyDeleteअपने हाथ पे नाम लिखती हूँ तुम्हारा !!
चिराग लेके ढूँढती हूँ,
चौखट चौबारा !
lovely ... i m your latest follower ..:)
Thanks Anu, hope you will like my work:)
DeleteKya baat hai saru...miya ji par bada pyaar aaya:):):)
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
DeleteBeautiful words, Saru! When I saw the title, I was reminded of the "Tum bin jaaon kahan" song.
ReplyDeleteIt is such a beautiful and soulful song. Thanks for a lovely comment Rachna:)
DeleteI do not understand, but the picture is beautiful! Thanks for your visit. I have been absent without creativity a while, but hope it's back.
ReplyDeleteHugs from north:-)
Welcome back Tania. And it's so good to see you back. I missed your shots!
Deletebeautiful poem
ReplyDeleteachi lines hai
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteBahut achha. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteWaah! kya baat hai.
ReplyDeleteSunder Kavita. :)
Thank you so much:)
DeleteYou poems in Hindi really gets to me, especially about Love and separation. Read it twice! :)
ReplyDeletePS: So so sorry for such a late comment Saru. :(
No worries Akshay. Thanks for reading and liking it.
DeleteWOW.. phewwwwwwwwwwwwwww, finally reached the bottom , but then if you write so beautiful then obviously people admire and you get so many compliments ....
ReplyDeleteloved reading it saru mam... :)
Bikram's
Thank you so much Bikram. Even I scroll this much to write something on your blog...:) :) :)
DeleteThat was a very soulful poem, Saru :):) You're writing awesome Hindi poems these days :)
ReplyDeleteThank you:) :) :)
DeleteThis reminded me of 'Un Bin Kate Na Raina' :)
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that, it such a beautiful song.
Deleteshe writes words,
ReplyDeleteand she romance with her pen!
'Do you write the name on the arm?'
I loved the repetition of the line; the form!
Keep writing,
I keep reading,
the translation!
Thank you!
special thanks for the picture as well! I'm a mad fan of Aishu!
DeleteThanks SIS for making the effort and reading it. This is a sweet gesture on your part. And no wonder you are a mad fun of Ash, she is drop dead gorgeous.
DeleteShe was, she is and she will be...!
DeleteNice composition....
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteWah chaa gaye saru ji !
ReplyDeleteLikhe haath pe naam tumhara
Tumhi ho jisne mera jeevan sanwaara !!!
Good one Mak and it rhymed as well. Thanks for reading:)
Deletewooow Saru .. beautiful poem !
ReplyDeleteThanks Rahul!
DeleteThat's such a soft n romantic piece, Saru! Dil ko chu gaya...
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ma'am.:)
DeleteThat was really touching and soul stirring....beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot!!!
Deletewonderful :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much :)
Deleteawesome poem :)
ReplyDeletebut it would been even better if not for the aiswarya's poem. let your pristine prose create its own unique image in each reader's mind as she/he would have it :)
mohit
*aishwarya's pic
ReplyDeletecorrection plz :D
I normally put a picture and couldn't find better than this. However, some feel this added to the beauty of the poem. I think we all have our perspectives.
DeleteGlad you liked the poem.:) Thanks for reading :)
beautiful poem..:) :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
Deletebahut khoob...
ReplyDeleteतुम्हारे पीछे पीछे,
ये मन भी हो जाता है बंजारा !
lines dil ko chhu gyi..
Thank you and welcome here Sunil :)
Deleteso sweet saru......
ReplyDeleteloved it!!!
anu
Thanks Anu!
Deletedil ko chhu lene wali behad bhavnatmak kavita
ReplyDeleteShukriya
DeleteKhoobsurat
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