मजधार
कौन सा रास्ता खुशियों की तरफ जाता हैं!
लहरों से जूझते हुए पता नहीं,
साहिल कब, कहाँ नज़र आता हैं!!
इक कश्ती पे सवार थी,
बहुत दूर मंजिल थी मेरी,
मजधार में जो साथ टूटा,
बेवक्त रोना न जाने किस किस बात पे आता है!
तुमको हो मालूम तो बताना,
कौन सा रास्ता खुशियों की तरफ जाता हैं!
बोझ है मेरे सीने पर कई,
रात दिन उस आस में 'नई',
रेत के घरोंदे सा मेरा मन,
हर चीस पे ढेह जाता है!
तुमको हो मालूम तो बताना,
कौन सा रास्ता खुशियों की तरफ जाता हैं!
बिन पूछे कोई सवाल, लहरों के संग संग बहूँगी,
जिंदा हूँ गर आज भी, तो जिंदा ही रहूंगी,
उसके नाम को दफ़न करने के बाद,
उसकी यादों से रिश्ता बन जाता है!
पर गर तुमको हो मालूम तो बताना,
कौन सा रास्ता खुशियों की तरफ जाता हैं!
*This poem tries to portray the feelings of a friend who lost her husband in an accident a week back. He was hit by a car driven by young boys who were heavily drunk. It was her first birthday after marriage and she is seven months pregnant.
Oh my God :( No words could provide her any solace at this moment, but still, your friend will be in my prayers. Hope, God gives her the strength to carry on.
ReplyDeleteWhile reading the poetry, though it was very beautiful, I was wishing there is no real-life inspiration behind it. Your words are beautiful, the pain though, is unending and ugly.
May the departed rest in peace and may God give strength to the family, to bear this huge loss.
This is so sad. Will they live with this guilt that they destroyed a happy family with their callous attitude ?
ReplyDeleteThe emotion overwhelms the words, as also any critical faculty one may possess. Reminds me of a Ghazal I wrote many years ago on an Indian's death in one of those senseless US Campus massacres:
ReplyDeleteबेवजह मौत दिखे जब भी
यूँही उसे तुम याद करना
बहाना तो जीने का चाहिए
नहीं मुश्किल बेसबब मरना
It was suitably composed and sung and posted on Orkut(those were the days), went semi viral and in a few days the girl's family contacted us saying that the Ghazal had offered them some solace. Your words will undoubtedly offer some solace to your friend. Our prayers!
Oh My God, I dunno what to say, RIP! But what will happen to that girl? Sad.. Let humans give her a new life..
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Tragic. Holding good thoughts for her.
ReplyDeleteVery sad indeed ! No words enough to console! Such incidents are on rise with only innocent as victms!
ReplyDeletegod give her strength .......no words to console such a tragedy :(...
ReplyDeleteVery sad...
ReplyDeleteI cannot even begin to imagine what ur frend must be going through. May God give her the strength to bear this loss. And beautifully expressed emotions Saru. Touched!
ReplyDeleteRealty sad..!! let the God give her the strength to look forward anyway Nice poem.
ReplyDeleteShocking, to say the least! Its sad that innocents bear the brunt of the illegal activities committed by other people!
ReplyDeleteOur prayers are with the loved ones and their families.
ओह्ह बहुत ही दुखद घटना है, आपने अहसासों को शब्दों में अच्छे से पिरोया है....
ReplyDeleteShocked Saru! And angry very very angry. Your poem depicts how lost she is now, but we pray to god, to give her the strength. I am too shocked to say anything more here.
ReplyDeleteReally, really sad to hear about your friend's husband. Your poem is heart-rending. May God give her the strength to see through this dark period.
ReplyDeleteGod is so cruel sometimes.. None can understand the depth of the pain that she must be going through Di.. I got the Goose bumps and tears filled my eyes reading the poem of yours.. What else can we do other then praying that God give your friend strength to face this difficult phase of life.. No words to say anything more..
ReplyDeleteGives me goosebumps and makes me numb to think what must that woman be thinking of right now. Shocked. Petrified. And life sometimes is really not fair. :(
ReplyDeleteThat is devastating. Makes my heart heavy just imagining what the family must be going through. A precious life lost due to carelessness of some drunk morons, makes me sad and angry. I hope your friend and her family gets the strength to face the most devastating phase of their life. Your beautiful words lend an emotional and poignant touch, Saru.
ReplyDeleteThis is really sad and unfortunate :(
ReplyDeleteYou expressed the emotions beautifully. I liked these lines "Tumko ho maloom to batana, kaun sa rasta khushiyon ki taraf jaata hai"
A heart rending piece, Saru. This is absolutely shocking...May God give her n the family all the strength to bear the loss. Very very sad indeed...:((
ReplyDeleteI dont know what to say Saru,I can feel the pain in your poem but no one can tell her "kaun sa rastha khushion ki taraf jaata hey".whatever happened with her is very cruel.I wish she get the strength and courage to lead her life.
ReplyDeleteYou have presented her situation very well through this poem.
First when i read your poem I thought it must be conveying pain of a girl who must have been ditched by her boyfriend & wanted to suggest to forget that guy & move on......but in vain.......it's all together otherwise when i read your note :(
ReplyDeleteMay god give her valor to move with life.....because life must go on.
I had tears in my eyes while i was reading the poem.. and when I read the post script... it struck so hard..so sorry for your friend's loss.. may God give the family strength.
ReplyDeleteYou are a great poet saru.. you can make people feel any emotion you want..
may that lady have the stregnth of mind and heart .......
ReplyDeletenice lines...
I have tears in my eyes after reading your poem Saru.. Can't imagine what she must be going through..We can just pray may God give her strength to carry on... May the departed soul rest in peace...
ReplyDeleteWonderful and touching poem Saru! I am saying prayers for your dear friend!
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Oh God! I am in tears..I wish she could give a new start to her life. Feeling sorry for the loss.
ReplyDelete..spellbinding! utterly poignant!
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I couldnot go beyond the first 5 lines, not because its in hindi, or because i as bored, but solely because, something similar happened at my end. Your Poem has a life innit, a soul that has been well captured. Saru, you are someone who has the ability to make a simple sentence sound beautiful.
ReplyDeleteAm glad your friend has you around, and il pray that God gives her strength and courage , to heal her wounds
deeply touched!!!!!
ReplyDeleteसरू जी ऐसा लगा कि मन पढ़ लिया उनका...दर्द सा हुआ...
बहुत सुन्दर..
अनु
Absolutely sad to know the context. We never realise that small acts of ours done without much thought, can change the life of someone for ever.
ReplyDeleteAll I can say is please be by her side and give her strength and courage to rebuild her life.
Heart wrenching </3
ReplyDeleteloved these lines तुमको हो मालूम तो बताना,
ReplyDeleteकौन सा रास्ता खुशियों की तरफ जाता हैं !so v beautiful .
Oh God Saru!! Wishing her all the strength she needs to overcome this tragedy....May God be with her!
ReplyDeleteFull of emotions depression with original feel.
ReplyDeleteMay god give strength to your friend.
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OMG so sad ...your poem expresses all her misery so evocatively.
ReplyDeleteThis is so sad.. it is very tough to digest this. Moved to tears
ReplyDeleteI am speechless. I can’t express my sadness in words and I can’t even try to imagine the burden of pain and unending grief your friend would be going through. Sometimes silence is the best solace I can offer. For a moment, your words took me into the realms of the agony and pain that would have come to occupy her soul. The pain is hers to shoulder but through your poem you have alleviated it a little by letting us feel the same pain. May God and lovely friends like you be with her in this testing time and give her the inner strength. I will pray!
ReplyDeleteso sorry to hear about ure friend,,, condolences. Life is so unpredictable, one has to live wid the good and bad. I am sure ure friend will do well.... support frm friends and family is the key in these times.
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मार्मिक,हृदयस्पर्शी प्रस्तुति.
ReplyDeleteमृत्यु एक अटल सत्य है.
न जाने किस् पल यह घटित हो जाए.
मृत्यु का आघात सोचने समझने के लिए मजबूर कर देता है.
जिसे हम पाया समझते हैं,उसे हम कभी भी खो भी सकते हैं.
अध्यात्म चिंतन मृत्यु के त्रास से निजात दिलाता है.
भावपूर्ण गहन प्रस्तुति के लिए आभार,सरू जी.
Very sad and heart wrenching... you never know what life has in store for you the next moment. My heartfelt condolences, keeping her in my prayers and wishing the very best for her.
ReplyDeleteबहुत ही सुन्दर रचना.
ReplyDeleteLife throws such hard hits sometimes.... Condolences..
ReplyDeleteCondolences to your friend. Life is so hard and unforgiving at times. You just have to flow with it.
ReplyDeleteऊफ़्फ़ ये जिंदगी भी कितने कष्ट देती है ।
ReplyDeleteI hope and pray that God gives her enough strength and support to go through this.
ReplyDeleteI haven't read anything more touching Saru. Emotionally strong.
ReplyDeleteRIP is what i can say and no words can console the soul right now.
so sorry to hear about the horrid tale.. Can just hope n wish dat god takes care of her in every way in her life henceforth.. her grief is far beyond my imagination.. May god always be with her..
ReplyDeletevery touching
ReplyDeletei feel sorry for your friend's loss ..
ReplyDeletemy Condolences...
beautifully written poem for your friend Saru !
It is so so sad! I have no words to express how beautiful your poem and how sad are the circumstances in which you wrote it.
ReplyDeleteगहरे अहसासों के समेटती ख़ूबसूरत कविता...
ReplyDeleteVery sad to hear about your friends loss. May god give her strength to ride over these tragic moments.
ReplyDeleteLove your work Saru.
Thank you everyone for your concern. She is going through a tough phase.
ReplyDeletePlease keep her in your prayers...
Felt very sad about your friend.I dont why god chose people for shock therepy and for a normal person it is very hard to digest that it has happened and people start asking question to god the same way as you potrayed the emotion of her through your poem. No words can heal her wounds but shedding tears will definately lighten her heart and I will pray to God to give her strength and move on in life and find happiness within herself.
ReplyDeleteI loved your poem... however the full impact of it came from your note about your friend... no words can capture her emotions and feelings... That you dedicate your poem to her is highly commendable
ReplyDeleteSoulful poetry and what a terrible irony life offers!
ReplyDeleteVery sad case...my condolences to ur friend and her family...
ReplyDelete"उसके नाम को दफ़न करने के बाद,
उसकी यादों से रिश्ता बन जाता है ! say it all!
OH GOD...
ReplyDeletedont know what to say saru..
Hey,
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The bereavement is inconsolable; It is hard that someone has to pay for the misdeeds of others, and the shock that it brings.
ReplyDeleteMay God give her strength, from within and from everyone else around to cope with it and have a healthy baby. May the baby bring a different kind of happiness to her life.
Regards,
Blasphemous Aesthete
very well written ...made me emotional
ReplyDeletethis poem could only have been written in hindi. you know your words well.
ReplyDeletei grieve for your friend.
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अच्छी कविता है ।
ReplyDeleteHeart Touching!
ReplyDeleteजिंदा हूँ गर आज भी, तो जिंदा ही रहूंगी
ReplyDeleteBrilliant!
@Everyone - Thank you for your lovely comments.
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