No longer mourn me when I am dead
No longer mourn me when I am dead.
Kindle me in your heart,
More so, in your hope.
Perfect would be for your deeds.
For my death has sown the seeds.
Mourn me no longer - I am dead.
Save your tear for mirth,
Don't waste it on me.
Ashes don't make you strong,
Let me go where I belong.
Mourn me no longer - I am dead.
Alter the course of tomorrow,
Today you have time.
Let our children see only light,
Let us make all the wrongs right.
No longer mourn me when I am dead.
Broken hearts seldom seek ahead.
*The title is inspired by Sonnet 71
yes, the seed has been sown by the death.. and we need to make all the wrongs right. Nice poem Saru.
ReplyDeleteWe should now concentrate on action. Enough is said but not done. Thanks for reading Sumit!
DeleteLet us all pray and hope that her death doesn't go in vain.
ReplyDeleteI wish so...
DeleteHeart touching words Saru.
ReplyDeleteLet our children see only light,
Let us make all the wrongs right.
Thats the vow we all should take today to see tomorrow we all long for.
Yes, we long for a place which is safer for our kids...Hope our children get that...
DeleteThanks for reading!
powerful words, very expressive
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir.
DeleteWith some I feel like their death is a celebration. They suffered long enough. With others I can't help, but to mourn. I'm saddened when I hear of children that pass. Their time, taken too short.
ReplyDeleteIndians are mourning a death which was both brutal and much before time. Her time was definitely cut short and that too is a barbaric way...
DeleteGood one.
ReplyDeleteLoved the ending.
ReplyDeleteEven I liked it...:) Thanks for reading Alka.
DeleteBeautifully penned, Saru!
ReplyDeleteThanks Rachna!
DeleteSo beautifully written - very touching.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful expressions..
ReplyDeleteThank you.
Deletemoved.. really nice one Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Sanhita and welcome here :)
Deleteit was perfect...
ReplyDeleteyou said everything that can be said.. :)
Lovely
Thanks Jyoti, coming from you it is a big compliment. Do share the name of the book if you remember.:)
DeleteShe is actually saying those words, stop mourning me, and get going with the seeds I have sown. Change the tomorrow, and start today, start now. Yes she feels this, and doesn't want the sympathy, she wants actions and results. You have nailed this here totally!!
ReplyDeleteWe all want action, we have passed that state of grief, our grief has surpassed to another level where only actions can calm us down.
DeleteThanks for reading and liking it :)
No longer mourn me when I am dead.
ReplyDeleteWhile you could have been the change
Of rooting out discrimination
And crime
Yes, no mourning, we need to give her respect, the way we treat our soldiers.
DeletePerfect. Very soulful.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jas :)
DeleteChange for a better tomorrow is all we hope for Saru! Very touching!!
ReplyDeleteHope is all we have, coupled with action it will surely bring a brighter tomorrow. Thanks for reading Sir.
Deletebeautiful...sorrowful...wonderful...soulful...loved it
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Brad...
DeletePowerful....
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteTouching Saru
ReplyDeleteThis is sad , it is true what good is mourning if tomorrow another girl faces the same trauma..
ReplyDeleteBikram's
Yes and it's better we use this energy on actions.
Deletebeautiful!. and the message is so strong that it could be perceived even wihtout an explicit reference :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Stuti :)
Deletepowerful words that pulled strings of the heart, Saru.. on reading this one surely revisit the poignant memories of last month that still stand fresh in the minds..
ReplyDeleteI wish those memories motivate such so that we can do our duties as a good citizens. A good and safe society is a collective effort.
DeleteThis is touching and motivating at the same time. It contains a strong message that time is running too fast that we shouldn't spend so much time to mourn the past. There's nothing much we can do about it so walk ahead and concentrate on present and future. An absolutely beautiful poem, Saru!
ReplyDeleteYes, mourning is not fruitful. Broken hearts don't think wisely. We have to put all our energy to bring a brighter future. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts here. Good to connect with you on Facebook too :)
DeleteLet us make all the wrongs right! That's what everyone has to learn. But,sigh! Some monsters are sick to get it.
ReplyDeleteYou can't change everyone. Wish our society improves but that would only happen if the larger section is ready to change. Lets fight this battle together...
Deletedeath takes away the person not the soul....
ReplyDeleteAnd definitely not the spirit for which that person stands for...
DeleteIt's a nice sentiment...but or "breaking news" mongers will not let it go that easily. They are even giving footage to useless people like Asaram...
ReplyDeleteYour poem is a mature effort about the lessons we need to learn...
Every single day you see one or other speaking something nasty but I think we are mature enough to take our own path. Hope things change for better...
DeleteLoved the last four lines, which is what required,
ReplyDelete"Alter the course of tomorrow,
Today you have time.
Let our children see only light,
Let us make all the wrongs right."
Beautifully penned poem. I wish she was there to read it.
You know how our great-grand parents fought for our independence. They wanted to give us freedom, similarly we have to do. Only that we have to free the society from such evils. I wish she was alive because she wanted to.
DeleteA very strong message conveyed in such a beautiful way.. Nice one :)
ReplyDeleteThank you bride-to-be :)
DeleteWhat a beautiful poem with a message...let's hope something gets materialized this time.
ReplyDeleteYes, let's hope for the best...
DeleteBeautiful and brilliant !
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir :)
DeleteVery touching and beautiful...
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot :)
Deletereally touching . हम हिंदी चिट्ठाकार हैं
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteIntense. Complete. Powerful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sathish!
DeleteYour poems always always stir something in my heart, but this one touched me much deeper, I just pondered over it for a while after I read it. As brutal and tragic her death was, I sometimes wonder will it ever change? This is much beyond making laws and punishments much more stringent, it is even beyond change in mindsets of people. Something much deeper, very deep in our very core...
ReplyDeleteEven I wonder the same, nothing has changed except for the number of such brutalities. Yes, we need to work hard on our morals. I love reading mysteries and crime thrillers and most of the times you come across criminals who had bad upbringing, so if we work on that level, telling how to bring up your kids, what values to inculcate, things might change.
DeleteGlad that this poem has evoked deep emotions in you. Thanks for reading Akshay :)
a similar something my brother Raghav has written as a tribute to the girl Nirbhaya .. read it here :
ReplyDeleteraghav505.blogspot.in/2013/01/delhi-rape-case-short-poem.html
Will surely read it Rahul, thanks for sharing :)
DeleteBeautiful and touching piece Saru!
ReplyDeleteThanks Valli!
Deletenice poem saru..
ReplyDeleteThank you Monali :)
DeletePowerful, Saru! I am the idiot with no ear for poetry but this one struck a chord!
ReplyDeleteThrilled to read your comment Sir. I wish we live up to the spirit of this poem, our country is in dire need of change...
DeleteActually, Indians are founders of the term hypocrisy. We are so confused that we don't know what we believe in. Since when 10:30 is late in a metro??? No wonder, BPO employees are not safe in our country but are kids safe in their home? This is a debate which will go on and on till we change ourselves. It's very funny how I feel after reading it. Someone is saying, since you were out at night, rape toh hona hi tha...Utterly ridiculous...
ReplyDeleteAll I want to say in this poem is, there is no point in sharing, tweeting about her now, change yourself, help a girl in need, raise your voice when you see discrimination and please make this country liveable. BTW, I applaud you as you took part in those protests, in fact I applaud everyone who was a part of it. Thanks for reading and I agree, last two lines are good :) Hope we follow it in its spirit.
Yea, we need to 'alter the course of tomorrow. Nice poetry.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir and welcome here :)
DeleteSo pain driven, but still steering towards hope. Loved it Saru di. :)
ReplyDeleteThis poem has the same underlying theme as your recent post. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading Anshul.:)
DeleteNice poem, Saru.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteHope and pray the wrongs will be corrected soon.. it is already too late.
ReplyDeleteIt is very late, so we must act now.
DeletePoignant lines, Saru.
ReplyDeleteThat's how the situation is...what else to say.
DeleteWell written poem Saru...It touches the right chords.
ReplyDeleteYour title reminds me of a self written poem that I guess I wrote in school, will post someday soon :)
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http://ektakhetan.blogspot.in
Do share it with us Ekta and thanks for reading :)
DeleteAbsolutely beautiful!
ReplyDelete...but from the pen of Saru it's not a surprise:)
LOL! And thanks for reading Sir!
DeleteVeracity!
ReplyDeleteSam, I am little confused how to take this comment :)
DeleteAnyways, Thanks for reading :)
Beautiful one Saru! Instead of sympathesing with the victim, lets work together for a better future, if not for us, then atleast for the next generation! :)
ReplyDeleteYes, we have to do it for our children...
Deletewell written. i do hope that the last two lines do come true!
ReplyDeleteWe have to act now...Hope things change for better...
DeleteHi Saru,
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written poem. There are times to mourn and then there are times when one should stand up and fight for their rights and make their voices heard. The human spirit and hope was not created to be trampled upon. I hope the nation & its citizens awaken and take stock of this situation.
Good work once again.
Regards
Jay
My Blog | My FB Page
Hi Jay,
DeleteRight, we have to take the stock of this situation which BTW will be more of self analysis. We have to work on our own morals before we even try to change our country.
Glad you liked it.
Thanks,
Saru
u posted this one at the right time...not many understands the importance of time at the moment...it shows me that you live i your present..:)
ReplyDeleteI do live in present with a constant endeavor to make future better. Thanks for reading Chetan.
DeleteWe have to...
ReplyDeleteSo heart wrenching and touching. Hope things change for the better soon!
ReplyDeleteYeah, we all hope so too...
DeleteNice...u are pretty good with soul-stirring poems....keep up
ReplyDeleteThank you and glad you liked it. :)
Deletevery apt ---and befitting to the situation prevalent today
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteSaru, I have not been here for a while.. and I cannot wait to catch up. You have a gift. You must have heard this a hundred times.. but you do. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteYes, I have a gift and that is all the beautiful people who read it. I am gifted with awesome people around me, including you :)
DeleteI guess things around us invoke such great emotions that we end up writing such verses. Thanks for reading and for a beautiful comment. I know you have been very busy and congrats on the second baby :)
Beautifully expressed! Though am not too much into poetry, I love reading yours. Gr8 one Saru! May god rest her soul...
ReplyDeleteI think our actions will give her peace. She has united the entire nation for a cause and lets not fail her...
DeleteThanks for a generous comment. :)
Sad and touching, but beautiful..
ReplyDeleteYou are really good with words!
Bless U:-)
Thank you Tania and have a great weekend :)
Delete"Mourn me no longer-I am dead" , how very true Saru. No point in whining over what has passed.The system needs a change, mentality of the people towards women needs a change. Indian patriarchy needs to be laid at rest in peace with the Delhi girl .Her death has sown the seeds of change..
ReplyDeleteYes, we need to do all that and we surely need some introspection.
DeleteMam amazing work and the lines
ReplyDelete"Ashes don't make you strong"
"Alter the course of tomorrow, today you have time"
and "Broken hearts seldom seek ahead"..
are really making feelings alive...
Thank you so much Saurabh for a generous comment and it's an honor to have a reader like you. Thanks once again.
DeleteSaru this is awesome ,we should all learn this lesson.
ReplyDeleteWe should...:) Thanks for reading Ma'am.
DeleteI think we should focus more on the life we have. And an amazing post.
ReplyDeleteI don't know if this is spam. But I was hoping a few people could check out my blog? I just started it.
Thank you =)
Congrats on the new blog, would love to read it but there is no link attached to your profile. Enable it. :)
DeleteBeautiful. I see it this way: what is the point in mourning after her death when you could not protect her while she was alive ?
ReplyDeleteVery true...
Deletethat's so apt, after everyone's through with all they wanted to say and do.. let us not let this fight flicker out...so well written..
ReplyDeleteWe should finish what we started and make our country safer.
DeleteThanks for reading. :)
"Mourn me no longer-I am dead"
ReplyDeletedeath has sown the seeds indeed.. with just a few words you said it all..
i have been very bussy and hardly come on blog., but now that i started with your one post, i cant stop reading all that i missed.. you are one gifted and wonderful writer..
Welcome back, it's always good to hear from you. You just make my day with your generous comments Dipthi :)
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