Rewind - September 2023
I wrote the following in September. Sometimes, I feel I will forget the art of writing couplets because I am not writing at all this year. I strongly believe you have to practice to hone your craft. And I am not doing that. Perhaps I schedule a time to write a poem. Or I need better time management skills. Date Published 09/05/2023 मुझे उसके जाने का इतना अफ़सोस नहीं हुआ जितना इस बात का कि इतने सालों तक उसे रहने ही क्यों दिया Love, Saru
Wonderful one Saru. Its really soulful and true. Indeed silence is a girl's loudest cry.
ReplyDeleteIndeed and wish we get more men to understand that. :)
DeleteA very powerful silence ....i must say ....!!just loved it ...!!read it many times ...!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Anupama :)
Deleteits hurtful :( love d way u write...express..n jst nail it indeed!!
ReplyDeleteGlad you like it Palak :)
DeleteBeautifully expressed Saru. Sometimes life leaves you with such questions whose answers are really hard to find. When you do things right, It haunts badly.
ReplyDeleteYes, it does. Sometimes life gives us hard time, emotionally. Thanks for reading Nihar :)
DeleteA touching one.. but I loved the two lines in bold at the end...the crux!
ReplyDeleteGreat and I love the beginning of the poem. Thanks for reading dear :)
Deletethis moment when I am reading it, I was asking the same question to myself- what went wrong? I have no clue... perhaps resorting to silence would give me some clue..
ReplyDeleteYou should try talking, well a good conversation may be. It helps to clear the clouds.
DeleteGood one, Saru!
ReplyDeleteThank you Rekha :)
DeleteSaru, Very touching and poignant! For last thirty minutes I am reading this touching poem again and again. It is really soulful. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteSuper excited to read your comment Ma'am. Thanks for a beautiful comment.
DeleteOh, the heartbreak! Well written.
ReplyDeleteThank you Fiona :)
DeleteSometimes we really have no clue as to what went wrong:)nice writing Saru!
ReplyDeleteThere are many such incidents in my life. Thanks for reading, Sir.
DeleteTouched the heart Saru. Very nice. The pain well brought out.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jas :)
DeleteSilence is girls loudest cry.... So true... Expressed beautifully...
ReplyDeleteThank you Manjulika :)
DeleteNice composition!:)
ReplyDeleteThanks Tarang!
DeleteThe final lines were great.....overall a good poem...but this is not your best work :/
ReplyDeleteIt's hard to compete against myself :P
DeleteIt's just a free verse written in less than 10 minutes.
Beautiful!
ReplyDeletethose intense feelings that comes within and we remain clueless after ..what went wrong! I relate to this ...
you said that all.
Best wishes :-)
Oh! Not a happy feeling to know that you can relate to it. Stay happy, Stay blessed!
Deleteheart touching,.excellent,awesome.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteSoulful. What went wrong..I have no clue. I have had many instances where I have asked myself this and I still remain clueless.
ReplyDeleteWe all have much such incidents. I wish we have some magic to figure it out.
DeleteDeep meaning, soulful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Praveen.
Deletewhat words...yeah tugs the heart like a sad song. And so true as u have said...silence is the loudest cry but wonder why it fails to impact...
ReplyDeleteYeah, it always fail to make an impact. I guess, things are taken for granted.
Deletewonderful resonating poem
ReplyDeleteThank you.
Delete"Silence is the loudest cry " but only few of them understands well,find yourself lucky if you have one around you ...rest of them neither understands your silence nor your words...
ReplyDeleteWonderfully penned....
Yeah, most understand none of the expression. Thanks for reading!
DeleteWhen a girl avoids you, it means she is deeply hurt. Great! :)
ReplyDeleteTrue that!
Deletesoulful .. can feel the silence .. !
ReplyDeleteHmmm...:)
DeleteLoved it!
ReplyDelete:) :) :)
Deletea heart touching poem! Beautifully written and expressed too!
ReplyDeleteThank you Saurabh!
DeleteDeep and intense, I loved the oxymoron - silence and loudest cry - gives the poem such a beautiful punch.
ReplyDeleteThank you Arti! :)
Deletebeautiful one
ReplyDeleteThank you!
Deletewell love prefers keeping in dilemma .. when it is and when no more ..
ReplyDeleteSaru you are amazing !! :)
Yeah, love is a tricky thing. Thanks for the second line :)
DeleteThis is beautiful!!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteLovely poem..brings out the angst.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteLovely one... Silence is really golden :)
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeleteBeautifully woven words..... How to praise this piece, i have no clue! :P
ReplyDeleteLOL :)
DeleteNice Poem I am guessing spontaneous and heartfelt I presume... good loved it, but saru, but a silent woman is also more like miracle for men..... Kidding :) :P :P
ReplyDeleteLOL, yeah it's kinda true. But when we are silent, you are in big trouble Mr :)
DeleteThanks for reading and welcome here!
It's really beautiful composition packed with emotion. Silence is always louder than sound.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir.
DeleteVery nice poem. We never realize our mistakes to correct them.
ReplyDeleteSadly, we don't and if we do, it's too late.
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ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteI really loved the way u started .....
ReplyDeletePurple days of life,
Faded to azure blue.
What went wrong?
I have no clue.
Beautiful :)
Thank you and welcome here :)
Deletewonderfull
ReplyDeletebeautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThanks!
Deletetouched .. what went wrong no clue.. . it is so true that sometimes relationships drift so much apart that there is no clue how it all started in the first place...
ReplyDeleteYes, it happens... :(
DeleteGreat words .
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteYour post reminded me of something I read somewhere:
ReplyDeleteThe Fish says "I cant see my tears because I am in the Water"
Water says: "I cant feel your tears because you are in my heart"
We may hide our pains, but never can we lie to people who care for us the most. Words are not needed for them to know how we are.
Well said Jiggyasa. When things are not meant to be, silence and words are mere excuses. Thanks for a beautiful comment.
Deletevery touching & sentimental .
ReplyDeleteThank you Ma'am :)
DeleteTo try and not getting it ur way..
ReplyDeleteLoved this one!
Thank you :)
DeleteEmotions and hurt deeply poignant!
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteSilence is a girl's loudest cry...loved it!!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully expressed!
Thank you Kriti!
Deleteप्रभावी !!!
ReplyDeleteशुभकामना
आर्यावर्त
one word WOW
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteA small poem but having a lot of depth, very well written.
ReplyDeleteThank you Suhas :)
DeleteVery nicely written. In this increasingly noise world, we have forgotten the virtue of silence. We have forgotten that someone can also convey by being silent.
ReplyDeleteRight Sabya, we don't know and we even don't try. Good to see you here after a long time. :)
DeleteSo many things pass into the void and leave us without a clue. This one made me think.
ReplyDeleteWell said Damyanti!
DeleteBrilliant work! Brevity, truly, is an art and u master it. The vocab was top notch as well..
ReplyDeleteReminded me of one of my own old works, in Hindi...similar train of thought..
http://me-and-my-darkside.blogspot.com/2011/07/blog-post.html
I know only one thing and that is brevity. It's funny when I take part it contests and writing challenges, only thing I check and feel little jealous is the length of others' posts. I can't elaborate :P
DeleteWould love to read it, in fact reading it right now.
This is so beautiful! And these:
ReplyDeleteFrom swivet in my words,
To our passionate rendezvous.
Memoirs still enchant,
Dull evenings of all seasons.
LOVED these lines! :)
We always have same favorite. I also love the beginning of it. Swivet is one of my favorite words.
DeleteGlad you liked it, welcome back :)
lovely! and to that girl I would say, it would do to know it's not ur fault girl...
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteA break-off poem. What went wrong - cool yaar!
ReplyDeleteNothing like that!
DeleteVery touching poem Saru! A person is so lucky when someone could read their silence too as they read their words.
ReplyDeleteTrue that! :)
DeleteLovely!!! Poem...
ReplyDeleteThank you...
DeleteOuch! That hurts Punam, isn't it?
ReplyDeleteBeautifully expressed!! I felt in love with this poetry right from the first lines "Purple days of life,Faded to azure blue" :) :) Loved it!! Wish men would understand this silence of a woman...frankly i think it our greatest strength, yet often it is misread...
ReplyDeleteIt is indeed our greatest strength. Thanks for reading dear :)
DeleteAs always, soulful, poignant and endearing. Saru, I wish I could write as beautifully as you.
ReplyDeleteI wish I could write like you, Sonia. :)
DeleteLoved it...:) Reading your post after a long time, loved every line of it...:)
ReplyDeleteWelcome back Prashanth! You were missed :)
DeleteSoulful! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteBeautiful..Silence indeed speaks louder. Being a girl I know this, silence is powerful as well. It works every time for me :p ;).
ReplyDeleteI particularly liked- "And I find happiness in the residue." :D
It works for everyone, I guess. Thanks for reading Namrata.
DeleteWow Saru... touching poem !!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sneh!
DeleteThe last line touched a chord with me. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteThe depth of your work is always prodigious. Amazing, like always. :)
ReplyDeleteComing from you, that's a huge compliment. Thanks! :)
DeleteAmazing. Could totally relate! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
Deletelived it :) loved it..
ReplyDeleteThank you Ankita :)
DeleteVery deep and mournful thoughts. My fav lines:
ReplyDeleteIf it's still fresh and I find happiness in the residue
Then what went wrong? I have no clue.
I can connect to this...Ankita took my words already....
PS: it was a long way scrolling down for an eager reader to jot down her comments :) - The appreciation is endless.
Seriously, can't understand why few things end. They made us happy, they make us happy, even in the residue. I am speaking generally, not only for love stories.
DeleteThanks for reading Vidhya and for a lovely comment. :)
Very nice poem:-)
ReplyDeletethe background art is done by you? or you write a poem on random art ..
please let me know how can i do it
I search for free backgrounds on net. Glad you like the poem.
DeleteSimply wonderful Saru!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteIts touchy line or realization "What went wrong? I have no clue "
ReplyDeletereally nice saru! :)
Thank you, dear :)
DeleteWelcome back!
lovely ..
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