She walks in beauty
Never,
Never before,
I cursed the silting sand.
It kissed my naked torso,
I even passed it through my hand.
Sun shined above,
Sea sang a perfect song.
Those shapeless beads argued,
Asked what went wrong?
Flawless, petite,
Anklet dangled in perfect rhyme.
She walked in beauty,
Smelt lemon in summertime.
Breathless... I chased her,
Mindlessly on that beach.
And I cursed daring sand,
For kissing her beautiful feet.
Later, I tucked this note on her windshield ~
Aapke paon dekhe, bahut haseen hai.
Inhe zameen par mat utariyega, maile ho jayenge...
*Image Source - Google
Really you put it on the wind shield? aha just asking...lovely lines though
ReplyDeleteI bet, I would have done it. I am loud in expressing love ;)
DeleteNIce one, check this out to , my poem GIRL'S GAIT
ReplyDeletehttp://braddugg.blogspot.in/2013/01/girls-gait.html
Sure, thanks for sharing Brad.
DeleteYou know this brings out so many beautiful memories...and I feel like sharing. This boy...junior to me...well he could not say it in words as others could but I still remember his innocent words which made me feel beautiful for the very first time. And he said"...the pink around the edges of ur feet I just love to see it all the time...looks like you had applied altar and it got washed away." Of course he said many things which I laughed away just because he was a junior and that's how our mind is conditioned. But I wish I could've reciprocated...I wish I wish. of course Pakeeza and Kamal Amrohi...the words...I used it too much later to make a parody when I had to become Anarkali and someone had to say just one dialogue impromptu. Look what ur poetry does to me Saru...I go down so many memory lanes. Definitely u can sense how I can identify what made u compose these...when u did. True some feet really look very beautiful...just like how Rajkumar in the movie said but in reality it could be that people with beautiful feet may not really be beautiful at all. I mean of that which is skin deep. I know of such a lady who owns a beautiful feet but I'd rather stay away from her than to even look at her what to talk of chasing her. Thanks for sharing this. Enjoyed it. Have a lovely Tuesday. Jai Hanuman Jai Sri Ram :)
ReplyDeleteApologies there was a typo there read alta for altar...and I hope u know what that means...that color we married Hindu ladies apply to color our feet. :)
ReplyDeleteYeah, I know alta. That was such a sweet incident. Yes, few things are beautiful enough to let us jog down the memory lane. Thanks for sharing, Shivani.
DeleteWhat beautiful words. I really wish I knew what that note said!
ReplyDeleteIt says - I saw your feet, they are very beautiful. Don't put them on ground, it will get dirty. It's one of the most popular dialogue of Bollywood.
DeleteAah...a lovely Pakeezah moment there! Nicely done, Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Beloo :)
DeleteWow ! old memories of Pakeezah came alive. Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Ma'am.
DeleteSuch a beautiful poem with simplicity... loved your play with words here. And that picture is so apt :)
ReplyDeleteActually, I bumped into this picture. Thanks for a lovely comment, Nandita.
DeleteA lovely poem.. And I loved the ending. :)
ReplyDeleteYour poem and the couplet at the bottom brought back memories of the classic PAKEEZA as well as the sheer romance of the words.
ReplyDeleteGlad, this poem brought such happy memories. Thanks for reading, Ma'am.
Deletebeautiful one :)
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteI wonder how you are able to do this every time. Yes, every time you write something new and touches our soul by such mesmerizing words. So beautiful, so serene. Every time you create a master piece..
ReplyDeleteSpeechless and feeling blessed right now. A thank you will mar the beauty of your comment.
Delete<3 <3 <3
awwwwww acha .. such lovely feet hmmmmmmmmmm :)
ReplyDeleteBikram
Hehehehe...
DeleteVery beautiful Saru
ReplyDeleteThank Jaishree!
DeleteWhat a lovely rhyme! Amazing flow of words, Saru!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sir.
DeleteBeautiful, as usual. To write a well versed poem around a thought as small as 2 lines of an age old song, is a gift.
ReplyDeleteMay I suggest something, try changing stanzas in your poems. It's easier to convey the rhyme and the flow of thoughts.
By stanzas, you mean spacing between the verses?
DeleteThanks for reading. :)
A lovely poem Saru..
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteLovely!!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteBeautiful poem, Saru, soaked deep in love.
ReplyDeleteThanks Arti.
DeleteNice!
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteLovely lines Saru..straight from the heart.. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeletePakiza dialogue was icing on the cake,beautiful
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteBTFUL
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DeleteOh ho, Pakizah wala dialog! Bahut khoob.
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteReally a beautiful poem .
ReplyDeleteLoved it :)
Thanks Palak!
DeleteThere is a certain beauty in the lines where the narration changes from I to She. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks.
DeleteLovely! The words bring out vivid imagery...
ReplyDeleteThanks dear :)
DeleteShe seems like a distant dream, an ungettable mystery to me, unforgetable nevertheless.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem!
Cheers,
Blasphemous Aesthete
What a beautiful comment. Thanks for reading, Anshul.
DeleteSo cool, Saru! summer time, Sand & Sensuous beauty! :)
ReplyDeleteTotally! :)
DeleteVery sensuous, Saru. Beautifully penned !
ReplyDeleteThank you.
Deletelovely!!
ReplyDeleteThanks
DeleteWow lovely lines, falling in love is such a romantic thing,its the very essence of life and your lines mean just that.
ReplyDeleteTrue and thanks for a lovely comment, Nima.
DeleteBeautiful poetry!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful
ReplyDeletebeautiful poetry :)
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeleteMemories of the beautiful Meena Kumari and Pakejha came to my mind. Saru, I would put this way :
ReplyDeleteblessed is the sand
which kissed her soles
and hugged her bare hand
settling down on her face as moles.
That's lovely, Kalpana.
DeleteWhat a beautiful poem! Rekindled memories from the yesteryear's epic Bollywood romances! Alas! Now-a-days Love is spelled in a different tone.
ReplyDeleteAlas! Love seems to have lost its soul.
DeleteLovely lines Beautiful poetry :))
ReplyDeleteThanks Sanjay!
Deletelove and it's nuances :)
ReplyDeletebeautiful Saru
Glad!
DeleteJust love it! Wondering how the words become lively!
ReplyDeleteRegards,
Sindhu
Tantu
The Arts & Me
Thanks Sindhu!
DeleteVery beautiful poem Saru! I loved this sentence "Anklet dangled in perfect rhyme" So melodious!
ReplyDeleteThanks you so much, Valli :)
DeleteBeautiful :)
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteBeautiful poem... amazingly written. I loved it :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much and welcome here. :)
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