There, I said it!
Ample space in my closet
Still feel like a bird in cage
Oceans dried up - empty and barren
My closet is just that space
If you have come this far,
And made sense of first four lines.
I salute your creative genius,
And your intelligence just blew my mind.
Neither I can understand such depth,
Nor I read any such piece.
Even Shakespeare's skeleton shakes up,
Hearing these weird writing techniques.
If a leaf falls from the tree,
Let the poor soul be at rest.
By mixing tea cup and grave,
What are you trying to suggest?
Rhyme-meter-syllable-style,
I can still manage to care.
But what the hell is a cobweb doing?
In a poem on love affair.
I understand your in-depth analysis,
The profound thought, a different point of view.
But world is too simple,
Too stupid to understand a genius like you.
Four outdated words - unrhymed,
Use thesaurus on just a few.
Switch between unrelated subjects,
There - a poem too profound to construe.
Superb, outstanding, brilliant,
Such lauds will obviously flow.
As most of your readers are marveling,
At your ability to write 100 lines on homeless crow.
I don't claim to be a poet,
It's too heavy a term for me.
I write simple rhymes,
In which two plus one is generally three.
hello Saru, well said...i also Like that you care about rhyme and meter :)
ReplyDeletepoetry looks best when it is flowing and simple. enjoyed the post :)
ReplyDeleteEven I think so.
Delete* wonders if this Gayle is targeting me * O:-)
ReplyDeletethat aside, I agree. some poems are just too deep to make sense of what the writer is trying to say. I do write such pieces at times, though I don't think there is that much depth that'll flummox and confund you :)
No, whatever I have read from you is good and easy to comprehend. But, there are many whom I can't understand and my problem is they say harsh things about others' work. If you are an artist, you ought to be humble, receptive and try to appreciate others.
Deleteexcellent :)
ReplyDeleteI agree. Well-versed :)
ReplyDeleteI know quite a few "poets" who fall in this category.
Me too :)
DeleteYou had me rolling in laughter there, Saru. You know, I am quite dense when it comes to poetry but simple verses by you always win my hearth. Very tongue in cheek!
ReplyDeleteEven I love to read that kind of poetry. As far as I am concerned, I have a simple rule - easy writing for blog and if it's for literary purpose, I write intense.
DeleteGlad that you like my poems. Thanks Rachna. :)
You certainly are a poet my dear :)
ReplyDeleteHehehe... thank you :)
DeleteThere you said it for me too, Saru. I am also a patron and sometimes (which happens rarely) creator of simple rhymes as well as stories :) But you are a poetess, without any doubt.
ReplyDeleteAh, that's extremely sweet of you Roohi. Simple or intense, write what you feel. Expression is secondary to feelings.
DeleteHe he. True, Saru. Simple rhymes always win the heart.
ReplyDeleteEven I think so, Kiran.
DeleteHaha ..What is cob web doing in a poem of love affair...this one is brilliant.. :-)
ReplyDeleteThe KISS (Keep it simple stupid) theory applies here too.
I feel it applies everywhere. :)
DeleteHa ha ha!! Superb !!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Prateek!
DeleteBrilliant!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sir. :)
DeleteLovely....:-) Felt good after reading
ReplyDeleteThanks Ami :)
Delete:)
ReplyDeleteLoved it...just started and then it went on all by itself in a flow...
Thanks Manish!
DeleteBeautiful poem Saru.. One more thing you an awesome poet, its not a heavy term for you :
ReplyDeleteElated, thanks Anjali! :)
DeleteHey Saru, as always I love your poetry.. another classic piece with optimum rhythm and meter. Hats off! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks dear!
DeleteWell expressed in rhyming words too, Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Anita. Good to see you back. :)
DeleteI understand your in-depth analysis,
ReplyDeleteThe profound thought, a different point of view.
But world is too simple,
Too stupid to understand a genius like you.
you are one of the most appreciative poetess .very brilliant words !!
Thank you so much for your generous words.
DeleteI get you Saru.Some poets write only for themselves and i am left berating my brains.Some others just put together highfalutin words-no sentiment at all.I have stopped reading such poems.
ReplyDeleteSame here, ma'am. I read with which I can connect.
DeleteNicely said, well this one was bouncers surely but I have read some complex poems where first read would have been not understood but when you read it again its beautiful!
ReplyDeleteI like simple poems too, not sure of leaders find time simple lol
I have no problem with any kind of poem, but making it profound only with heavy vocabulary, sans soul is something I don't feel like reading.
DeleteYou write beautiful dear.
U always manage to make the best out of simple words...and I simply love that...excellent words and rhyming...specially "I don't claim to be a poet, it's too heavy a term for me". ...
ReplyDeleteIt's like raising the ordinary to extraordinary. :)
Thanks Dipanwita for a heart warming comment. :)
DeleteYou're definitely a poet, Saru and, I like your rhyming sense very much... :-) Simple words sometimes say great things...
ReplyDeleteI agree, simple words often say great things. Thanks for a lovely comment, Maniparna :)
DeleteSimplicity is the mother of all virtues Saru...And may I ask, why the first four lines are in bold?
ReplyDeleteIt's not my style of writing, I highlighted it to show the contrast.
DeleteI like both simple rhymes and intricate verses. And I like reading your poems, Saru :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Purba.
DeleteBeautifully worded. Agree to have poems with simple words and flow. Great work indeed mam.
ReplyDeleteThis line made me laugh...
" Even Shakespear's skeleton shakes up. "
Enjoyed a lot while going through it.
Thank you, Ashish.
DeleteI like all kinds of poetry!
ReplyDelete:)
DeleteBeautiful Saru. I loved the last few lines. Simply brilliant and modest :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Vinay!
DeleteLOL.....love it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Lata!
DeleteWow! I salute to this genius for a wonderful masterpiece though! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, thank you :)
DeleteWah Saru...ekdam splendid hai....:) Hats off.... (though I am not wearing one at the moment)
ReplyDeleteHahaha... Thank you!
DeleteYou are a gifted poet.
ReplyDeleteWhy don't you participate in the 'All India Poetry Competition 2015'?
www.indianpoetry.org
I think you will surely win a prize.
Thanks, I will check it out.
Deletelol...very nice and apt
ReplyDeleteExcellent! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteJhakaas! Shakespeare is shaken! yes you are a poet of Masses, who includes me. As i can easily read and understand what you've written. Loved this one.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ajay. It's quite reassuring. :)
DeleteHAIL Saru!!
ReplyDeleteHehehe...
DeleteHahaha good one ;). But I am sure keeping all things aside you are an amazing poet and have your way with words :). Keep going as always!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Aseem :)
DeleteLol this is an awesome writing.. Saru, your poems impress me much!! :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Meera. :)
DeleteI started reading very seriously. I'm quite slow in catching up poems, you see. Lost my way halfway. Then began again... Again lost. Then, decided to go through the comments and found out that it was a take on certain kind of poets.
ReplyDeleteBegan again and successfully stumbled through. :)
You know? I found it very smoothly flowing like languid waves in a lazy ocean. And, yes. You are a great poet. I vouch for that! :)
Glad you liked it. And thanks for a lovely compliment. :)
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